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Arrow Jaane kya-kya nigal gaya paani - 24th June 2013, 03:40 PM

एक ग़ज़ल

इतना हद से निकल गया पानी
जाने क्या-क्या निगल गया पानी

जान देना जो उसकी फ़ितरत थी
जान लेकर निकल गया पानी

वक़्त ने जब नहीं सुनी उसकी
उसके लम्हे निगल गया पानी

कौनसी ज़िद पे अड़ गया आख़िर
बहते-बहते मचल गया पानी

हद से आगे जो बढ़ गया इन्सां
सर से ऊपर निकल गया पानी

-- प्रवीण सक्सेना---------------------

Itna hudd se nikal gaya paani
Jaane kya-kya nigal gaya paani

Jaan dena jo usski fitrat thhi
Jaan lekar nikal gaya paani

Waqt ne jab nahin suni uski
Uske lamhe nigal gaya paani

Zindagi ki khata thhi kaya aakhir
Usski soorat badal gaya paani

Kaunsi zidd pe ad gaya hai wo
Behte-behte machal gaya paani

Hudd se aage jo badh gaya insaaN
Sar se oopar nikal gaya paani

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एक ग़ज़ल

इतना हद से निकल गया पानी
जाने क्या-क्या निगल गया पानी

जान देना जो उसकी फ़ितरत थी
जान लेकर निकल गया पानी

वक़्त ने जब नहीं सुनी उसकी
उसके लम्हे निगल गया पानी

कौनसी ज़िद पे अड़ गया आख़िर
बहते-बहते मचल गया पानी

हद से आगे जो बढ़ गया इन्सां
सर से ऊपर निकल गया पानी

-- प्रवीण सक्सेना---------------------

Itna hudd se nikal gaya paani
Jaane kya-kya nigal gaya paani

Jaan dena jo usski fitrat thhi
Jaan lekar nikal gaya paani

Waqt ne jab nahin suni uski
Uske lamhe nigal gaya paani

Zindagi ki khata thhi kaya aakhir
Usski soorat badal gaya paani

Kaunsi zidd pe ad gaya hai wo
Behte-behte machal gaya paani

Hudd se aage jo badh gaya insaaN
Sar se oopar nikal gaya paani

- Praveen Saxena

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kya nayaab nageene ki tarah kalaam lekar aaye hain aap.. waahhh subhaan allaah..... Paani ki tarah saf alfaazo ehsaas.... meri jaanib se laakhon daad qubool kijiyegaa.....

Allaa majeed nawaaze.......

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25th June 2013, 11:46 AM

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Kamaal ki ghazal kahi hai aap ne.
Zindagi ki haqiqatoan se muzaiyen, alfaaz ki rawaani se aaraasta, Nihayet pur-asr.
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30th June 2013, 02:46 AM

kitni mayne hain is .. kitne ayaam.. naya taza dum kr dene wale paani ki tarah... bhut khoob.. dil khush ho gaya padh k ise..
   
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30th June 2013, 10:06 AM

praveen jee....bahut khoob likha hai aapne....ek ek aashaar dil ko hila ke gaya ....daad meri or se bhi....



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30th June 2013, 10:22 AM

waah bahaut khoob .... is juda andaaz ki ghazal par dheron daad apko Praveen ji
   
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Sultaan raaj - 3rd July 2013, 04:30 PM

Bahata khawob bahata paani..

Kuch kasmkas kuch begani..

Dil dariya maine ek oe kahani..

Bahata khawob bahata paani..

Dur tak fasla..

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6th July 2013, 01:57 AM

Bahut khoob likha hai Praveen Ji....padhne waalon ke liye to ye ek ghazal hi hogi....lekin humse poochho jinke kuch apne is paani mein beh gaye....aapne humaare dard ko apne khoobsoorat lafzo mein piro kar shaayad hamaari kahaani bayaan ki hai....shukriya janaab.



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6th July 2013, 07:24 PM

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Jawaab mein taakhiir ki maazrat chahta huuN. Ghazal ko dheroN daad se nawaazne ka bohat shukria. Inshaallah aage bhi mulaqaat hoti rahegi.

shukria phir ek baar

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kya nayaab nageene ki tarah kalaam lekar aaye hain aap.. waahhh subhaan allaah..... Paani ki tarah saf alfaazo ehsaas.... meri jaanib se laakhon daad qubool kijiyegaa.....

Allaa majeed nawaaze.......

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Shukria - 6th July 2013, 07:27 PM

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Shukria Mushy Bhai - 6th July 2013, 07:30 PM

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Ek taveel arse ke baad aapse kalam karke bohat achcha laga. Ghazal ko daad se nawaazne ka bohat bohat shukria. Ummees karta huuN ke aaindah hamari mulaqateiN aur jald hoNgi...

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Shuukria - 6th July 2013, 07:34 PM

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Shukria Sunita ji - 6th July 2013, 07:38 PM

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Jawaab meiN deri ke liye muafi chahta huuN. Aapse pehle bhi daad le chuka huuN is ghazal pe. dar asl in haalat ke manazar ne mujhe behad hila diya thha aur. Roz-naye hadse nayee khabreiN lag raha tha qayamat le aaya hai paaani. issiliye ye Ghazal ho gayi

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Shukria - 6th July 2013, 07:43 PM

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Thread par aane ka bohat shukria. Aaapka andaaz-e-daad bohat pasand aaya. Aapne bohat achchi lines likhi haiN. Meri jaanib se daad qubuul farmaayeN.

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Dur tak fasla..

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Dil ki bhi tarap kam nahi..

Jaise Bahata khawob bahata pani..
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Shukria - 6th July 2013, 07:55 PM

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जान देना जो उसकी फ़ितरत थी
जान लेकर निकल गया पानी

वक़्त ने जब नहीं सुनी उसकी
उसके लम्हे निगल गया पानी

कौनसी ज़िद पे अड़ गया आख़िर
बहते-बहते मचल गया पानी

हद से आगे जो बढ़ गया इन्सां
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Itna hudd se nikal gaya paani
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Kaunsi zidd pe ad gaya hai wo
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apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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Thread par aane ka bohat shukria. Aaapka andaaz-e-daad bohat pasand aaya. Aapne bohat achchi lines likhi haiN. Meri jaanib se daad qubuul farmaayeN.

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samyik ghatna par choti bahar me likhi ye ghazal yakeenan halat ki sach byaani karti lagi.


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एक ग़ज़ल

इतना हद से निकल गया पानी
जाने क्या-क्या निगल गया पानी

जान देना जो उसकी फ़ितरत थी
जान लेकर निकल गया पानी

वक़्त ने जब नहीं सुनी उसकी
उसके लम्हे निगल गया पानी

कौनसी ज़िद पे अड़ गया आख़िर
बहते-बहते मचल गया पानी

हद से आगे जो बढ़ गया इन्सां
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जान देना जो उसकी फ़ितरत थी
जान लेकर निकल गया पानी

कौनसी ज़िद पे अड़ गया आख़िर
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Wuaahhh Praveen saaheb

Shayri shayar ka aaina hoti hai..
Aapke jusbaat ashaar me bakhoobi dhale aur zehan o dil mein utar gaye ..

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Shukria - 5th August 2013, 03:12 PM

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Pranaam

sach ko bayaan karti huii aapki yeh Ghazal... dil ko bahot kuChh sochne par majboor kar gayiiN... maiN praarthna kartaa huuN un sab ke liye

apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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samyik ghatna par choti bahar me likhi ye ghazal yakeenan halat ki sach byaani karti lagi.
Ghazal pasand farmaane ka bohat shukria sakhi!


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बहते-बहते मचल गया पानी

wah bohat sunder ....................
Manshaa ji Gazal pasand farmaane ka bohat shukria!


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Shukria - 5th August 2013, 03:18 PM

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Wuaahhh Praveen saaheb

Shayri shayar ka aaina hoti hai..
Aapke jusbaat ashaar me bakhoobi dhale aur zehan o dil mein utar gaye ..

Humari daad qubool farmaaeiN
Khshiz bhai aap thread par aaye bohat achcha laga. Ghazal par daad ke liye bohat-bohat shukria!


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