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Exclamation Ghazal: YuN Hi Kalam Royi Bas...! - 7th May 2010, 03:36 AM

आदाब,

एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल बहर-ए-मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब मे आप सबकी नज़र कर रहा हूँ ... ये बहर के हर मिश्रे मे एक अनिवार्य रुकाव (//)होता है ... उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से नवाजेंगे..

=========================
बहर :- मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब ( 221 2122 // 221 2122 (In Digit)
=========================

यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- ०६-०५-2
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*बोसा ========= चूमना
*काज़िब ======== झूठा


In Roman :-



Aadaab,

Ek taaza ghazal behar-e-muzaari mussamman akhrab main aap ki nazar kar raha huN… ye behar ke har miCre main ek compulsory stoppage (//) hota hai … umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge…

= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Behar:- Muzaari mussamman Akhrab ( 221 2122 // 221 2122)
= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =


Yun hi kalam royi bas, yuN hi kalaam roya…
Haalat pe meri saara, aalam tamaam roya..

Hota nahi nasha kyuN. Saaqi jo pooch baitha..
Deke bosa hoNton ko, mehfil mai jaam roya…

YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…

Aur….!

Toota hua sitaara, kya maangte khuda se..
Tera hi dar pe uske, leke maiN naaM roya…


= = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-05-2010
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* Bosa ---------------- Kiss
* Kaazib -------------- Fake


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होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..


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यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..


bhayeee saraa .... fir tamaam ........ mujeh lagta hia .... sara ki jagah kuch aur aa sakta hai

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
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फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

kamaal hia doosra misra to ..

apni hi neende karke haraam roya ... bahut achy

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
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दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
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yaar har baar doosra misra ghazab dhaa raha hai ....
panch pe panch mare ja rahe ho

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..


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आदाब,

एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल बहर-ए-मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब मे आप सबकी नज़र कर रहा हूँ ... ये बहर के हर मिश्रे मे एक अनिवार्य रुकाव (//)होता है ... उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से नवाजेंगे..

=========================
बहर :- मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब ( 221 2122 // 221 2122 (In Digit)
=========================

यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

======================
कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- ०६-०५-2
======================


*बोसा ========= चूमना
*काज़िब ======== झूठा


In Roman :-



Aadaab,

Ek taaza ghazal behar-e-muzaari mussamman akhrab main aap ki nazar kar raha huN… ye behar ke har miCre main ek compulsory stoppage (//) hota hai … umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge…

= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Behar:- Muzaari mussamman Akhrab ( 221 2122 // 221 2122)
= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =


Yun hi kalam royi bas, yuN hi kalaam roya…
Haalat pe meri saara, aalam tamaam roya..

Hota nahi nasha kyuN. Saaqi jo pooch baitha..
Deke bosa hoNton ko, mehfil mai jaam roya…

YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…

Aur….!

Toota hua sitaara, kya maangte khuda se..
Tera hi dar pe uske, leke maiN naaM roya…


= = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-05-2010
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* Bosa ---------------- Kiss
* Kaazib -------------- Fake
bhai....apki ghazal bahut pasand aayi....
khas taur par aapka matla bahut accha laga......

ye ghazal mujhe aapki sab ghazalo me sabse jyada pasand hai

daad kabuul kijiye aur ye nahi kahunga ki yu hi likhte rahiye
yu kahunga ki abhi to aur bhi bahut kuch dekhna baki hai...isse bhi accha likha hua.......

ek baar phir daad hazir hai,,,

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Is kalaam ke liye bohat shukriyaa.N Kunaal saheb.........apni is khoobsurat peshkash ke liye daad kabool kare.

Aur ek guzarish thi ke aap aajkal kam dikhayee dete hai mehfil me........agar masroofiyaat zyda hai to koi baat nahi lekin agar waqt milta ho to hum dosto ko apni islah se mehroom na kare.


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YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…


Bohat khoob....yeh 3 ashar dil ko chu gaye,..yuhi likhte rahiye.........

DuaoN ke saath.....




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kunaal saheb kaise haiN aap?
bade din baad mehfil meiN shirkat ki hai janaab ne....
aapki ghazal behad pasaNd aayee aur ye niche wala sher to bahut khaas laga...

toota hua sitaara kya maaNgte khuda se
tere hi dar pe uska, leke naam roya....

(yeh sher bahut zyada pasaNd aaya)
daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega...
lekin matle meiN saara aur tamaam ka istemaal kuchh samjh nahi aaya....jab aapne likha hai to zaroor koi baat banti hogi....


'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
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Kunaal Bhaa'ii:

namaste!

Ghazal to uss waQt hi paRh lii thi jab aapne bazm me peSh kii thi.N par uss waQt javaab nah de.N sakaa thaa.. Aapkaa aNdaaz-e-bayaa.N har baar kuch alag saa hotaa hai ..Aik naye hi aNdaaz ke saath bazm me.N haaziri lagaate hai.N .. mujhe tou Ghazal ka maQtaa be-Had pasaNd aayaa.. Yu.N hi liKhte rahe.N ..dil se daad aur duaae.N

KhuSh rahe.N... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.N

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होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..


Kunaal Ji....Aadaab ! Arse baad aapko yaha dekhkar aur aapka naya kalaam padhke khush hona laazimi thaa.....intne din aapki behtar ghazal aur nazm ko miss karta raha hu.....aapki yeh nayi peshkash purkashish rahi....har ashaar me rawaangi ke saath saath saaf bayaani aur adaayegi bhi humesha ki tarhaa asardaar lagi mujhe....janhaa ashaar me taazgi dikhaai deti hai.....wahi khayal bhi apni fikR ko gehraai tak le jaate mehsoos hote hai....bahut khoob rahi aapki yeh nayi creation.....tahe dil se daad hazir hai.....qubuul farmaayen.....

yunhi behtar kalaam ke saath humesha aate rahen....khush rahen....

apna khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath.....
Bohat bohat Shukriya ..

naresh jee aapke is khuloosi izhaar ka main isteqbaal karta huN ...

aapki daad teh dil se kabool karta hun main

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हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..


bhayeee saraa .... fir tamaam ........ mujeh lagta hia .... sara ki jagah kuch aur aa sakta hai

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muaahhhhhhhhhhh
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फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

kamaal hia doosra misra to ..

apni hi neende karke haraam roya ... bahut achy

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

uff... clap clap
tad tad tadaaaa. tad

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

yaar har baar doosra misra ghazab dhaa raha hai ....
panch pe panch mare ja rahe ho

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..


this one is ur best verse...

toota hua sitara kya maangte khudaa se
bhayee
luv uuuuuuuuu
muaahhhhh
Namaste ..

Aapki har baat ka swagat hai .. aur khushi ka ehsaas hai aapke yahan aane se ...

baaki aapki confusion clear kar chuka huN .. baaki membraan ke liye yahan bhi akr deta huN

हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

Yahan saara aalam ek sath hai means poora jahaN ... par behr ke mutabik use wahan rokna pada .. aage tamaam ka matlab BOHAT se hai .. ki meri halat pe poora jahan bohat roya hai ..

accha laga aapko yahan dekh ke ..

apna khyal rakhiye aur aate rahiye

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bhai....apki ghazal bahut pasand aayi....
khas taur par aapka matla bahut accha laga......

ye ghazal mujhe aapki sab ghazalo me sabse jyada pasand hai

daad kabuul kijiye aur ye nahi kahunga ki yu hi likhte rahiye
yu kahunga ki abhi to aur bhi bahut kuch dekhna baki hai...isse bhi accha likha hua.......

ek baar phir daad hazir hai,,,

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आदाब,

एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल बहर-ए-मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब मे आप सबकी नज़र कर रहा हूँ ... ये बहर के हर मिश्रे मे एक अनिवार्य रुकाव (//)होता है ... उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से नवाजेंगे..

=========================
बहर :- मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब ( 221 2122 // 221 2122 (In Digit)
=========================

यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

======================
कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- ०६-०५-2
======================


*बोसा ========= चूमना
*काज़िब ======== झूठा


In Roman :-



Aadaab,

Ek taaza ghazal behar-e-muzaari mussamman akhrab main aap ki nazar kar raha huN… ye behar ke har miCre main ek compulsory stoppage (//) hota hai … umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge…

= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Behar:- Muzaari mussamman Akhrab ( 221 2122 // 221 2122)
= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =


Yun hi kalam royi bas, yuN hi kalaam roya…
Haalat pe meri saara, aalam tamaam roya..

Hota nahi nasha kyuN. Saaqi jo pooch baitha..
Deke bosa hoNton ko, mehfil mai jaam roya…

YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…

Aur….!

Toota hua sitaara, kya maangte khuda se..
Tera hi dar pe uske, leke maiN naaM roya…


= = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-05-2010
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* Bosa ---------------- Kiss
* Kaazib -------------- Fake
<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>



KUNAAL jee,

kese ho aap?

is baar bhi bahut accha likha hai aapne....nazro se bas dil mai utar gaya,
kuch lines to bahut hi acchi hai, humesha ki tarah bahut hi accha laga aapko padkar....uoon hi likhte rahen aap.......!!!!


ISHIQA.....



Is se pehle ki dilo me nafrat jaage,
aao ek shaam mohabbat me bita di jaaye....

Karke kuch 'ISHQ' ki baatein,
Is shaam ki masti badha di jaye.......!!!!


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आदाब,

एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल बहर-ए-मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब मे आप सबकी नज़र कर रहा हूँ ... ये बहर के हर मिश्रे मे एक अनिवार्य रुकाव (//)होता है ... उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से नवाजेंगे..

=========================
बहर :- मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब ( 221 2122 // 221 2122 (In Digit)
=========================

यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

======================
कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- ०६-०५-2
======================


*बोसा ========= चूमना
*काज़िब ======== झूठा


In Roman :-



Aadaab,

Ek taaza ghazal behar-e-muzaari mussamman akhrab main aap ki nazar kar raha huN… ye behar ke har miCre main ek compulsory stoppage (//) hota hai … umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge…

= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Behar:- Muzaari mussamman Akhrab ( 221 2122 // 221 2122)
= = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = = =


Yun hi kalam royi bas, yuN hi kalaam roya…
Haalat pe meri saara, aalam tamaam roya..

Hota nahi nasha kyuN. Saaqi jo pooch baitha..
Deke bosa hoNton ko, mehfil mai jaam roya…

YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…

Aur….!

Toota hua sitaara, kya maangte khuda se..
Tera hi dar pe uske, leke maiN naaM roya…


= = = = = = = = = = = = = = =
Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-05-2010
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* Bosa ---------------- Kiss
* Kaazib -------------- Fake


wah wah.....dil ko ik sukun si pahuchi ye padh kar
thnx Kunnal ji 4 sharing this with us
God bless u

Regards


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Kunnal jee,

Kya kahe !!!!

shayad shabad bhi nahi hain ...

Dua yehi hain aap hamesha khush rahe

take care

likhtey rahe ... mehfil ko roshan kartey rahega

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Is kalaam ke liye bohat shukriyaa.N Kunaal saheb.........apni is khoobsurat peshkash ke liye daad kabool kare.

Aur ek guzarish thi ke aap aajkal kam dikhayee dete hai mehfil me........agar masroofiyaat zyda hai to koi baat nahi lekin agar waqt milta ho to hum dosto ko apni islah se mehroom na kare.
Saajid bhai

Aapki daad sar aaNkhoN pe .. aur raha sawaal masroofiyat ka to mauka to hota hai par man nahi karta ... kyunki kuch na kuch aisa ho hi jata hai yahan ..

aap aaye aapka behad shukraguzaar huN ...

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YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
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Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…


Bohat khoob....yeh 3 ashar dil ko chu gaye,..yuhi likhte rahiye.........

DuaoN ke saath.....
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kunaal saheb kaise haiN aap?
bade din baad mehfil meiN shirkat ki hai janaab ne....
aapki ghazal behad pasaNd aayee aur ye niche wala sher to bahut khaas laga...

toota hua sitaara kya maaNgte khuda se
tere hi dar pe uska, leke naam roya....

(yeh sher bahut zyada pasaNd aaya)
daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega...
lekin matle meiN saara aur tamaam ka istemaal kuchh samjh nahi aaya....jab aapne likha hai to zaroor koi baat banti hogi....
Vikram saahab

MaiN ek dum durust huN aur yahi aapse umeed karta huN ... baaki mehfil main aana jaana ye to laga hi rehta hai .. aakhir kaar khuli bazm hai ..

Sher ki pasandgi ke liye aapka shukriya ..

aur jo matle ke vabasta aapne sawaal jaahir kiya hai wo maine uper khulasa kar diya hai ...

aate rahiye ..

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Kunaal Bhaa'ii:

namaste!

Ghazal to uss waQt hi paRh lii thi jab aapne bazm me peSh kii thi.N par uss waQt javaab nah de.N sakaa thaa.. Aapkaa aNdaaz-e-bayaa.N har baar kuch alag saa hotaa hai ..Aik naye hi aNdaaz ke saath bazm me.N haaziri lagaate hai.N .. mujhe tou Ghazal ka maQtaa be-Had pasaNd aayaa.. Yu.N hi liKhte rahe.N ..dil se daad aur duaae.N

KhuSh rahe.N... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.N

duaao.N ke saath ijaazat

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~Dhaval
Dhaval MiyaaN ...

Ghazal pe haziri ke liye main aapka shukraguzaar huN .. aur wo kehte hai na khoobsoorti to dekhne waale ki aankh maiN hoti hai .. aapko har baar ki bayaani ka andaaz pasand ata hai mujhe khushi hai is baat ki .. aur aapki daad teh dil se kabool karta huN ,. aapke aane ka behad shukriya ...

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KUNAAL jee,

kese ho aap?

is baar bhi bahut accha likha hai aapne....nazro se bas dil mai utar gaya,
kuch lines to bahut hi acchi hai, humesha ki tarah bahut hi accha laga aapko padkar....uoon hi likhte rahen aap.......!!!!


ISHIQA.....
Aapki waapsi ki khabar laaya hai ye khat aapka .. aapka teh dil se isteqbaal hai . umeed hai aap samajh rahi hoNgi...

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wah wah.....dil ko ik sukun si pahuchi ye padh kar
thnx Kunnal ji 4 sharing this with us
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Aapke kareeb kisi bhi tarah se pahunch sake mere alfaaz mujhe behad khushi hai ..

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Kunnal jee,

Kya kahe !!!!

shayad shabad bhi nahi hain ...

Dua yehi hain aap hamesha khush rahe

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likhtey rahe ... mehfil ko roshan kartey rahega

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aapne bahut acche ehsaas piroye hai

itane ache sayar he aap

likhate rahe



dil ko choo gaya

dil se daad...

yunhi bazam ki raunak badaate raho


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टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

Ji.........Nice One ! dil se daad !



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Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
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aapne bahut acche ehsaas piroye hai

itane ache sayar he aap

likhate rahe



dil ko choo gaya

dil se daad...

yunhi bazam ki raunak badaate raho


sada khush rahe
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Shukriya Dr saahiba ..

aap aayi khak bande ko padha ar apni raa'ii dee /... lekin ye itne bade font kyun .... meri aankheN theek hai Kidding

shukriya aane ke liye

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तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

Ji.........Nice One ! dil se daad !
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Radkhika jee . dil ki daad kabool

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आदाब,

एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल बहर-ए-मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब मे आप सबकी नज़र कर रहा हूँ ... ये बहर के हर मिश्रे मे एक अनिवार्य रुकाव (//)होता है ... उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से नवाजेंगे..

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बहर :- मुजारी मुसम्मन अखरब ( 221 2122 // 221 2122 (In Digit)
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यूँ ही कलम रोई बस, यूँ ही कलाम रोया...
हालत पे मेरी सारा, आलम तमाम रोया..

होता नहीं नशा क्यूँ, साकी जो पूछ बैठा..
देके बोसा* होंटो को, महफ़िल मे जाम रोया...

यूँ छाई थी बेचैनी, हर बात पर हैरां था..
फिर अपनी ही मैं नींदे, करके हराम रोया..

आया नहीं जो जाकर, काज़िब* से रिश्ते पाकर..
मैं बरसों बाद उसका, पढके सलाम रोया..

दस्तूर है जमाने, अब ज़ख्मों का तमाशा...
मजबूरी का 'सिफ़र' भी, बन के गुलाम रोया..

और...

टूटा हुआ सितारा, क्या मांगते खुदा से ..
तेरा ही दर पे उसके, लेके मैं नाम रोया..

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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- ०६-०५-2
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*बोसा ========= चूमना
*काज़िब ======== झूठा


In Roman :-



Aadaab,

Ek taaza ghazal behar-e-muzaari mussamman akhrab main aap ki nazar kar raha huN… ye behar ke har miCre main ek compulsory stoppage (//) hota hai … umeed hai aap sab apni aara se nawaazeNge…

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Behar:- Muzaari mussamman Akhrab ( 221 2122 // 221 2122)
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Yun hi kalam royi bas, yuN hi kalaam roya…
Haalat pe meri saara, aalam tamaam roya..

Hota nahi nasha kyuN. Saaqi jo pooch baitha..
Deke bosa hoNton ko, mehfil mai jaam roya…

YuN chaayi thi bechaini, Har baat par hairaaN tha..
Phir apni hi maiN neeNdeN, karke haraam roya..

Aaya nahi jo jaakar, kaazib se rishte paakar,…
MaiN barsoN baad uska, padh ke salaam roya…

Dastoor hai zamaane, ab jakhmoN ka tamaasha…
Majboori ka ‘sifar’ bhi, ban ke ghulaam roya…

Aur….!

Toota hua sitaara, kya maangte khuda se..
Tera hi dar pe uske, leke maiN naaM roya…


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Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-05-2010
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* Bosa ---------------- Kiss
* Kaazib -------------- Fake
Kunaal ji,

Bahut khoob,,,,,Achi lgi mujhe aapki gazal,,,,,,Aise hi likhte rahiye....

Dil se daad qubool kijiye......

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Kunaal Bhai AadaaB!

Bhai jab bhi aapko padhta huN to mujhe bhi shayri junoon havi hone lagta hai..... behad achcha andaaz aur gehre khayaal kahe hai aapne is gazal se padhker dil khush ho gaya........

Sabhi ashaar ek se badhker ek rahe... Dil se daad Hazir hai...

Likhate rahiye,
Khush rahiye,
Apna khayaal rakhiye...
Khuda Hafez.....


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