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chaand aaj bhut khus hein -
8th April 2003, 07:30 PM
chaand aaj bhut khus hein
uski chaandni uske saath hein chandni ko bada naaz hein uske chaand ka bada noor hein mera dil bada udaas hein mera chaand kho giya hein tare aaj naach rahe hein meri aankhon se moti beh rahe hein chaandni aaj bhut nikhri hein chaand aaj bhut khush hein i hope u will like it bye |
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hi -
8th April 2003, 07:38 PM
hi
i thought it needed some improvement aur tum yoonhi tareef karne lage ho well thanx alot hum khush hove ke aapko pasand aayi pata nahein kiyoon dil mein aage se change kar doon kiyon ke its in shayri e gham and it matched the linesn e ways thanx take care bye |
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8th April 2003, 08:13 PM
jaaise chand bahut khas hai vaise hi aapne likha bhi bahut khas hai !
likhti rahiye isi tarah |
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8th April 2003, 11:36 PM
Aadab arz hai Romana ji, kaisi hai aap???
waah bahut achcha likha hai aapne.. dua kerta hoo ki aapko aapka chand jaldi mile aur aapko bhi usper naaz ho... aur aap dono hamesha khus rahe.... shukriya... aise hi likhti rahiye aur muskurati rahiye... |
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hi -
9th April 2003, 03:37 PM
anas
tum baaz nahein aao ge i think khushi aapko bhut ho rahi thi and u shuld have wrote sumthing is well ne way well said i agree with u. bye kshitizji aur bedil musafir ji thanx alot for ur lovely comments and for reading the poem take care bye |
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9th April 2003, 04:55 PM
Nice poem Romana
 It has a certain 'flow' to it.. jaise lafz paani ke tarah beh rahe hon.. ekdum... umm... rythmic! I look forward to reading more of your works.. .. they might inspire me  Anas, thats a good suggestion actually.. aap ise 'Suggestion Forum' me post kyon nahin karte.. I think that would work better. |
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9th April 2003, 05:06 PM
hehehe.. haan humne yeh phada dekha.. jaldi se solve ho jaye to achha hai..
 log yahan sirf dard baatne aate hain???.. Phir to yeh trend change karne hi hoga! .. dard baatne ke saath saath agar thodi si khushi bhi bat jaaye to phir ayega maza zindagi hazaaron rangon ka. Dekhte hain.. hum to ab saturday ko hi kuch naya post kar sakte hain.. lets see, tab tak kuch 'happy' shayri humare chhote se intellect me aati hai ya nahin |
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9th April 2003, 05:10 PM
hi guys
thanx alot bunoo aap ne ko meri shayri pasand aai badi baat hein its not that good but still thanx alot and anas i think there shuld be a chat room is well so all us mates can chat togather ne way sum ppl want to share their happiness is well dukh bantne se kam bi hota aur dukh bi deta hein par khushi dukh ko kam karti hein chahe vo doosru ki hi kiyon na ho bye |
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9th April 2003, 05:16 PM
Anas: DEAL!
.. aap humare saath is me shaamil ho yeh jaan kar achha laga.. to saturday tak aap bhi kuchh achha sa, khushi bhara payaam likh dena!.. Saath saath post kar denge! Romana: Aapne bilkum sahi kaha.. doosron ki khooshi dekh kar hume bhi khushi hoti hai.. unfortunately, kuchh log aise bhi hote hai khushi ki ahat se bhi jinka ghum badta hai.. and THATS sad.. still, hume koshish karni to chahiye.. bhale hi ummeede naummeed karen, hosla to choddna nahin chahiye.. |
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9th April 2003, 05:25 PM
Yeh Ghalib hume kabhi samajh nahin aayega!
 Hume urdu nahin aati  .. zara aap yeh sher explain karenge? |
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9th April 2003, 08:35 PM
wah romana g app na kamal ka likha ha. ma wasa bhi ziada ter shayri e ishq per shayri perti ho. kyu ka itna time hi nahi ho ta ha ka dosra colums ma jao. any ways nice written likhti rahiya ga. allahhafiz
Anjane Mein Mujko Woh Shayar Bana Gaya |
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10th April 2003, 04:53 AM
wasa banoo app ka or anas ka khayal acha ha. waqi ma yaha per chat room zaror ho na chahiya. or dosro ka sath itna dukh bhi nahi shayr kerna chahiya ka dosra kuch ziada hi dukh ma mubtala ho jaya. thoir khusiya bhi ho to achi baat ha.
ok bye take care Anjane Mein Mujko Woh Shayar Bana Gaya |
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10th April 2003, 11:55 AM
Chalo, Anas ke 'Khushi Forumm' ko ek aur saathi mil gaya!
.. Anas, agar apki ijaazat ho hum 'Suggestions' foum me yeh post kardeten hain.. phir dekhte hain hote hai kya. Kya khayal hai apka? |
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chandni ho tum apnae chand ki |
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chandni ho tum apnae chand ki -
10th April 2003, 02:39 PM
romanaji,
yah kya? aap intzaar to kijiyae aapka chand aapki .... raah se hi gujrega. aur.... motiyao ko samhaal kar rakhiyae yunh n bikhrne dijiyae |
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10th April 2003, 04:03 PM
hi zahra
kaise ho aap and thanx alot tumein shayri pasand aayi yeh mere liye khushi ki baat hein aur hosla afzai jo tum loogon ne ki vo mujhe likhne par majboor karti hein. bye hi meena ji tahnx for ur comments meena ji us chaand ka intazaar karne ka kiya faida jo kabhi hamara nahein ho sake ga jo kisi aur ka ban giya hein hum us chaand ki chandni nahein use to koi aur mil giya hein aur phir agar yeh mooti bikhar jai to hi acha hein kiyonke in ko sanbaalne ka matlib hein uski yaadein jo hum nahein rakhna chahte apne paas uski zindagi use mubarak vo jahan rahe khush rahe hum apni duniya mein hi teek chand ke bina bi to raat aati hein zaroori nahein ke chaand na ho to zindagi ko jeena hi choor diya jai ne way forget that and tahnx alot for ur support i really appriciate it bye hi anas hum ne to force nahein kiya aur na hi karenige kiyon ke aap ko agar likhna hein to khud likho koi kisi ke kehne se nahein likh sakta likhne ke liye dil chahiye aur jazba chahiye aur hum sab to sirf encourage kar sakte hein aap se likhwa nahein sakte and u know that u can write and really nice poems too magar aap bhut bao khate ho bye |
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10th April 2003, 08:22 PM
chaand aaj bhut khus hein
uski chaandni uske saath hein chandni ko bada naaz hein uske chaand ka bada noor hein mera dil bada udaas hein mera chaand kho giya hein tare aaj naach rahe hein meri aankhon se moti beh rahe hein chaandni aaj bhut nikhri hein chaand aaj bhut khush hein Bahut Alag likha hai aapne Romana ji,achha laga parkar.. Kaafi baar par chuka huun aapki yah nazm lekin abhi tak iski gehrai ko pehchaan nahin paaya huun.Bhaut hi achha likha hai aapne.. Shukriya isse saamne laane ka, Varinder chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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