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Mann Bawara hota hai -
1st May 2010, 07:01 PM
Naresh je ke kahne per maine ek kavita likhi hai, kavita likhane ka shaukh mujhe bachpan se hi hai Per bad mein kavita ka sahukh shayri mein badal gaya aur main kavita se tuti futi tahreere likhane Laga… par ab kavita likhana mujhe bahut hi mushkil sa gaya hai… main bahut sochne aur kayin vicharo Ke bad yeh kavita likhi hai…… Ummid karta hun Naresh jee aapko pasand aayengi aur baki padhne walon ko bhi… Kavita ka saransh de duN.. taki aap samjhne mein chuke nahi… Is kavita mein ek garbhwati maa Apne hone wali santaan se apne dil ki baaten kah rahi hai…. Shayad aadhunik yug ki maayen aisa Sochti nahi per maine itehasik maa ke Hraday ka ullekh kiya hia…. Mann Bawara hota hai zara sambhal kar chalna rasta dekhte hi chal na padna waqt sukhi ret ki tarha hai haat mein nahi thaharta Kewal lakhsya ki sochna lakshya hia murgtushna pyaasa rah ker bhi tuu gili mitti sa hii rahna sapne hia mata pita ke tu har sapne mein dhalna Kasam hia tujhe darti maa ki Chahe suni meri goad ho jaye Desh ke prati tu samman rakhna Tu sachcha desh bhakt hi nikalna Mann Bawara hota hai zara sambhal kar chalna rasta dekhte hi chal na padna 
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7th May 2010, 08:27 AM
waqt sukhi ret ki tarha hai
haat mein nahi thaharta Kewal lakhsya ki sochna lakshya hia murgtushna pyaasa rah ker bhi tuu gili mitti sa hii rahna sapne hia mata pita ke tu har sapne mein dhalna Sameer Ji....Aadaab ! aapki nawaazish hai.....aapne meri guzaarish par itni sundar kavita ki rachna ki.....sach me aapka yeh naya andaaz mujhe behad pasand aaya.....rachna ke ehsaas dil ko chhu gaye....khaas kar upar likhi panktiya....bahut khoob lagi mujhe.... puri kavita ko dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen.... aise hi khoobsurat ehsaas se hume ru-ba-ru karaate rahen.... khush rahen.... apna khayal rakhen.... duaaon ke saath.....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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22nd June 2010, 11:41 PM
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Aap hi se maine kavita likhane ki prerna lii, aur aap hi ko main yeh kavita samarpit karta huN ..... main to kavita likhana kab ka bhool chuka tha....  Per aapne nayi disha aur himmat dii...... Aur main iske liye aapka aabhari huN...... Kavita ko pasand karne ka bahut bahut dhanyawad...... Aage bhi apna margdarshan dete rahiye....... Maine aapki guzarish to puri kar dii per aapne meri guzarish puri nahi kii...... aapki likhi upanyaas ko yahan prakashit karne kii...... Ummid hai jaldi hi meri guzarish puri hogi....... Aap bhi khush rahiye..... Apna khyaal rakhiye...... Khuda Hafez........
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Niceee -
23rd June 2010, 01:03 AM
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Ek baat kahe aapse?? ... hume likhana karna aata nahi, naa hi techniques ka koi knowledge hai .. par hume aapki likhi .. shayris unme chhipe ehsaas achchhe lagate hai ..aur aapki Kavita bhi pasand aayi .. .. hum ummid karenge ki aapse aur bhi achchhi achchhi kavitaayen padhane mile ... .. Its just a request .. agar aapko pasand naa aaye to .. I am sorry... Aur Naresh Ji ... ko bhi Thank You, kyon ki aapne kaha hai ki Naresh Ji ke kahene par aapne Kavita likhi hai ..so unake Kahene ki wajhaa se hume aapki itani pyaari Kavita padhane mili .. Thank You Naresh Ji uumm ..Kwahish Ji .. wo aapki Kavita mai ek shabd ka matlab hume samajh nahi aaya .. "murgtushna" iska matlab kya hota hai .... if you can please explain it to me... Bhagwaan Ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe, Aapki Dost: Gudia Khuda Hafiz, Jay Ambe. Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani...... ------------------------------------------------------------ Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai, Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai, Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi, Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi. |
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23rd June 2010, 01:29 AM
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Main aapka bahut aabhari huN ke aapne meri yeh kavita padhi aur saraha per aapne itni jyada tareef kar dii ke main khushi se phule nahi sama raha huN........ per meri is kavita ka maan maiN Naresh jee ko hi dunga kyuNki sirf unke kahne se hi mere si bachpan ke shauk ne punar jivan prapt kiya hai ....... Naresh jee ka maiN bahut aabhari huN.....Jee koshish karunga ke phir se kavita likhuN....... Aapne kaha ke murgtushna ke meanings batauN, to murgtushna ko aur dusre lafzoN mein kahenge "tishnagi" jo registaaN mein pani ka bhaas hota hai, per pani nahi rahta sirf dikhai deta hia use murgtrushna kahte hai...... Ummid hia aap ab murgtrushna ke mayne samajh gayi hogi..... aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye..... Khush rahiye........ Apna khyaal rakhiye.... Khuda Hafez......
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27th June 2010, 03:28 AM
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Aur abhi fir aapki ye kavita dubaara padhi ...aur hume is kavita ko fir se padhanaa bhi bahot achchha laga .. likhate rahiye.... Bhagwaan Ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe, Aapki Dost:- Gudia Khuda Hafiz, Jay Ambe Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani...... ------------------------------------------------------------ Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai, Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai, Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi, Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi. |
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