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Love Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai - 6th June 2015, 02:59 PM
KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood

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6th June 2015, 04:10 PM
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood
ahhhhaaaaa bahut dil fareb gazal pesh ki hai bhai aapne padkar majja aaya.

"pyar se bhi pyari es gazal ko salaam,
Ooo yaar teri pehli nazar ko salaam"

yu hi pyar bhara likhte rho, khush rho.

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Waah jagdish jee....waah......kya likha hai....bahut hee dilfareb kalaam hai......


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bahut khub - 6th June 2015, 10:51 PM
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood
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Behatarin eskq ke darmiyan aapne pesh kiye hain.. laga ki sach mein kuchh tufaan aaya hai.. pahale pyar ka pahala paigaam aaya hai.. YuN dilo ko roshan kerte rahiye aur esq me ji bher gote lagaiye..

Shubhkamnao sahit,
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7th June 2015, 12:03 AM
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood

Ishq me aapka koi kalaam shayad pahli baar padh rahi hoon main....aur kya khoob muhabbat ke jazbe se range huye sabhi ashar huye hain ki bas padhte hee banta hai sagar sahab....bahut dilkash bahut khoob...yoon hee ishq ki mahfil sajate rahein.....

Likhte rahein...
aate rahein...


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Sagar ji,

Aapka kalaam padha, sach maniye ek ek lafz dil ko chu gaya. Bahaut Acacha likha hai aapne...am sure jitne khoobsurat aapke alfaaz hai ootni hi khoobsoorat aapki inspiration hogi.

Kuch share kar rahe hain apne kisi Bahaut kareeb ke liye likha hai.

Kehte ho khudko deewana mera, rehte ho Tum bhi Zehan mai mere
Dekho toh kis mod pe dono ko yeh pyar le aaya hai

Rehti hai fiqr Tumhari raat din, oothte hain Yeh haath Tumhari dua mai
Kaisa Yeh bandhan Kaisa yeh rishta tumse ban aaya hai

Couldn't touch the level of your poetry but these were just some feelings.

Please keep writing. Pleasure to read you.

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7th June 2015, 09:06 PM
Jagdish ji aapka kalam per ker wakay meiN mehsoos ho raha ki
pehle khat ka salam aya hai ....

Likte raho aur bazm ki raunak badate raho..

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7th June 2015, 09:12 PM
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood


Saagar saahab tak shaad kaa aadaab pahuche......... bhai aap ne to jaise kamaal likh diyaa ho... kitnii hi baar padh gayaa hoon dilkash pur asar kalaam ko, par abhii bhi lag rahaa hai ke dil nahii bharaa .... tahe dil se daad aapki khidmat me pesh hain........

Likhte rahiye

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8th June 2015, 08:01 AM
Behad khoobsurat gazal kahi hai Sagar Sahab

Waaaaaaaah.......sare k sare sher lajawab..bohot khoob jenab
DheerooN daad apki kalam ki nazar
Aapka apna
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood

Wah Sagar Bhai Bahut khoob likha hai aapne
daad hi daad
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath

Aapka Apna
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ahhhhaaaaa bahut dil fareb gazal pesh ki hai bhai aapne padkar majja aaya.

"pyar se bhi pyari es gazal ko salaam,
Ooo yaar teri pehli nazar ko salaam"

yu hi pyar bhara likhte rho, khush rho.

aapki dii

Hausla afzaayi keliye bohot bohot shukriyaa dii.
Yunhi saath dete raheiN. Hum koshaan raheiNge aur achha likhne par.

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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood
Sahab - Maaufi chahunga ki is ala darje ke kalaam par itni dino baad nazar padi, kahir sukoon is baat ka hain ki main mehroom nahi raha aur janaab aapki kalam to din ba din zor pakad rahi hai...

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Waah jagdish jee....waah......kya likha hai....bahut hee dilfareb kalaam hai......

Jenab ka mashkoor-o-mamnoon huN ke aap tooti phooti kavishoN ko itni tavajjo ataa karte haiN.
yuNhi saath dete raheiN.

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Waah....Bahot khoob likhaa hay aapne... sagar jee

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Behatarin eskq ke darmiyan aapne pesh kiye hain.. laga ki sach mein kuchh tufaan aaya hai.. pahale pyar ka pahala paigaam aaya hai.. YuN dilo ko roshan kerte rahiye aur esq me ji bher gote lagaiye..

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Aage bhi muntizar rahungaa. Aate raheiN.

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Ishq me aapka koi kalaam shayad pahli baar padh rahi hoon main....aur kya khoob muhabbat ke jazbe se range huye sabhi ashar huye hain ki bas padhte hee banta hai sagar sahab....bahut dilkash bahut khoob...yoon hee ishq ki mahfil sajate rahein.....

Likhte rahein...
aate rahein...
Madhu ji ko mera namaskar. Ji bilkul theek kaha aapne, maine ishq pe pehli baar he likha hai aur iss meiN maiN aapki nazroN meiN khara utra huN to mere liye bohot khushi ki baat hai. Aapka saaTh raha to aaiNda bhi koshish rahegi ke kuchh aur achha likha jaaye.
Hausla afzaayi karte rahiyega

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15th June 2015, 11:04 AM
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Sagar ji,

Aapka kalaam padha, sach maniye ek ek lafz dil ko chu gaya. Bahaut Acacha likha hai aapne...am sure jitne khoobsurat aapke alfaaz hai ootni hi khoobsoorat aapki inspiration hogi.

Kuch share kar rahe hain apne kisi Bahaut kareeb ke liye likha hai.

Kehte ho khudko deewana mera, rehte ho Tum bhi Zehan mai mere
Dekho toh kis mod pe dono ko yeh pyar le aaya hai

Rehti hai fiqr Tumhari raat din, oothte hain Yeh haath Tumhari dua mai
Kaisa Yeh bandhan Kaisa yeh rishta tumse ban aaya hai

Couldn't touch the level of your poetry but these were just some feelings.

Please keep writing. Pleasure to read you.

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Sweet_rain

Sweet_Rain ji,
aapka tah-e-dil se shukriya jo aapne apna qeemti waqt meri iss adna si koshish ko diya aur isko saraaha.
Aur aapne bhi bohot achha likha hai. Mujhe pasand aaya. Meri aapse iltijaa hai ke aap likhte raheiN. I'm sure, SDC pe aapko achhi rehbari milegi. Ek baar phir se shukriya. Aate rahiye.

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18th June 2015, 12:01 PM
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Jagdish ji aapka kalam per ker wakay meiN mehsoos ho raha ki
pehle khat ka salam aya hai ....

Likte raho aur bazm ki raunak badate raho..

Sanjay Sehgal

Sanjay sahb, namaskar.
Aap iss kalaam se emtionally juD paaye, mere liye yeh baat bohot khushi ka baa_iss hai. yuNhi aate rahieN aur hausla baDhate raheiN.
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18th June 2015, 12:07 PM
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Saagar saahab tak shaad kaa aadaab pahuche......... bhai aap ne to jaise kamaal likh diyaa ho... kitnii hi baar padh gayaa hoon dilkash pur asar kalaam ko, par abhii bhi lag rahaa hai ke dil nahii bharaa .... tahe dil se daad aapki khidmat me pesh hain........

Likhte rahiye

Shaad.....

Adaab mere bhai.
Bohot khushi huyi jaan kar ke maiN kuchh iss tarah ka likh paaya jo aapke dil ke qareeb raha aur baar-haa aap ne uss ko paDha. Ek naye shayar keliye is se baDh kar ko_ii khushii ki baat bhala kya hogi.
Muntazir rahengae aapki aamad ke, agli koshish par bhi.
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21st June 2015, 09:44 PM
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Behad khoobsurat gazal kahi hai Sagar Sahab

Waaaaaaaah.......sare k sare sher lajawab..bohot khoob jenab
DheerooN daad apki kalam ki nazar
Aapka apna
Bhushan

Be-had mashkuur-o-mamnuun huN Bhushan ji aapka.
yuNhi aate rahiye.
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15th July 2015, 10:39 PM
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Wah Sagar Bhai Bahut khoob likha hai aapne
daad hi daad
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath

Rajinder ji, namaskar.

Bohot bohot shukriya aapke saaTh keliye.
Aainda bhi talabgaar rahunga aapke saaTh ka.
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23rd July 2015, 11:57 AM
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Sahab - Maaufi chahunga ki is ala darje ke kalaam par itni dino baad nazar padi, kahir sukoon is baat ka hain ki main mehroom nahi raha aur janaab aapki kalam to din ba din zor pakad rahi hai...

yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa

Mast saahb, der aayad, durust aayad.
Khushi huyii aapki bazm mein dekh kar. Tehseen keliye bohot bohot shukriyaa.
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28th July 2015, 12:46 PM
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KhushbuoN meiN lipta hua shabaab aaya hai
Aaj mere pehle khat ka jawaab aaya hai

ShokhiyaN haiN, rangat aur mehak hai fiza meiN
Chhoo kar unn ke Dahan ko gulaab aaya hai

Roshan haiN aaj sarbasar, dil ke dar-o-baam
Falak se utar kar, mahtaab aaya hai

Toot kar hai chaha unn ko dil ne baar baar
Pyaar unn ke waaste be-hisaab aaya hai

Unn ki ek jhalak dekhi aankhoN ne iss qadar
ToofaN uThay haiN dil meiN, inqalaab aaya hai

Bhatakte rahe hum yuNhi sehra meiN ab talak
Bil-aakhir qareena-e-intekhaab aaya hai

Tanhaayi meiN Jiya hai Sagar ab tak iss tarha
Subh-o-shaam ashkoN ka sailaab aaya hai




1. Dahan= mouth
2. Sarbasar= completely/from one end to the other
3.Dar-o-baam= doors & ceiling/terrace
4. Mahtaab= moon
5.Qareena= Tareeqa/dhang
6.intekhaab: selection/choice
7.Sailaab: Flood
Sagar saahab...

waaaaaaaaahh.. kia kehny ..
behad umdah ghazal se roshnaas karwaya hy ....

dilli daad o mubarakbaad qabool kejiye ...

likhte rahiye..

*hSn* : parStaar

tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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Dhaval saahab aur Hassan saahab, taakheer keliye muazrat chahunga.
Aapka bohot bohot shukriya iss be beh'r be wazan koshish ko bhi itna pasand kiyaa.
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