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Ek Ghazal Likhne Ki Koshish Mein Jo Lafaz Hamse Likha Gaya -
15th March 2009, 08:44 PM
Dear All members, meri aap sab se guzarish hai ke main yaha apni poetry ko chipka raha hoo  heheh aap sab parhiye agar kisi ko koi galati nazar aye to please us ki correction keriye aap ki islaah aur aap ne mashwaro ka mutmani ho ... buhat nawazish hogi aap sab ki madad ki. Shukriya aap ka apna Rijaan .................................................. ..................................... Ek Ghazal Likhne Ki Koshish Mein Jo Lafaz Hamse Likha Gaya Woh Unka Hi Naam Thaa Jo Baar Baar Likha Gaya Maangate Rahe Mere Sukhe Lab Unse Ek Panaha Pyaar Ki Woh Saaya Sa Ban Ke Hamaare Pass Se Gujar Gaya Hamne Chaha Ki Aaj Chupke Se Chum Le Hum Chaand Ki Palko Ko Per Subeh Hote Hi Woh Mera Khawab Tute Aaiene Sa Tut Gaya Ruke They Hum Unki Aankho Ke Samander Mein Dubane Ke Liye Woh Ek Laher Si Ban Ke Mere Pass Se Bas Gujar Gaya Na Jaane Kitne Zakham Khaaye Hamne Unki Mohabbat Mein Har Baar Woh Naye Zakham De Kar Aur Dard De Ke Chala Gaya Apni Haato Ki Lakreero Mein Hamne Na Paaya Thaa Naam Unka Unko Paane Ke Liye Mera Vajood Apni Taqdeer Tak Se Lad Gaya Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya, Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai, Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!! |
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16th March 2009, 04:59 PM
Rijan ji, bahot hi khub, kafi acha likha hai appne, likhte rahe nikhar ata rehenga, take care bye
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe, hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai, ‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe - ELIYAS SHAIKH |
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salam -
18th May 2009, 05:56 PM
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thank's A lot rep me bhai allah hafiz Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
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19th May 2009, 11:53 AM
Aadaab rijaan shahab,
Pehli baar aapko padhne ka mauka mila hai, jazbaat ahche lage, bas ye kehna chahuNga ki aapne ghazal likhne ki jo kosish ki hai usme thodi si chook ho gayi, aapke poore kalaam me qaafiya(the rhyming words) nahiN hai umeed karuNga ki is forum ke upar rules n technicalities of ghazal writing pe aap gaur farmaayeNge, takeenan usse aapko bahut faayeda hoga...!! Alla Hafiz Ghayal ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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thank you -
19th May 2009, 08:02 PM
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thank you ghayal bahi.. aap ka bhoot bahoot sukriya jo aap ne hame apni kami dikhlai mai ummid karurga is baat ko puri karne ki ok.... allha hafiz ........ Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya, Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai, Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!! |
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21st May 2009, 03:27 PM
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Rijaan jee, Ghazal ki baarikiyo.n ke baare me.n to hum jyada nahi jaante par haan ehsaas dil ko chhoo gaye........... khaas kar ke aakhiri sh'er.. bahut khoob. yun hi likhte rahiye... God bless you... khush rahiye.. aapki ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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21st May 2009, 06:46 PM
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bahut khoob RIJAAN..............................awesome dear.........keep it up.....   "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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hi how r u -
24th May 2009, 06:26 PM
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hi how r u ritu thank you jo aap ne hamari kami eheshash to dikha diya ham bhi jante the shayri ghazal in sab ki bare jyada nahi jante lkin inshan ki koi ek achi koishi ushe sab khuch shikha deti aap ka bahot bahot sukriya jo aap ne hamari ghazal ko paand kar ke ushe pahechan di Hasraton ki Nigaaho pe sakht Pehra hai… Na Jaane Kis Ummid pe yeh Dil tehra hai… Teri Chaahaton ki Kasam, aye Dost… Apni Dosti ka Rishta Pyaar Se bhi Gehra hai… Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya, Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai, Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!! |
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24th May 2009, 06:31 PM
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thank' a lot lamha ji sabse pahele aap ka id to bahot khubsurat hai ispar muje ek sher yaad aaya pasand aaye to rep jarur dena aap ka dost rijaan.... Har Lamha Mujhe Khamosh Hai Nazar Aata… Door Tujhse Gar Hota To Main Mar Jata… Aaj Ek Judai Ki Lehar Ne Tode Mere Kinare To Yun Kaise Main Tujhse Door Chala Jata… Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya, Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai, Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!! |
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26th May 2009, 06:54 PM
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masha allah....................bahut khoob RIJAAN...............keep it up.... aur haaaa.....mera real naam bhi LAMHA hi hai,ye sirf mera id nahi.....thanx ... "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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hi -
2nd October 2009, 09:33 PM
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hi lamha jikaishe ho aaj kafi dino baad yaad aai hame aur hamse raha nahi gaya isi liye aaj aap sabi logo ki yaadonemuje yaha khich laya................ aur ha repdena jarur ab mai shayri post tokabhi nahi karurga lekin jab bhi aap ki yaad aaye to jarur chala aauga..........by tc Usko chaha bhi to iqraar karna na aaya,
Kat gayi umr, hamein pyar karna na aaya, Usney maanga bhi agar kuch to maangi judaai, Aur ek hum thay ke inkaar karna na aaya!!!! |
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2nd October 2009, 10:40 PM
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Koshish zaari rakhiyegaa, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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