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Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
29th March 2006, 05:41 PM
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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29th March 2006, 05:57 PM
bahutttttt achcha shardhha. kamal ki kavita hai. 2 bar pad chuka kal fir padunga. bur marks ek bar hi dunga.
100/80 ok?
jayada to nahi de diya
ok koi bat nahi. next time adj. kar lunga
ha..ha..
thanks
(¨`·.·´¨) Always
`·.¸(¨`·.·´¨) Keep
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29th March 2006, 06:00 PM
shrdha dost
ek aur khoobsurat aur bharpoor takhleeq hai yeh aap ki.
meri nacheez daad qabool karein.
hamare haan kahawat hai
Kuch bhi na kaha aur keh bhi gaey
kuch kehte kehte reh bhi gaey
aap ne apne is kalam mein bohat kuch kaha mager yeh lagta hai ke bohat kuch abhi baaqi hai, tanhaayee kyaa azaab hoti hai yeh koee tanha loagon se pooche.
aap ka yeh shayr haasil e ghazel hai.
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
tanhaayee ka afsaana bohat khoobsurti se bayan kiya hai aap ne dost.
dua go hoon ke tanhaayee ke azaab se hamesha aap mehfooz rahein aur khush aur aabaad rahein.
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
29th March 2006, 06:05 PM
meri behna
aapki kosish kaafi hadd tak kamiyab rahi
kuch sher jayada ache lage jo likh raha hu
"Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha"
suruaat bhi badi achi ki hai aapne isliye achi honi hi hi
"Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha"
poori gazal in dono sher k bich mein hai aur ye dono hi khoobsurat hone k karaan ishki khoobsurati aur badh gayi hai
likhti rahiye...take care
apka
Diggaj
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Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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Navard-e-ishq mein kya hua kya bataye hum
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha
Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne
K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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30th March 2006, 01:16 AM
Shrdh
Tumhari soch ne is baar dil pe gehra asar chora hai ... aur tareef karne padegi tumhari kabiliyat ki .. maiN behad muttasir hua huN tumhari is nazm ko padh ke .. ehsasoN pe gaur kareN to har sher apni duhayi si de raha hai .. aur usi tarah tumne flow ko bohat acche se barkaraar rakha hai ... har mishre se tanha shabd ka milaan bohat sareekhi kosish tumhari .. behad nikhri hui... mujhe bohat accha laga .. halaNki takneeki kamiyaN nikali ja sakti hai ... par mujhe pasand aaya .. bohat acchi chalaang lagayi hai tumne apne pichle kalaamoN se ....
yuN hi likhti raho .. nikharte hue .. dua rahegi tumhare liye
tumhaara apna
Kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
30th March 2006, 06:07 AM
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Wah....
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
Kya baat hai....
shrdh,
Kya baat hai ek dum mast likha hai... yunhi likhti raho... i have no words to describe how beautiful it is....
Take Care
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30th March 2006, 07:02 AM
wah sare ashar kamal ke hain aur kaheen aisa nahee laga kisee aise shayer ne kahee hai jo ghazal kam likhta hai ye ek dam dusrust kahee gayee ghazal hai aur jitne ghzal kaheen hain tum ne un main sab se achee bhee bahut khoob soort.
mujeh eh sher sab se achha laga
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Anil
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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30th March 2006, 09:28 AM
hi sweets,
yu to kal hi isse parh liya tha n i cud tell u wat i felt after reading it. well its superb. ur flow of thoughts, ur grip in ur writing .its excellent. meri daad kabool karna aur yu hi mefil mein aapne anmol kalam hum sab ke beech mein share karte rehna. i cant pin point one or two shers. its complete in itself.take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters.
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
30th March 2006, 09:32 AM
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Originally posted by shrdh
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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agar yeh aapki koshish hai to jab likhna sikhogi to kya likh dalogi .......................waiting for tht gazal.............
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30th March 2006, 11:30 AM
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Waaaaaaaaahhhh....!
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Bahut Khooob....!
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
waah waah waahh... loved both the shers here....
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
Waaaaahh...
Dear Shraddha,
Main kya kahoon yaar... You have written so so so beautiful... kyaa khoobsurat flow hai... khoobsurat ghazal likhi hai tumne... ehsaas to humesha hi khoobsurat hote hain....just loved it...
Meri dil se daad kubool karna... and telll me when u r free.... I have to take tips....
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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30th March 2006, 02:39 PM
Hi,
Its really Good Shraddha ji.
"Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha"
wah...................
Thanks,
Rohit Sinha
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30th March 2006, 03:29 PM
kafi dino ke baad kuchh achha parne ko mila hai.
yu hi likhte rahena
Take care
vo bita huva tyohar fir se de de khuda......
ek pal ke liye bitee huvi zindagi ka kaam hai khuda..........
jish nirdosh aankho se VISH mujhe dekhati thi............
vo ek pal mujhe de de khuda............
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
30th March 2006, 07:52 PM
wowww ......
very nice
my dear friend............
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai ,,,,,
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha.....
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi,,,,,,,
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha.......
hamaare dard ka paimana sach mein chhalak sa gaya hai aaj yeh padkar ..... kyon kisi moment per insaan itna tanha ho jata hai.......
aise hi likhte raho.......
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humein unse mohabbat huyee,,,,,,,,,,
to unhe hamaari mohabbat pe shak tha.......
jab unhe hamaari mohabbat ka ehsaas huya,,
to hum per kisi orr ka "HAQ" tha.......
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LOUT JATI HAI DUNIYA GAM HAMARA DEKHKAR,,,,,,,,,
JAISE LOUT JATI HAIN LAHREN KINARA DEKHKAR....
TUM KANDHA NA DENA MERE JANAZE KO..........................
KAHIN FIR ZINDA NA HO JAU TERA SAHARA DEKHKAR.....
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
31st March 2006, 11:49 AM
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Originally posted by shrdh
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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Achchhi kosi sh hai, shraddha ji..
Zaari rakhiye..
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
31st March 2006, 12:59 PM
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
Dear Shraddha,
You have come up with one more beautiful expression of ur's...
Deep and dense but still crisp and clear!
Do keep writing
^^^Shalini^^^
... jab se kisi ne
karli hai suraj ki chori
aao
chal ke suraj dhoondhein
aur na mile toh
kiran kiran phir jama karein hum
aur ik suraj naya banyein
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
31st March 2006, 02:16 PM
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Originally posted by shrdh
Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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Hi shradhu good 1 yaar keep it up
aage
Haar kar jitne ka haosala rakhte hai
justazoo hai mil jaaye vo jafar tanha
Mere jakhmo pe tere ashq marham ban jaaye
Sah lenge zaamaane ka har kahar tanha
Zindgibhar rehnuma thi ummide meri
Maut me saath deti vo rahgujar tanha
Nasib nahi mere janaaze ko sahara tera
kabra mai umrbhar saath hai gadar tanha
Jafar- jeet
Gadar-kaali andheri raat
take care with regards
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Didi,
ye kya likkha hai aapney?...bahot hi saach likha hai aapney meri saamj ke talhike se...mai humesha kehti hu...
L-ake of Tears
O-cean of Sorrow
V-alley of Death
E-nd of Life all='s LOVE!
didi i loved ur work.
aapki apni,
Maan!
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1st April 2006, 08:43 AM
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha.............
wow shrdh...........bahut khub likhti ho.........
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
bahut sundar gahare ahasas se bahri hui yeh gazal tareef ke kabil hai.............
with love and best wishes
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1st April 2006, 05:09 PM
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bahutttttt achcha shardhha. kamal ki kavita hai. 2 bar pad chuka kal fir padunga. bur marks ek bar hi dunga.
100/80 ok?
jayada to nahi de diya
ok koi bat nahi. next time adj. kar lunga
ha..ha..
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thnx vikram
aapko pasand aayi aur aapne to bahut dil kholkar no. de diye hai ye meri koshish hai aur main seekh rahi hoon umeed hai kuch aur behatar kar paaungi hosla afzaeee ka sukriya
keep coming
shrdh
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1st April 2006, 05:14 PM
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shrdha dost
ek aur khoobsurat aur bharpoor takhleeq hai yeh aap ki.
meri nacheez daad qabool karein.
hamare haan kahawat hai
Kuch bhi na kaha aur keh bhi gaey
kuch kehte kehte reh bhi gaey
aap ne apne is kalam mein bohat kuch kaha mager yeh lagta hai ke bohat kuch abhi baaqi hai, tanhaayee kyaa azaab hoti hai yeh koee tanha loagon se pooche.
aap ka yeh shayr haasil e ghazel hai.
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
tanhaayee ka afsaana bohat khoobsurti se bayan kiya hai aap ne dost.
dua go hoon ke tanhaayee ke azaab se hamesha aap mehfooz rahein aur khush aur aabaad rahein.
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mushi ji
aap hamesha hi mera housla badhate rahe hain aapke saath mere liye bhaut mayne rakhta hai .aapne padha aur saraha dil se aapki aabhari hoon haan aap sahi kahe rahe hain ye tanha aur ye gazal ka safar aadha sa hi lag raha hai kafi kuch kahna hai par bus chup rahna bhi achha hi hai
aur tanhaae zuban deti hai bus kabhi kabhi
aap apna khyaal rakhiyega
aapki
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1st April 2006, 05:17 PM
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meri behna
aapki kosish kaafi hadd tak kamiyab rahi
kuch sher jayada ache lage jo likh raha hu
"Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha"
suruaat bhi badi achi ki hai aapne isliye achi honi hi hi
"Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha"
poori gazal in dono sher k bich mein hai aur ye dono hi khoobsurat hone k karaan ishki khoobsurati aur badh gayi hai
likhti rahiye...take care
apka
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hmmm wah little sweet bro
aapke tarriif karne ka andaz hume pasand aaya uhi aap saath dete rahenege isi umeed mai
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1st April 2006, 06:40 PM
Shraddha,
Seriously yaar. koshish acchi hai aur ghazal bhi accha hai. main tho kehta hoon shuruwaat itni acchi hain, aur koshish karo i know you will be very successful...
Destiny is what you beleive in,
Destiny is what you make off,
Be the creator of your destiny,
For all have the force within....
Regards,
Balaji Nagarajan
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Shrdh
Tumhari soch ne is baar dil pe gehra asar chora hai ... aur tareef karne padegi tumhari kabiliyat ki .. maiN behad muttasir hua huN tumhari is nazm ko padh ke .. ehsasoN pe gaur kareN to har sher apni duhayi si de raha hai .. aur usi tarah tumne flow ko bohat acche se barkaraar rakha hai ... har mishre se tanha shabd ka milaan bohat sareekhi kosish tumhari .. behad nikhri hui... mujhe bohat accha laga .. halaNki takneeki kamiyaN nikali ja sakti hai ... par mujhe pasand aaya .. bohat acchi chalaang lagayi hai tumne apne pichle kalaamoN se ....
yuN hi likhti raho .. nikharte hue .. dua rahegi tumhare liye
tumhaara apna
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kunal tumhe pasand aayi jaankar achha laga
keep coming to encourage me
thnx
shrdh
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3rd April 2006, 06:59 PM
hi shrdha di
bahut achhi gazal likhi hai aapney pasand aayi har lafz bahut hi khubsurat sa hai kuch lines bahut achhi lagi
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
bahut khubsurat hai
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4th April 2006, 06:04 PM
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Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Wah....
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
Kya baat hai....
shrdh,
Kya baat hai ek dum mast likha hai... yunhi likhti raho... i have no words to describe how beautiful it is....
Take Care
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aapko pasand aayi bhaut achha laga choti si koshish hai meri keep coming to support me ur suport is very important fo rme
love u
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Re: wah -
4th April 2006, 06:05 PM
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wah sare ashar kamal ke hain aur kaheen aisa nahee laga kisee aise shayer ne kahee hai jo ghazal kam likhta hai ye ek dam dusrust kahee gayee ghazal hai aur jitne ghzal kaheen hain tum ne un main sab se achee bhee bahut khoob soort.
mujeh eh sher sab se achha laga
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
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anji ji
jab bhi aap taarif karte hai hum sirf smile karte hai
aur kya kren batayen
shrdh
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4th April 2006, 06:11 PM
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hi sweets,
yu to kal hi isse parh liya tha n i cud tell u wat i felt after reading it. well its superb. ur flow of thoughts, ur grip in ur writing .its excellent. meri daad kabool karna aur yu hi mefil mein aapne anmol kalam hum sab ke beech mein share karte rehna. i cant pin point one or two shers. its complete in itself.take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters.
with love
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DEAr jass,
aapne aakar isme jo rang bahre hai achhe lage
aate rahna aise hi kabhi kabhi apni roshni k saath
love
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tanha -
4th April 2006, 08:47 PM
Shardhji,
aapki koshish bahut achhii rahii,tanhaii ko bahut sulje aalfazon mai bayan kiya hai,aapki gazal padhte muje Minakumariji ki ek gazal yaad aaii........
chand tanha hai aasma tanha
dil mila hai kahan kahan tanha,
buj gaii aas chhup gaya tara
thar tharratta raha dhuaan tanha,
zindgii kya iisii ko kehte hai
jism tanha hai aur jaan tanha,
jalti bujti roshnii ke pare
simta simta sa ek makan tanha,
raah dekhaa karegaa,sadiiyon tak
chhod jaayenge ye jahaan tanha.
likhte rahiyega...........
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5th April 2006, 12:22 AM
shradha dd
bahut khoob likha hai .....
yun hi likhte rahiye
bye TC
Yun Mile Ke Mulakaat Na Ho Saki,
Honth Kaape Magar Koi Baat Na Ho Saki,
Meri Khamosh Nigahen Har Baat Keh Gayi,
Aur Unko Shikayat Hai Ki Baat Na Ho Saki.... (nm)
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.....«´¨`·..ASHU...·´¨`»......
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5th April 2006, 10:57 AM
dd aap ki aaj ki ghazal me aaj koi alag baat thi aisa laga ki shaad ke alfaaz aap ki zabaan se nikal rahe hain.aaj ki aap ki thinking bilkul mere jazbaton se match kar rahe the aisa laga meri condition par banaya gaya ho.alfaaz bhi bahot behtareen use kiye hain aaj tak ki aap ki sabhi gazal waise apne aap me poori hain par ek gustakhi kar raha hoon jo baaki se ise best ki upadhi de raha hoon.sach its simply d best one.keep posting dd
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Khus Hue Hum -
5th April 2006, 11:20 AM
Sharddh aap ne bhoot acha likha hai lakin aap ko maine note kiya hai ki aap jab bhi likhti hai aap dard bhara hi likhti hai kya koi baat hai aap ko kisi ne dard diya, kuch to bato apne bare main ki mujhe pata chale kam se kam ki aap ki shayri main itna dard kyo hota hai
but i like ur kavita
Thank you very much
bahoot acha laga pad ker but plz. tell me
ok by
take care isi tarha likhte rahiye
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5th April 2006, 12:52 PM
Oh !!!!! it's really cool !!!
"Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha "
just beauty Shraddha !!!
lekin hamari nazar tanha nahi lauti, jis ummid ke saath mai aapki gazal/shyari padney gaya tha, us se kahin jayada mujhe mila.
its really nice, har sabd , har pankti ek dusrey se bandhi hai, achchha taal mail hai sabdo or panktyuonn ka !!
Thanks Shraddha !!
Rohit Sinha here
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Re: Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha (gazal Mai Meri Ek Aur Koshish) -
5th April 2006, 01:01 PM
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Kat Raha Hai Zindgi Ka Safar Tanha
Qaafilaa Sang Chalaa Aur Basar Tanha
Jaha.N Mai Doston Ki Kami Na Thi
Tum Nahi Saath To Ye Shahar Tanha
Khushi Ki Maunjein Lakh Samunder Me
Kinare Ko Mili Ghem Ki Lahar Tanha
Raat Khuwabon Mai Saath-Saath Bitee
Neend Tooti Phir Wahi Sahar Tanha
Umeed K Diye Jalaye Raah Mai Kaee
Na Loute Wo Louti Hamari Nazar Tanha
Shor Aur Mahfile Kaha Raas Aayi Hai
Humne Guzare Hai Charo.N Pahar Tanha
Na Dastak De Ab Darwaze Par Koi
So Gaye Pi Kar Judaee Ka Zahar Tanha
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Shrdh Ji
Aapko mera namaskaar
Aapki likhit ghazal parhi tow sach mein bahaut khoobsurat lagi. Der mein parhney ke liye muaafi chahunga.
Sada yunhi likhtey rahiye aur hume paraahtey aur sikhaatey rahiye. aapka dhanyavaad
vipin
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