Unforgetable efforts

[KunaaL]

hello jas ...

jyada kuch likhne ki aadat mujhe kabhi nahi rahi .... aaj bhi kuch hi likhuNga ... aapne suna hoga bachpan maiN.. ki...

Khisyani billli khamba noche....

aur jas ... tumne jo likha accha tha ... agar khayaloN ki baat ki jaye to .. jisme koi do rai nahi ... aur kamjor hone ki bhi jaroorat nahi ... kyuNki kamyabi ki shuruwaat nakami se hi hoti hai ... kyuNki jahaN log support nahi karte ... par jab ek bar sitara chad jata hai to khuda bhi uske sath hota hai .. sharmshaar hai ye kalam ki duniya ... jahan kalam ki beizzati ki jati hai .. par yaad rakhna .. bure logoN ka bhi hona jaroori hai .. warna acchai ka pata nahi chalega .... aur jo log kisi ki kalam ki izzat nahi kar sakte .. saraswati .unke hathoN maiN kabhi nahi rukti ...

chinta nahi karo ... har nakami se sabak lo aur aage bade ... dogune utsah ke sath ... comment duniya deti hi raheGi...

apna khayal rakhna

tumhara apna

kunal

[karan q]

Kunaal Sahab tumhare msg per hansne ke ilawa or kuch nahi ker sakta houn... Khair no comment on your talks. I had enough on you

Ruhani Hum hindustani hai.. Meeta zahar khaa lenge magar kadwa amrit nahi pee sakte ye baat tumne saabit ker di,
Mera msg ek seekhne waale shaks ke liye thaa.. lekin shayad tum unme se nahi ho, Yes the contest was for those who are learning,But They must know where they stand and where they are wrong.. I m not Talking About it techniqally but i m talking About the community of words too.. Qataa's too don't make an impact .. i m a true poerty lover.. Augar sach nahi sun sakti To koi baat nahi Tumhare liye hain Kuch Log yahaan Per jo tumhe Joothe badalon ke aasmaan per udaaye rakhenge.. Mujhse ye umeed koi na lagaye to behtar hoga,Seekhne ke liye Apni kamiya janna jaroori ,meri baat per yakeen nahi aata to get someone from your friends and read this poerty for them.. they will tell you the reality..
Likho Wo jo dil me utar jaaye,, Jinn logon ke replly ki baat kar rahi ho Innke paas wo dil hai jissko sab kuch lag jaata hai .. Kunaal said nakaami kamyabi ka pehla sabak hai.. Lekin Kya Kissi ne tumhe mere ilawa ye baat kahi? ki tum nakaam rahi ho?
try kerna he kaafi thaa .i can't talk like a kid but Telling you try tab tak theek hai .. Jab tak aapki aankhe khuli hain,Try Kiya winner nahi bane This is the normal aspect of life,For those who are willing to work hard in future .. You are satisfy with your effort then The qustion Arrive because Life stops there when you get satisfied .. if you are Satisfy with this kind of writing I m afraid to say .. You will not get more Then 5-10 readers if you want to get the real compliment Just work on it...

waqt ke saath kya nahi hota? aap chaaho kuch bhee kar sakte ho , kuch bhee likh sakte ho .. Magar iss tarah nahi,
Mujhe aman ke repllys ne Dukh diya... Ek Purana shayar hone ke bavjood ussne tumhe aaine se ru-ba-ru nahi karwaya .. khair
Augar ek insaan koi kaam galat ker raha hai or hum use baar baar ye baat kahen ki Wo ho kar raha hai bahoot sahi ker raha hai badhiya kar raha hai ... The person is gonna be wrong for ever ... After meeting 5 peoples who will encourage him to Persue to the wrong track The 6 person will Come in front with mirror And then .. it will be difficult to accept it.. Mujhe baaten pasand nahi.. accha likho taarif ke haqdaar bano .. Bura likho .. Agli koshish ke haqdaar raho .. bure per taarif milne lagegi to accha kabhi nahi likh paogi
Mai tumhara dushman nahi houn
Phir bhee kuch bhee samajh lo .. Mai satya houn
mai aaina houn .. Aankhe band kerna ya doosron ki baaton me aana
Tumhari marzi .. jo raah tum chuno .. chun lo ..
Sach ki raah humesha se mushkil rahi hai .. Mere paas usske ilawa kuch bhee nahi
izzajat

karan.q

[sukanya]

Namaskar Karan ji

Unforgetable efforts.........Every effort is an unforgetable one.......It's good that u posted everybody's poetry.....and I liked everybody's poetry.........Karan ji it's good that u should be a good critic but today I saw u r getting bit rude with few people.......That point should not be there if there are things to improve in somebody's poetry u can tell sweetly even....In this forum we all are there to encourage writing poetry which comes from the heart....Chalo leave these things apart.......

Thanks for saying my entry was a precious one.........Aur aapne kayi batein kahi .........Arrey aap ne to mere poetry ki interpretation thodey si different taranh se le li..........u said in the poetry I should have elaborated on the line Lab na silen to kya karein........but the view point while writing this poem was.........
First line of each couplet goes like the things which one dreams and other one which is the reality like

Dariya-e-ishq mein bahey na to kya jiye
Moj mein sath tera na payein to kya karein

Chaliye next time hum khyal rakhainge kuch baton par jo aapne poetry ke regard mein kahi....Waise bhi maine yeh contest samagh kar nahi bheji thi bas dil kiya aur likh di yeh Ghazal...Thanks to hamey aapka kehna chahiye aapne is contest ka concept start kiya to ek Ghazal hi likh di maine ...I have one more Ghazal in my collection of poetry.Aur ek baar phir kahungi...Acha concept shuru kiya aapne contest ka aur encourage kijeye logon ko likhne ke liye par kisey ka dil na dukhaiye.

Sada kush Rahiye

[sukanya]

Namaskar Ruhani ji

Sabse pehle aapki entry dekhey...achi laga aapko padhkar...ruhani aaj maine dekha aap bahut udas ho...mughey accha nahin laga...cheer up ruhani...i believe sometimes it is difficult to write poetry on the topic given by other person bcoz I believe poetry ke liye imaginations topic yeh sab depending on Zindagi likha jata hay..aur dil thoda karney baat nahin hay u have lots of sweet friends dekhna one day ur poetry will be the sweetest one.

Sada kush raho

Namaskar Garima

Tumhari poetry bahut achi lagi...ma kitna pyare rishtey ko kitni khoobsurti se kavita mein dhala hay...bahut acha laga tumhe padhkar........beautiful

Tere anchal me hai sansaar mera
Juda hai naata tera mera
Duniya ki har khushi kar doo nyuchhawar tujhpar
Fir bhi na jaa paao tere ehsaaso se upar
Hote hai agar bhagwaan to wo hai yehi par
Fir kaise na kahe ‘garima’ ki tujhpar na mare to kya jiye

This line I liked the best.

Sada kush raho

Namaskar Nidhi Ji

Nice one...par dil ko nahi chuu payi aapki rachna.Good effort.

Sada kush raho

Namaskar Aman ji

Aapka ek aur nayab qalam......it is a touching one...Karan ji se main sehmat nahi huun ki it lacks feelings...Dil ko chuu gayi yeh rachna the line on Zakmon ko speaks how much touching this poetry is...Hamare daad kabul kijega.

ishq mein na hue fanaah, to kya jiye hum.....
tujhpe ae yaar na mare, to kya jiye hum.....

bade naazon se kharochta hai zakmon ko.....
tere haathon se jo na siye, to kya liye hum.....

lutf-e-judaai ka bhi alag mazaa hai ^AMAN^.....
ta-umr jo saath rahe, to kya jiye hum.....

Beautiful poetry.

Sada kush raho

Namaskar Simran ji

Good effort...

Sada kush raho

Namaskar komal

Very beautiful poem.........bahut acha laga tumhey padhkar shayad pehle baar tumhara likha maine padha hay.......u write so beautifully........very sweet poem...mere daad kabul karna...

This line I liked the best........hamare daad kabul karna

ab toh jina aur marna ek jaisa hai
tujhse shikva nahi, khudse gila sa hai
na tu galat hai, na bewafa 'komal' hai
zindagi vafa na kare toh kya jiye
Tujhpe na mare to kya jiye

Sada kush raho

Namaskar jubin bhai

Accha likha hay........good style of writing this line I liked the best

jivan ka addhaar to tumhara saath tha
vo nahi raha to ab kya jiye

Sada kush Raho

Namaskar Salim ji

Aaj shayad pehle bar aapka likha padha hay...4 lines hi sahi par bahut achi koshish hay...Zindagi mein koshish hi jyada mayne rahkti hay...bahut achi lagi aapki yeh koshish....aap hamare poetry par hamesha daad detey hain aaj aapka likha padha bahut acha laga...first 2 lines are very nice

Is dil mein jalte hai tere naam ke diye
Har saans aati hai bas tera hi naam liye

Beautiful.....I hope in future we will see you writing more ....keep writing

Sada kush raho

Hello My Sweet little brother Kunal

Beautiful entry my brother........Hamesha ki taranh bahut acha laga tumhara qalam........quote ki hui yeh lines bahut achi lagi.........

har kadam pe jamana khada dushman ban sara…
yuN gar duniya se hare, karam To kya kiye hum…

tujhe dil maiN rakhne ki kya keemat chukai hai…
dikha deN jo jhkham sare, khak To kya siye hum…

Beautiful........Di ki daad kabul karna.......I want to clap for you for such a beautiful poetry....I am very happy to see ur this Rachna.........Di ki daad kabul karna.

Sada kush Raho

Namaskar Rohin ji

Sabse pehle thanks ki aapne hamara likha padha aur reply kiya and thanks 4 saying my entry was a beautiful entry...Aap bhi hamare daad kabul kijeyega..aapne ek naye andaz mein poetry ko present kiya hay good style jo bahut kum dekhne ko milta hay...hamare daad kabul kijega.

Sada kush rahein

[karan q]

Well sukanya.. cheezon ke dekhne ka apna apna nazariya hai
I m rude because i m forced To be rude.. When some people Made their own judgment on poerty of the month.. Effort ke hisaab se dekha jaaye to kuch bura nahi .. But the comment's has been made on naina's poerty was Stupid ones.. kissi bhee insaan ko sirf ek raasta ikhtiyaar kerna chaahiye..
I always believe one must show the Quality before making any comment.. Aman ki poerty ko kabhi maine bura nahi kahaa.. But yes As my Knowladge ... naina ,dazemet or komal ki poertys se baaki poertys kaafi picche rahi.. Mera maqsad soye hue logon ko jagaane se thaa.. I m getting pms of those innocent people who want to learn.. They are Asking Things and getting answer's If some people call them self diggaj Here .. They must prove through their work .. Maine kuch shuru nahi kiya.. Read The massages.. Sab kuch theek thaa... Kuch logon ne naina ke kalaam per personal relations ke liye unglee uthayi .. khud ko diggaj bataaya .. badi badi baaten ki.. I had to be rude with them..
Rahi baat ruhani ki poerty ki .. Aap kuch log mil ker ussko andhere me rakh sakte ho.. Magar haqeeqat ki roshni se bachne ke liye aankhe ek muddat ke liye band kerta hai insaan .. or jab Aankhe khol ker saccha ka saamna kerta hai to phir se aankhe band ker leta hai .. or uss andhere ko he haqeeqat maan ker zindgi guzaar deta hai.. ... maine kab kahaa ki ruhani ek acchi shayara nahi bann sakti???
Maine kab kahaa wo accha nahi likh sakti ...?
Mai chaahta houn wo accha likhe ... lekin mai chaahta houn ki wo inn jhoothi dilaasaon se bahar aaye..

Mitthe log zahar ka kaam kerte hain... They can't show the reality.. Wah wah kerne me kissi ka kuch nahi jaata .. magar shayri ki insult hoti hai.. Phir shayri reh he kya gayi?
Mukammal shayri kya deserve kerti hai? Augar Aap bina sir pair ki cheezon per wah wah loot lete hain .. mera maanna hai aise shaks kabhi aage mukkamal poerty likh he nahi payenge ...

To write batter poerty ... They need to know where they are wrong.. Somehow i met some diggaj here... And this is my problum .. mujhe badi baaten karne waale log kabhi pasand nahi rahe .. And it was my point .. Ek try ke lihaaz se sab theek thaa magar jab koi utth ker khud ko diggaj bataane lagaa hai to mujhe ye bataana jaroori thaa ki Usski poerty me aisa kuch nahi thaa jisse wo Kissi doosre per unglee uthaa sake...
As well as ruhani .. She said my winner is aman..
There are Sevreal member's and all will have their own winner.. Khud seekh nahi sakte .. Issliye kissi ko seekhne nahi denge ..
No .. MAi sach houn .. or Kehne wale keh gaye hain ki sach kadwa hota hai .. mai kadwa he sahi magar sach houn.. Her shaks seekh nahi sakta .. 100 me se koi ek hota hai learner .. Sab hote to jahaan mukammal hota .. I m Satisfied with one hance i get many .. WHo are not intresting In pointing towards anything .. They are just talking about shayri .. Through pms .. and i m Always with them ...
Ek zindgi ka bahoot bada sach bataata houn
Insaan meeta zahar poori zindgi peena pasand karta hai jhooth ka .. bajaaye kadwe Amrit ke.. Jo ki sach ka hota hai .. Magar ek baar iss raah per aage nikal jaao ... zindgi aasaan ho jaati hai .. sab bachkani baaten khatam .. Ek safar Shuru hota hai Satya se aage.. AN Art of dying .. Art of ecstacy .. Jo ruk gaye joy per wo kahaan pahunch sake hain ecstacy tak? Jo tahar gaye jismo tak wo kab pahunch paye hain ruuh tak?

izzajat
karan.q

[Rohin]

Originally posted by sukanya

Namaskar Rohin ji
Sabse pehle thanks ki aapne hamara likha padha aur reply kiya and thanks 4 saying my entry was a beautiful entry...Aap bhi hamare daad kabul kijeyega..aapne ek naye andaz mein poetry ko present kiya hay good style jo bahut kum dekhne ko milta hay...hamare daad kabul kijega.

Sada kush rahein [/B]

Hi Sukanya ji,

I am glad you liked my comments on your poetry

I am also happy to know that you liked my style... I am not sure if I can call it any style...it were just some sher I added together....
aapko pasand aaya yeh jaankar khushi hui...

thanks so much for reading my entry...

Thanks
Rohin