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Kwahish kar ke tuo bhool jaa - 1st April 2010, 08:24 PM

Deta dard wohi jo kareeb haiN
YahaN koun kiska habeeb haiN

Zindagi maut ke kareeb haiN
Kahi khanjar to kahi saleeb haiN

Dagaa maine kiya ya tune diya
Har naraz bus teri janeeb haiN

Yeh mehfil hai naam waloN kii
Qadar nahi uski jo gareeb haiN

Koi sukuN jite jee mila nahiN
YahaN zindagi hi rakeeb haiN

Kwahish kar ke tuo bhool jaa
Milenga wohi jo naseeb haiN


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1st April 2010, 08:42 PM

Sameer Ji......Aadaab ! aapki Yeh kalam meter me dikhaai di mujhe.....saare ashaar ....umdaa soch......aapke gehraai liye khayal aur behtreen adaayegi .... tamaam Ghazal ko pur asar banati lagi......matle se maqte tak......very nice creation.....

Yeh do sheyr dil ke khaas qareeb rahe.....

Zindagi maut ke kareeb haiN
Kahi khanjar to kahi saleeb haiN

Dagaa maine kiya ya tune diya
Har naraz bus teri janeeb haiN

tahe dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen....

yunhi likhte rahen....khush rahen.....

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...


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1st April 2010, 09:04 PM

Sameer jee,

Aadaab!!!

kaise hain aap? ghazal pasand aayii ... bas akhirr ka sher dil ke kareeb raha aur saacha bhi hain,

Kwahish kar ke tuo bhool jaa
Milenga wohi jo naseeb haiN

LIKHETY RAHE...

mehfil ko saajatey rahe...

khush rahe
duaaon ke saath

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Love 2nd April 2010, 02:26 PM

khwahish saheb kaise hain aap...?
lagta hai aapne humaari baat ko rakh liya....behad khushi hui....
aapki ghazal bahut hi badhiya hai....daad qubuul kijiyega.....
bas sirf ek chhoti si baat kehna chahta hooN i's umm'eed ke saath ki aapko bura nahi lagega.....
janaab "hai" ki jagha "haiN" istemaal karne se aapki ghazal kuchh 19 reh gayee....jahaN bhi aapne "haiN" ka istemaal kiya hai wahaN qayde se "hai" ka istemaal hona chahiye tha.....
baqi i's ghazal ke ehsaas behad badhiya lage....

yuN hi aate rahiye mehfil meiN....
apna khayal rakhiye.....
likhte rahiye....

duago,

masttt....


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Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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2nd April 2010, 05:59 PM

Kwahish kar ke tuo bhool jaa
Milenga wohi jo naseeb haiN


Ji yeh sher bahut khoob raha. dil se daad..



Radhika

Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye

Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye


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2nd April 2010, 06:00 PM

Kya mamla hai mere bhai.........kafi diljale se lag rahe ho............ajeeb si talkhi mehsoos ho rahi hai shero me.........Allah mere is pyare bhai ki har pareshani ko door kar de.

Bohat khoobsurat peshkash hai.....


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3rd April 2010, 08:09 AM

Sameer Bhai,

Wah bhai, aap ki dard se bharpoor yeh ghazal mujhe be-had
pasan aayi .....

Daad qabool kijiye....

Lekin bhai aap radeef mein "hai" ko "haiN" likh gaye...

Younhi acha aur achaa likhtay rahiye,

DuaooN k saath ijaazat,

Aap ka Bhai,,


*hSn* : parStaar

tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN...
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hahaha............Dil jala tou hai hi wo...aur uske zakm par mein namak mein lagata rehta hoon

Baqtiar saheb jab namak laga hi rahe hai............to achhci quality ka hi lagana jaise Tata Namak...


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Sameer Ji......Aadaab ! aapki Yeh kalam meter me dikhaai di mujhe.....saare ashaar ....umdaa soch......aapke gehraai liye khayal aur behtreen adaayegi .... tamaam Ghazal ko pur asar banati lagi......matle se maqte tak......very nice creation.....

Yeh do sheyr dil ke khaas qareeb rahe.....

Zindagi maut ke kareeb haiN
Kahi khanjar to kahi saleeb haiN

Dagaa maine kiya ya tune diya
Har naraz bus teri janeeb haiN

tahe dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen....

yunhi likhte rahen....khush rahen.....

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....
Naresh Jee AadaaB!

Tarif wa hounsla afzai ka tahe dil se shukra guzar huN........

Aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye,
Khush rahiye,
Khuda Hafez.........


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Sameer jee,

Aadaab!!!

kaise hain aap? ghazal pasand aayii ... bas akhirr ka sher dil ke kareeb raha aur saacha bhi hain,

Kwahish kar ke tuo bhool jaa
Milenga wohi jo naseeb haiN

LIKHETY RAHE...

mehfil ko saajatey rahe...

khush rahe
duaaon ke saath

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Mandeep Jee aadaab!

Im fine ummid hai aap bhi achchi hongi...

Gazal ki pasindidgi aur tarif ke liye tahe dil se shukrguzar hun.....
Aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye,

Khush rahiye,
Khuda Hafez...


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4th April 2010, 09:59 PM

Deta dard wohi jo kareeb haiN
YahaN koun kiska habeeb haiN

waah janaab kya baat hai khwaaiish ji bahooot khooob....ek bahoot hi khoobsoorat tehreer pesh ki hai janaab...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad haajir haiN....


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khwahish saheb kaise hain aap...?
lagta hai aapne humaari baat ko rakh liya....behad khushi hui....
aapki ghazal bahut hi badhiya hai....daad qubuul kijiyega.....
bas sirf ek chhoti si baat kehna chahta hooN i's umm'eed ke saath ki aapko bura nahi lagega.....
janaab "hai" ki jagha "haiN" istemaal karne se aapki ghazal kuchh 19 reh gayee....jahaN bhi aapne "haiN" ka istemaal kiya hai wahaN qayde se "hai" ka istemaal hona chahiye tha.....
baqi i's ghazal ke ehsaas behad badhiya lage....

yuN hi aate rahiye mehfil meiN....
apna khayal rakhiye.....
likhte rahiye....

duago,

masttt....
Vikram bhai Aadaab

Jee hum khariyat se hia ummid hai aap bhi khairiyat se honge....
Jee aap doston ki baat rakhna bhi zaruri tha, aur aapne jo bataya hai main usse samjhne ki koshish karunga coz mujhe iska ilm nahi ke hai aur haiN kahan aur kaise istemal karte hai,....

Daad ke liye shukriyaa ...
Aage bhi saath banaye rakhiye,
Khush rhiaye,
Khuda Hafez........


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Vikram bhai Aadaab

Jee hum khariyat se hia ummid hai aap bhi khairiyat se honge....
Jee aap doston ki baat rakhna bhi zaruri tha, aur aapne jo bataya hai main usse samjhne ki koshish karunga coz mujhe iska ilm nahi ke hai aur haiN kahan aur kaise istemal karte hai,....

Daad ke liye shukriyaa ...
Aage bhi saath banaye rakhiye,
Khush rhiaye,
Khuda Hafez........
bahut achha kiya janaab, hum aapke shukguzaar haiN.....
ab rahi baat "hai" aur "haiN" ki to bhai agar main aapko na bata sakuN to mujhe likhne ka hi haq nahi tha....ek link de raha hooN, zaroor padhiyega....kaam aayega....

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=68702

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bahut achha kiya janaab, hum aapke shukguzaar haiN.....
ab rahi baat "hai" aur "haiN" ki to bhai agar main aapko na bata sakuN to mujhe likhne ka hi haq nahi tha....ek link de raha hooN, zaroor padhiyega....kaam aayega....

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=68702

na kaam bane to bataiyega....aur kisi tarha koshish kareNge...
J vikram jee main samjh gaya..... Aapka bahut bahut shukriyaa...


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Shukriyaa janab Baktiyaar sahab...... ZakhmoN per namak na lage to zindagi mein maza nahi aata..... Aur koi na koi to hona hi chahiye naa marham lagane wala.....

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Khwahish ji,

Aapki Ghazal bohat achhi lagi Daad kubul kijiye!

Aur muskurate rahiye!

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