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Post bagon me jab jab..... - 25th December 2005, 09:57 AM

aadab doston,ek baar fir aap sabhi shayri ke ustadon ke saamne aapka ek nacheez dost apne ek chote se kalaam ke saath aaya hai.ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi,agar na aaye to plz bata dena...to pesh kar raha hoon ek aur toote hue dil ka nazrana.




bagon me jab jab gulab khilte hain,
is dil me tab teri yadon ke charag jalte hain.

intezar me unke ab ye zindgi guzregi yaron,
mohabbat ke ye hi sile to aksar milte hain.

kaun kahta hai ki wo door hain mujhse,
ab bhi wo meri saanso me khushbu ban ke palte hain.

aisi shama jalai hai usne bewafaai ki,
jisme har roz mere ishq ke parwane jalte hain.

unka saaya bhi jab na raha meri duniya me,
kyon mahsoos hota hai wo hi mera saaya banke chalte hain.

main kya mere ashqon ne bhi wafa nibhai hai unse,
bas unka naam sun ke hi aankhon se nikalte hain....
   
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DEar shoaib - 25th December 2005, 10:12 AM

very well said
shoaib ji keep writing ,aapki kavita padkar kuch dil mai aaya to use likh diya .

ye aansu bhi hamare kitne bewafa hai
humari muskarane ki kosish bekar kiye dete hain
kahi door unke naam ki aawaj se hi
hamre dard ko sare bajar aam kiya karte hai
wo bhul gaye humko ek nayi duniya mai jaakar
ye kyu aaj bhi unki yaad mai is tarah baha karte hain
kyu mere pyar ko sare rah badnaam kiya karte hain

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25th December 2005, 10:20 AM

bhai waah maan gaye.kya reply bheja hai,reply karne ka ye alag andaaz hame pasand aaya,
keep writing friend.
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25th December 2005, 10:42 AM

dono ki kavita padne ke baad ye natije par pahucha hu ke ab humein boriya bistar bandana padega aur site se alvida kehna padega...........................dono ne achi likhi hai


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25th December 2005, 10:51 AM

very well written... achha laga tumhe parh ke...take care!
   
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25th December 2005, 05:59 PM

mehul ji pahle to main aapko bata doon ki agar ab aapne esa kaha to main aapse kabhi baat nahi karunga.aap kahin nahi jaaenge,agar aapne boriya bisar baandh liya to batana,uske pahle main hi ye site chod kar chala jaaunga.mujhe pata hai aap mazaaq kar rahe hain thas y i m also kidding.waise reply k liye shukriya.likhte rahna ok dear byee.
   
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25th December 2005, 06:01 PM

shukriya parul ji aapko kalaam pasand aaya.ye meri khushnasibi hai.ese hi likhte rahna dear aap logon ka saath hi to zindgi hai warna aur is duniya me bacha hi kya hai.take care bye
   
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16th June 2007, 01:03 AM

waise hum bhi a gaye hein miah meine khud likha hai by da way !!!
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16th June 2007, 09:04 AM

Kya Khoob Likha Hai........keep On Writing
   
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shukriya offstreat and bewafa....yaar kya bataaen aaj itne din ke baad kisi ne is post ke liye dad dee badi khsuhi ho rahi hai par kya karen aaj kal darasal maine ye id band kar dee hai ap log hame padhna chahen to yahan aa sakte hain...khsuhi hui aapka reply padh kar ummed hai aate rahenge.,.
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bewafai - 17th June 2007, 04:00 PM

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aadab doston,ek baar fir aap sabhi shayri ke ustadon ke saamne aapka ek nacheez dost apne ek chote se kalaam ke saath aaya hai.ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi,agar na aaye to plz bata dena...to pesh kar raha hoon ek aur toote hue dil ka nazrana.




bagon me jab jab gulab khilte hain,
is dil me tab teri yadon ke charag jalte hain.

intezar me unke ab ye zindgi guzregi yaron,
mohabbat ke ye hi sile to aksar milte hain.

kaun kahta hai ki wo door hain mujhse,
ab bhi wo meri saanso me khushbu ban ke palte hain.

aisi shama jalai hai usne bewafaai ki,
jisme har roz mere ishq ke parwane jalte hain.

unka saaya bhi jab na raha meri duniya me,
kyon mahsoos hota hai wo hi mera saaya banke chalte hain.

main kya mere ashqon ne bhi wafa nibhai hai unse,
bas unka naam sun ke hi aankhon se nikalte hain....

chaha tha jis ko hum usse bhulaya na gaya,
jakham dil ka logo ko dikahya na gaya,
bewafai ke baad bhi itna payar karte hai uss se,
ki bewafai ki iljaam bhi uss per lagaya na gaya- silent-tears
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bhaot bhaot hukriya punjabi roop shukr hai jo abhi tak aapne hame yaad rakha..khush rahen aati rahen..
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bahot bahot shukriya silent tears..kaise hain aap shukriya ek baar fir is khoobsurat sher ke liye..aate rahna..
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