Me and the rain - Page 2

Rohin · 27th January 2005, 07:12 PM

Hi Komal,

Thanks buddy for the reply.

Mere shabdo ka jadoo hi sahi
aap yahan aaye to sahi

LOL

thanks
Rohin

priyanka jain · **Re: Me and the rain -** 27th January 2005, 07:31 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Hi Everyone,

We have a very notable Shayar with us "dard_thesorrow"
In his signature i found a line which just touched my hart, that line is:

"I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying"

I was sitting alone remembering my old days and slowly this line turned into a poem for me, which I am going to post here.
I hope he likes it and so do all of you.

Dard_thesorrow ji if you do not like my poetry do let me know for the inspiration is from u.

Me and the rain

On a rainy morning
When the sun was hiding
I was out in the open
Drenched from top to bottom

My love had asked me to meet
Our usual place in the field
Behind the wind mill
Under the cedar tree

It was a lovely place
Near the quiet lake
Where the lovebirds met
When the sun is about to set

But nobody was there today
Just the rain and me
Been waiting the whole day
but she had never been late

Then She came running
i reached out and pulled her to me
She was breathing heavily
Her eyes were watery

She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains

Thanks
Rohin

wow rohin ....

i mean the line was really a good one and the inspiration was also beautifully stated in words.....

there was a blow of pitter patter raindrops
from up above the sky....
i think the lord god also understood...
that i need to cry.......
but the tears were not to be shown.....
so he led to pitter patter raindrops to stop me from getting shy....

i just made an attempt to write but wasnt successful....as u....

anyways..ur writeup was a great one....

Rohin · **Re: Re: Me and the rain -** 27th January 2005, 07:51 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by priyanka jain
wow rohin ....

i mean the line was really a good one and the inspiration was also beautifully stated in words.....

there was a blow of pitter patter raindrops
from up above the sky....
i think the lord god also understood...
that i need to cry.......
but the tears were not to be shown.....
so he led to pitter patter raindrops to stop me from getting shy....

i just made an attempt to write but wasnt successful....as u....

anyways..ur writeup was a great one....

Hi Priyanka,

Your is so sweet and wonderful.
Well it was more then just a simple attempt. Thanks for writing such wonderful thoughts here

Thanks
Rohin

priyanka jain · 27th January 2005, 08:13 PM

hey rohin.....

kya ho gaya tumhe... tum theek thaaak to ho na yaar.... aaj ekdam se meri itni taareef... yaar mujhe bahut shock baaith rahe hai... warna tum aur yogesh to bas meri buraai ke peeche hi pade rehte hai.....

sab theek to hai na dost

Rohin · 28th January 2005, 12:56 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by priyanka jain
hey rohin.....

kya ho gaya tumhe... tum theek thaaak to ho na yaar.... aaj ekdam se meri itni taareef... yaar mujhe bahut shock baaith rahe hai... warna tum aur yogesh to bas meri buraai ke peeche hi pade rehte hai.....

sab theek to hai na dost

Hi Priyanka,

Nahi mein theek nahi hoon....
Kal bareesh mein nahate nahate mein beemar pad gaya
Ab kya karta usne itna inteezar jo karaya
Aayi aur chali bhi gayi daman chuda ke
Mein wahan khada ka khada reh gaya
Barish kab ruki pata hi na chala

Thanks
Rohin

priyanka jain · 28th January 2005, 08:12 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Hi Priyanka,

Nahi mein theek nahi hoon....
Kal bareesh mein nahate nahate mein beemar pad gaya
Ab kya karta usne itna inteezar jo karaya
Aayi aur chali bhi gayi daman chuda ke
Mein wahan khada ka khada reh gaya
Barish kab ruki pata hi na chala

Thanks
Rohin

sard ne tumhe jakad liya,
kisi ke intezaar mein.....
bheegi palko ne tumhara saath diya,
is rim jhim baarish mein....
agli baar na koi chuda ke jaaye
tumse daaman is barsaat mein....
isliye pyaar karna...
garmi ya saawan mein......

hey i have framed a good one na rohin... sorry apne muh miya mittu ban rahi hu na but i think i have really did a good job....

Rohin · 28th January 2005, 10:29 PM

Haan Priyanka,

Sangat ka asar hai....
Bahut acha likha hai aapne.

Thanks for sharing it with us....
Magar kahin tum taang to nahi kheech rahi thi???

Thanks

dard_thesorrow · 30th January 2005, 11:15 AM

rohin sahab
aapke is kalam ne to humare dil pe bin badal barsaat kar di hai
aaj kal bas barish par likhne ko dil chahta hai
kuch likha pesh kar raha hu

Kaise keh du ke mulaqat nahi hoti,
Roz milte hain magar baat nahi hoti,
Chup ke rota hu teri yaad mein
Kab meri aankh se sanam barsaat nahi hoti........

Rohin · 30th January 2005, 12:24 PM

Dard bhai,

Acha likha hai apne.
Vichar kafi ache hain.

To lijiye aap ke liye bhi ek Sher Barish par

Dil mein hai tofaan umdaa
uski chehre par koi jhalak bhi nahi
Baarish hui, Aanson bahe
Aur Kissi ko khabar bhi na hui

Thanks
Rohin

Kamakaze · **Re: Me and the rain -** 30th January 2005, 01:37 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Hi Everyone,

We have a very notable Shayar with us "dard_thesorrow"
In his signature i found a line which just touched my hart, that line is:

"I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying"

I was sitting alone remembering my old days and slowly this line turned into a poem for me, which I am going to post here.
I hope he likes it and so do all of you.

Dard_thesorrow ji if you do not like my poetry do let me know for the inspiration is from u.

Me and the rain

On a rainy morning
When the sun was hiding
I was out in the open
Drenched from top to bottom

My love had asked me to meet
Our usual place in the field
Behind the wind mill
Under the cedar tree

It was a lovely place
Near the quiet lake
Where the lovebirds met
When the sun is about to set

But nobody was there today
Just the rain and me
Been waiting the whole day
but she had never been late

Then She came running
i reached out and pulled her to me
She was breathing heavily
Her eyes were watery

She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains

Thanks
Rohin

Rohin, Dard, and everybody else on this post. I am doing my usual, giving Rohin's words my Hindustaani treatment. Hope you all like it.

Us Din Subh baarisH huii tHii, Baaadal mein Aftaab cHHupaa thaa
Main baahar boondoN ke niiche, sar-se-paaoN tak giila thaa

Wahan pawanchakki ke piichHe, door chinaaroN ke niiche
Mere mehbuub ne mujhse, usii jagah milne ko bolaa thaa

Ek KHamosh jheel kinaare, woh pyaari sii jagah yahiiN thii
Jahan parinde pyaar karte the, jab suraj duubne ko hota thaa

Par aaj wahan sannata tha, bas baarish thi, aur main thaa
Din saara kaisa biit gayaa, woh der se to nahin aataa thaa

Aur phir wo dauDii aayee thii, dhamak ke mere baahon meiN
Phuulii phuulii si saansein thii, aankNoN meiN ek dariyaa thaa

Aur alag huyii, duur haTi, phir kholaa bhiiNge haantHoN ko
Aur boli le lo haar, jo pehli mulaqaat par maine diyaa tha

Maine dekHa uski aankHon, meri aakhoN mein usne dekHaa
Iske pehle woh lauTi thii, uskii aankhon ne kuchh bolaa thaa

Phir ghantoN wahiN khaDa rahaa, dil thaame apne haatHoN se
Main ro bhi nahiN sakta tha, sohbat mein sada muskaaya tha

Aur abre-karam thii, barsaa tha, baarish se thaa ab pyaar mujhe
BoondoN ne aansoo dhoye the, aur mera dard chHupayaa tha

Woh tha ek din, woh abr bhi thii, woh aansoo, aur woh dard
AankhoN mein ab bhi baras raha, paani jo us din barsaa thaa

Thanks
Kamakaze

Rohin · 30th January 2005, 01:42 PM

Kya baat hai dost,

Really good lines my friend its fantastic translation.

When i start thinking in english my hindi goes for a toss
and when i think in hindi my english goes for a toss.

LOL

but From next time i will ask u to convert my english poems to hindi. It was real good.

Thanks
Rohin

Kamakaze · 30th January 2005, 02:03 PM

Shukriya Rohin,
Bahut Jaldi mein instant noodle ki tarah kiya isiliye kuchh speed-bumps hain... par kabhi aaraam se likhoonga ise Urdu mein...

thanks
kamakaze

Rohin · 30th January 2005, 04:27 PM

Ko Baat nahi Kamakazee ji,

Aapke urdu translation ka intezar rahega. Agar zaroorat ho to mein aapke liye is poetry ke feelings ka Summary bhi de sakta hoon taki apke shabdo ke chunav mein aapko madad mile,

Thanks
Rohin

shadow · 31st January 2005, 11:51 AM

Kamakazee ji thanks for the translation abi aur kareeb lagne laga woh emotions....

priyanka jain · 31st January 2005, 07:07 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Haan Priyanka,

Sangat ka asar hai....
Bahut acha likha hai aapne.

Thanks for sharing it with us....
Magar kahin tum taang to nahi kheech rahi thi???

Thanks

well
rohin...

samajhdaar logo ke liye ishara kaafi hai.. apko kya lagta hai yeh mein aapki taang kheech rahi thi ya..... sirf sher bol rahi thi...

wasie taareef ke liye shukriya i had made it on time and even i liked it.....

thanks for taareef......

aur soch ke batana ....mein kya kar rahi thi....

bye

rohin......

Rohin · 08:33 PM

Hi Priyanka;

Tum aur mere se mazak nahi kar sakti ho....

LOL

Well i liked it too.

Vaise tum mazak kar rahi thi mujhse

Thanks
Rohin

Vaise Hi Bhi Rohin and bye bhi rohin...lol

priyanka jain · 1st February 2005, 05:44 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Hi Priyanka;

Tum aur mere se mazak nahi kar sakti ho....

LOL

Well i liked it too.

Vaise tum mazak kar rahi thi mujhse

Thanks
Rohin

Vaise Hi Bhi Rohin and bye bhi rohin...lol

well rohin....

to finally tum samajh hi gaye ki i was joking with u....

tumhari taang kheechne ke mauke bahut kam milte hai.. aur aise mauko ko mein khona nahi chahti......

waise hi rohin to tum samajh hi gaye aur woh byeeee rohin tha...
matlab i was saying bye to u bye calling ur name... samjhe mr....ab scholar kahu ya duffer......

lol

batana....

bye..

Rohin · 2nd February 2005, 05:18 AM

Barsat kitne hi rang lekar aati hai humari zindagi mein.
Kabhi gum kabhi khushi.... Kabhi toofan to kabhi therav.

Yeh thread shuru hua tha kuch gum kee saath jo gum mere apne the.... Aaj aap mein se kai yahan shamil hue mujhe padha bhi... Sarahaa bhi... Aap mein se kai log roye bhi...

Yeh kahoonga this was my best composition till date...
But .... Hope i better it some day...

Issi ummeed ke saath ki aap phir mere saath aayenge.

Haan Haan janta hoon yeh thread band nahi karoonga.

Yeh un sab ke liye khula hai jo yahan padh ke apne vichar chodna chahte hain...

Magar har din ki ek nayi shuruat honi chahiye...

To phir milenge yahin kahin...

Thanks
Rohin

Parul · 2nd February 2005, 08:16 AM

Rohin ji aap ne wakai bahut accha likha hai, I have to words to give you in appreciation, It's just a great work. Bahut bade artist ho tum...

Barsat kitne hi rang lekar aati hai humari zindagi mein.
Kabhi gum kabhi khushi.... Kabhi toofan to kabhi therav.

Rohin · 2nd February 2005, 02:13 PM

Hi Parul,

You liked the composition I am happy about it.

Magar mein bahut bada artist nahi hoon. Kabhi kabar man ke khayalon ko kaagaz par likh deta hoon.

Aapko mere khaayal pasand aaye uska bahut bahut shukriya.

Thanks
Rohin

nacheez · 2nd February 2005, 06:51 PM

Hi Rohin.
That was a superb poem.
Truly it touches the heart.

I have posted something about my friend's story too.
Please read it. It is posted in Dard section (Bewafai ki misaal!)
Sorry I dont know how to attach the link here.

Rohin · 3rd February 2005, 02:26 AM

Hi Nacheez ji,

I am glad you Liked it and I read and replied to your post too.
Good words....

Keep coming.

Take Care
Rohin

priyanka jain · 3rd February 2005, 06:07 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Barsat kitne hi rang lekar aati hai humari zindagi mein.
Kabhi gum kabhi khushi.... Kabhi toofan to kabhi therav.

Yeh thread shuru hua tha kuch gum kee saath jo gum mere apne the.... Aaj aap mein se kai yahan shamil hue mujhe padha bhi... Sarahaa bhi... Aap mein se kai log roye bhi...

Yeh kahoonga this was my best composition till date...
But .... Hope i better it some day...

Issi ummeed ke saath ki aap phir mere saath aayenge.

Haan Haan janta hoon yeh thread band nahi karoonga.

Yeh un sab ke liye khula hai jo yahan padh ke apne vichar chodna chahte hain...

Magar har din ki ek nayi shuruat honi chahiye...

To phir milenge yahin kahin...

Thanks
Rohin

rohin...
tum to sudhar gaye ho yaar... humare sangati ka asar jo thaira,.....

tum aur woh bhi thread end nahi kar rahe ho kyaa baat hai.....!!!!

Rohin · 4th February 2005, 07:16 AM

Kya karoon ... Tumne pichli baar dhamki jo di thi...
Vaise ek baat kahoon woh thread band bhi ho gaya hai,, LOL

Take Care

Rohin

priyanka jain · 5th February 2005, 06:23 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Kya karoon ... Tumne pichli baar dhamki jo di thi...
Vaise ek baat kahoon woh thread band bhi ho gaya hai,, LOL

Take Care

Rohin

chalo jaankar khushi hui ki tum meri baat sunane lage ho....

uske band hone ka karan tum hi ho.... tumne usme intrest dikhana chod hi diya tha,

tum agar usme jaan daal dete to wo band nahi hota tha.....

u too take care....

bye

Rohin · 6th March 2005, 11:42 PM

Thanks Priyanka,

sorry for the late reply
thanks a lot buddy

but one has to move on...

Thanks
Rohin

priyanka jain · 8th March 2005, 07:30 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rohin
Thanks Priyanka,

sorry for the late reply
thanks a lot buddy

but one has to move on...

Thanks
Rohin

welcome...
very true rohin...

soni_sonal · 4th May 2005, 01:09 PM

rohinji

behad khoob
humein bhi jubin ki yeh signature line behad pasand hai

lekin aapne to kamal hi kar diya
humari aankhon ki nami ko bhi ek makam de diya

sonal

Rohin · 5th May 2005, 12:45 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by soni_sonal
rohinji

behad khoob
humein bhi jubin ki yeh signature line behad pasand hai

lekin aapne to kamal hi kar diya
humari aankhon ki nami ko bhi ek makam de diya

sonal

Sonal ji,

Aapke aankhon ki nami ko mukam mila ....
Magar umeed hai ab aur nami nahi rahegi aapki aankhon mein

Shukriya humari mehfil mein aane ka

Thanks
Rohin

sakhi1909 · 14th May 2005, 10:57 PM

g8t poetry rohin ji

suder aur bhaawpurn

sakhi

Rohin · 15th May 2005, 02:45 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by sakhi1909
g8t poetry rohin ji

suder aur bhaawpurn

sakhi

Hi Sakhi ji,

The greatness is in the person who can feel the thoughts
So I guess you are great...

Thanks
Rohin

Rohin · 19th September 2011, 12:22 AM

.................................................. .................................................. .... Its Raining

Rohin · 16th May 2020, 03:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rohin

Hi Everyone,

We have a very notable Shayar with us "dard_thesorrow"
In his signature i found a line which just touched my hart, that line is:

"I Love Walking In The Rain Because Nobody Can See Me Crying"

I was sitting alone remembering my old days and slowly this line turned into a poem for me, which I am going to post here.
I hope he likes it and so do all of you.

Dard_thesorrow ji if you do not like my poetry do let me know for the inspiration is from u.

Me and the rain

On a rainy morning
When the sun was hiding
I was out in the open
Drenched from top to bottom

My love had asked me to meet
Our usual place in the field
Behind the wind mill
Under the cedar tree

It was a lovely place
Near the quiet lake
Where the lovebirds met
When the sun is about to set

But nobody was there today
Just the rain and me
Been waiting the whole day
but she had never been late

Then She came running
i reached out and pulled her to me
She was breathing heavily
Her eyes were watery

She then moved away
And opened her wet hands
She gave me the chain
I gave her on our first date

I looked in her eyes
And she looked in mine
I understood what she didn't say
She realised, turned, ran away

I stood there for hours
Holding my hart in my hand
I didn't know how to cry
For with her I always smiled

I thank god it rained
Oh I just love the rain
for It hid my tears,
It hid my pain

That day that rain
those tears and that pain
The rain stopped then
but in my eyes it still rains

Thanks
Rohin

Didn't know then. That it ends this way.

Y0635H · **After ages - 15 years almost! -** 1st June 2020, 07:15 PM

Mere Dost Rohin!

Yaar kaise ho tum! Tumhara friend YashMax (Beating Heart wala Dp).
I told you this thread of yours will always be on Top!

I created this New ID, as I couldn' access the old one (Yashmax)

Hope things are great at your end!

Tumhara Dost,
Y0635H