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"Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
17th August 2006, 11:40 AM
dosto phir ek kalaam lekar appke samney hu, umeed hai app sab ko pasand aayega, mujhe appke views ka intjaar raheyga.
Ek arsay se ankho mai need nahi thi aaye humey,
ishq ne kar diya tha es kadar bekarar humey………..
Ishq ne dosto dikha diye thy kai khaab humey,
acchey bhalley thy kar gaya tha bekarar humey…….
Usne pyar se appni mahfil mai tha bulla liya humey,
bin mangey patjad mai mil gaye thi bahar humey…..
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
appki dost
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Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
17th August 2006, 12:06 PM
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Originally posted by sunita virender
dosto phir ek kalaam lekar appke samney hu, umeed hai app sab ko pasand aayega, mujhe appke views ka intjaar raheyga.
Ek arsay se ankho mai need nahi thi aaye humey,
ishq ne kar diya tha es kadar bekarar humey………..
Ishq ne dosto dikha diye thy kai khaab humey,
acchey bhalley thy kar gaya tha bekarar humey…….
Usne pyar se appni mahfil mai tha bulla liya humey,
bin mangey patjad mai mil gaye thi bahar humey…..
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
appki dost
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didi ek arse baad aapka kalam padne ko mila
bahut accha laga padkar.............
aapki is kalam ko padkar maine turant kuchh likha hai gour farmaiye.
iskq me kisi ke saath guzare do pal bahut hain
ye wo pal hain jinse main jeena seekh gaya.
yaad aate hain wo shame manjar jo sath gujare the tere
bhoolne wale thujhko bhee kya kabhi hum yaad aate hai.n
esa koun hai jise pyar ke badle pyar mila
ye wo rasta hai jahan sada rona hi padta hai
iskq ke rasto pe na jane kitne fanaa ho gaye hai.n
sekdo.n mar chuke hai.n , hazzaro marne ko taiyar baithe hai.n
<<<<\Dilip\>>>>
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hi -
17th August 2006, 02:21 PM
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
sunita appne kaya khub likha hai....mere dil ki kafiyat likh dee hai appne.....yeh dono share bhut ache lage......yu hee likhti raho or sabke dil pe raaz karti raho yahi meri duaa hai......kush kehta hoon...
sanso ko sanso ki garmi kaya mili dil sulagne lage,
wo humpe or hum unpe ek pal main marne lage.......
ishq ne jab dikhai apne saroor ki rangat,
wo mere qadmon ke nishano par chalne lage.......
mohabat ki aanch ne is qadar kiya unko bebas,
moom banke wo mere pehlu main pighlne lage.........
meri dil se daad kabool karna..........raj.........
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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17th August 2006, 08:13 PM
khoob likha aapne sunita ji,bahut khoob.yeh ashaar bahut ache lage,
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey
likhyi rahiye
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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17th August 2006, 08:47 PM
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Namaskar Sunita ji
Acha likha hay aapney...padhkar acha laga....keep writing
keep smiling
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Re: Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
18th August 2006, 11:37 AM
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Originally posted by dilip200
didi ek arse baad aapka kalam padne ko mila
bahut accha laga padkar.............
aapki is kalam ko padkar maine turant kuchh likha hai gour farmaiye.
iskq me kisi ke saath guzare do pal bahut hain
ye wo pal hain jinse main jeena seekh gaya.
yaad aate hain wo shame manjar jo sath gujare the tere
bhoolne wale thujhko bhee kya kabhi hum yaad aate hai.n
esa koun hai jise pyar ke badle pyar mila
ye wo rasta hai jahan sada rona hi padta hai
iskq ke rasto pe na jane kitne fanaa ho gaye hai.n
sekdo.n mar chuke hai.n , hazzaro marne ko taiyar baithe hai.n
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dilip tumne to bahut badiya share likhey hai, accha lagga tumara reply pad kar, yu hi aatey rahna meri post par. tumarey reply ke bina yeh jachti nahi.
tumari didi
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Re: hi -
18th August 2006, 11:40 AM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
sunita appne kaya khub likha hai....mere dil ki kafiyat likh dee hai appne.....yeh dono share bhut ache lage......yu hee likhti raho or sabke dil pe raaz karti raho yahi meri duaa hai......kush kehta hoon...
sanso ko sanso ki garmi kaya mili dil sulagne lage,
wo humpe or hum unpe ek pal main marne lage.......
ishq ne jab dikhai apne saroor ki rangat,
wo mere qadmon ke nishano par chalne lage.......
mohabat ki aanch ne is qadar kiya unko bebas,
moom banke wo mere pehlu main pighlne lage.........
meri dil se daad kabool karna..........raj.........
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raj ji appne mere kalaam ke saath aur share likh kar es ki khoobsurti aur badda di hai. bahut bahut shukriya meri post par aane ke liye.
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18th August 2006, 11:46 AM
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Originally posted by akelijaan
khoob likha aapne sunita ji,bahut khoob.yeh ashaar bahut ache lage,
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey
likhyi rahiye
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dost appka reply pad kar accha lagga ki appko mera kalaam pasand aaya, appko appni har post par dekh kar bahut accha lagta hai, yu aati raheyga.
appki dost
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18th August 2006, 11:49 AM
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Originally posted by sukanya
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Namaskar Sunita ji
Acha likha hay aapney...padhkar acha laga....keep writing
keep smiling
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naamaskar sukanya ji,
bahut accha lag raha hai appko appni post par dekh kar, koshish karugi ki aagey se aur bhi behtar likh sakku. appka bahut bahut shukriya meri post par aane ke liye. umeed hai app yu hi aati rehygi.
thanks alot
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Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
18th August 2006, 11:50 AM
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Bohat badhiya.....2nd sher dil ko chhu gaya
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
Wah........behad khoobsurat
Sunita jee
Bohat acha likha hai..upar diye sher kaafi pasand aaye
Dil se daad kabool kijiyega..........shukriyah
APKA
Diggaj
Navard-e-ishq mein kya hua kya bataye hum
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha
Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne
K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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19th August 2006, 07:03 AM
bahut dino baad is site par aya hoon bas kcuh dil udas hai yoon laga parhne wale kaheen kho gaye hain. aaj aya to tumhara ye kalam miil gaya bahut achha laga aise hee likhtee rahana parh ke bahut tasallee hotee hai ki kcuh log dil se likhte hain
Anil
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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Re: Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
19th August 2006, 02:53 PM
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Originally posted by Diggaj_Dave
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Bohat badhiya.....2nd sher dil ko chhu gaya
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
Wah........behad khoobsurat
Sunita jee
Bohat acha likha hai..upar diye sher kaafi pasand aaye
Dil se daad kabool kijiyega..........shukriyah
APKA
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hi diggaj ji
bahut accha lagga appka reply padkar, jab app jaise shayer aakar tareef kartey hai, to lagta hai ki sach mai kuch accha likha hai, mere himmat badaney ke liye appka shukriya. umeed karti hu ki app yu hi meri post par aatey raheygey.
thanks alot
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19th August 2006, 03:11 PM
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bahut dino baad is site par aya hoon bas kcuh dil udas hai yoon laga parhne wale kaheen kho gaye hain. aaj aya to tumhara ye kalam miil gaya bahut achha laga aise hee likhtee rahana parh ke bahut tasallee hotee hai ki kcuh log dil se likhte hain
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hello anil
appka msg padkar lag raha hai ki app bahut upset hai, aree koi padey na padey hum to padtey hai. appka jaha aaney ke liye bahut bahut shukriya. appki duaey saath hai to hum yu hi koshsih kartey raheygey likhney ki. aur app site par aatey rahiye.
take care and keep smiling :-)
appki dost
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20th August 2006, 03:45 AM
bahut dard hai mere dil jo ki batana cahahata hoin lakin koi sunne wala nahi mittal011@yahoo.com
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20th August 2006, 03:50 AM
voo puchte hai(the) humse karte ho payar kitna
tere khwabon ko hakikat na kar do to khena..........
voo hamare pass se jujar gaye hamara haal bhi na pucha
hum kaise kayen kar lee ki voo dur ja ke roye....
sunita je pata nahi log unse kaise joot boolte hai jo log unse se sab se jayada payar karte hai....
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21st August 2006, 09:53 AM
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bahut dard hai mere dil jo ki batana cahahata hoin lakin koi sunne wala nahi mittal011@yahoo.com
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hello nitin ji
yeh shayri-e-dard hai dard wallo ke liye, app jaha behichk appna dard bayaan kar saktey ho. aur jaha sab ek doosrey ke dard ko samjtey bhi hai.
take care and keep smiling :-)
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22nd August 2006, 11:55 PM
[sunita ji
pata nahi log joot par joot kaise bolte hai jab ki unhe bhi pata hota hai ki samne wala sab janta hai lakin use us ki najaroo mai gerana nahi chahta...phir bhi..pata nahi..
pata nahi.....
kay ho gaya hai duniya ko
kyon bhool gayi hai vo payar ke rishte ko
kyon dikhate hai payar apno sa..
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is ladki ne muje khatam kar diya ...
maine ise itna payar kiya phir bhi....
bewafa sabd ka sirf naam suna tha lakin bewafi kaya hote ab jane..
sazi hoe thi mahafil...
chal rahe the dor par dor...---2
pe kar ...
pe kar khoon mere armano ka
vo khay rahe the abhi or abhi or abhi or
abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or
thank for ur reply sunita ji
pata nahi vo mujse joot kaise bool sakte hai...............
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23rd August 2006, 12:32 PM
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[sunita ji
pata nahi log joot par joot kaise bolte hai jab ki unhe bhi pata hota hai ki samne wala sab janta hai lakin use us ki najaroo mai gerana nahi chahta...phir bhi..pata nahi..
pata nahi.....
kay ho gaya hai duniya ko
kyon bhool gayi hai vo payar ke rishte ko
kyon dikhate hai payar apno sa..
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is ladki ne muje khatam kar diya ...
maine ise itna payar kiya phir bhi....
bewafa sabd ka sirf naam suna tha lakin bewafi kaya hote ab jane..
sazi hoe thi mahafil...
chal rahe the dor par dor...---2
pe kar ...
pe kar khoon mere armano ka
vo khay rahe the abhi or abhi or abhi or
abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or abhi or
thank for ur reply sunita ji
pata nahi vo mujse joot kaise bool sakte hai...............
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nitin ji,
mai appki baat se sahmat hu. yeh uska imman hai ki woh appse pyar mai jooth bolti rahi, jooth bolna to vaise bhi buri baat hai aur mohabat mai jooth, tauba tauba. yeh to kudha se jooth bolney ke barabar hai. bakki mai to yehi kahugi ki hamari koshish yehi honi chahiye ki hum jooth na boley, aur kisi par bhi ankhey moondh kar vishvaas na karey. en sab se kuch seekna jaroor.
take care and keep smilinggggggggggg :-)
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Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
24th August 2006, 02:15 AM
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Originally posted by sunita virender
dosto phir ek kalaam lekar appke samney hu, umeed hai app sab ko pasand aayega, mujhe appke views ka intjaar raheyga.
Ek arsay se ankho mai need nahi thi aaye humey,
ishq ne kar diya tha es kadar bekarar humey………..
Ishq ne dosto dikha diye thy kai khaab humey,
acchey bhalley thy kar gaya tha bekarar humey…….
Usne pyar se appni mahfil mai tha bulla liya humey,
bin mangey patjad mai mil gaye thi bahar humey…..
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
appki dost
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Di..
Sabse pehle to der se aane ke liye maafi chaahti hun.. par iska kaaran bhi aap jaanti hain...
Nazm to bahut khoobsoorat hai di.. Woh pyar... woh dard.. woh judaai... khoob jataaya har sher me...
Kuch likhne ki koshish
"Is kambakht dard se najaad paana itna bhi aasaan nahi..
Saat samndar paar hain.. phir bhi dhoond hi leta hai yeh humey..
Socha tha.. na mehsoos karenge bas aaj ke baad kuch bhi hum..
Yeh kahan pathar hone deta hai humey..
Aata hai jab bhi saaamne.. rooh ke tutkde kar jaata hai..
Phir khud baand ke bhi jaata hai ek naya josh humey.."
Umeed karti hun aapko pasand aayengi..
Apna khayal rakhiye di..
~Prii
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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24th August 2006, 04:39 AM
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey
wah sunita ji kya baat hai bahoot hi accha likha hai apne khaskar yeh do panktiya dil main ghar kar kayi aur muzhe mere hi likhe ek get ki yad dila gayi
"woh beetein hue pal main lao wapas aab kaise
saath tere jo bitao woh zindgi lao kaise"
likhte rahiye
aapka dost
ek hara hua ashiq
hara ashiq
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Re: Re: Re: Re: bahut dard hai -
25th August 2006, 02:22 AM
sinita ji
aaj uk ladki ne meri juti kasam kha le.....
sunita ji kay mai apka personal email id jaan sakata hoin mai ye batein sab ko nahi batana chahata nahi to mere payar ka majak ban jayega...
if u feel so then plz mail me at mittal011@yahoo.com
thanks 4 ur reply...
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Re: Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
25th August 2006, 04:10 PM
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Originally posted by chaahat123
Di..
Sabse pehle to der se aane ke liye maafi chaahti hun.. par iska kaaran bhi aap jaanti hain...
Nazm to bahut khoobsoorat hai di.. Woh pyar... woh dard.. woh judaai... khoob jataaya har sher me...
Kuch likhne ki koshish
"Is kambakht dard se najaad paana itna bhi aasaan nahi..
Saat samndar paar hain.. phir bhi dhoond hi leta hai yeh humey..
Socha tha.. na mehsoos karenge bas aaj ke baad kuch bhi hum..
Yeh kahan pathar hone deta hai humey..
Aata hai jab bhi saaamne.. rooh ke tutkde kar jaata hai..
Phir khud baand ke bhi jaata hai ek naya josh humey.."
Umeed karti hun aapko pasand aayengi..
Apna khayal rakhiye di..
~Prii
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aree priya etna pyara aur khoobsurt jawaab bhalla kisey pasand nahi aayega. aur tumne time nikala meri post ke liye, thanks alot.
tumarey share bahut acchey lagey, meri gazal ki khoobsurti aur badda di.
tumari didi
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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25th August 2006, 04:12 PM
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Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey
wah sunita ji kya baat hai bahoot hi accha likha hai apne khaskar yeh do panktiya dil main ghar kar kayi aur muzhe mere hi likhe ek get ki yad dila gayi
"woh beetein hue pal main lao wapas aab kaise
saath tere jo bitao woh zindgi lao kaise"
likhte rahiye
aapka dost
ek hara hua ashiq
hara ashiq
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dost sabse phele appka shukriya meri post par aane ke liye, aap phele baar meri post par aaye hai, umeed hai yu aatey rahogey.
aur appka share bahut badiya lagga, thanks alot
appki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Re: Re: Re: "Nahi raha mohabat ka aitbaar humey" -
26th August 2006, 05:09 PM
namaste sunita ji,
appka andaze bayan bahut khub hai,kis khubsurati ke sath appne apne zajbaaton ko kaha hai uski dad deni padegi.
aese hi likhte rahiye. appki gazal padkar ek sher bana hai arz karti hun:
' jala di hain uske hone ki sab nishani maine,
bachi hai bas yaadon ki daulat; lekin,
woh kamjarf mujhse meri jindgani mange.'
appki dost
"lovely"
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23rd October 2006, 02:44 PM
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namaste sunita ji,
appka andaze bayan bahut khub hai,kis khubsurati ke sath appne apne zajbaaton ko kaha hai uski dad deni padegi.
aese hi likhte rahiye. appki gazal padkar ek sher bana hai arz karti hun:
' jala di hain uske hone ki sab nishani maine,
bachi hai bas yaadon ki daulat; lekin,
woh kamjarf mujhse meri jindgani mange.'
appki dost
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lovely ji mere likha padney aur pasand karne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya. par aapne chand lines aur likh kar es ki shaan badda di.
thanks
aapki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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23rd October 2006, 03:04 PM
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
sister prannam,
siister ek bahot hi umda kalaam hai ye jo aapne likha hai iski har line dil ko chhu gayi
aapne jo dard ke ehsas ke sath likha hai
is peshkas ke liye dilse daad det a hu kubul kijiyenga
aapse mujhe abhi bahot kuch sikhna hai ......
apna kahyal rakhiye
khus rahiye
aapka shaitaan
aapka chhotasa bhaia ur dost
dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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10th May 2007, 04:46 PM
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Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
sister prannam,
siister ek bahot hi umda kalaam hai ye jo aapne likha hai iski har line dil ko chhu gayi
aapne jo dard ke ehsas ke sath likha hai
is peshkas ke liye dilse daad det a hu kubul kijiyenga
aapse mujhe abhi bahot kuch sikhna hai ......
apna kahyal rakhiye
khus rahiye
aapka shaitaan
aapka chhotasa bhaia ur dost
dhaval
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mere chottu...aaj main aapne purane thread check kar rahi thi to dekha ki es gazal ke reply mein tumhey shukriya kahna bhool hi gaye hoon...to socha kyu na ab kah doon....
ek baar phir se purey pyar ke saath shukriya
shaitaan ki sister
hehehehehe
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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12th May 2007, 09:33 AM
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Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
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Pukhtaa nazm di...aacha laga is qadr bkhre hue kuch khayaalon ko ek dhuuN mein baareki si khuub piroyaa hai aapne
likhte rahiYeGaa
aapka apnaa
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12th May 2007, 11:58 AM
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dosto phir ek kalaam lekar appke samney hu, umeed hai app sab ko pasand aayega, mujhe appke views ka intjaar raheyga.
Ek arsay se ankho mai need nahi thi aaye humey,
ishq ne kar diya tha es kadar bekarar humey………..
Ishq ne dosto dikha diye thy kai khaab humey,
acchey bhalley thy kar gaya tha bekarar humey…….
Usne pyar se appni mahfil mai tha bulla liya humey,
bin mangey patjad mai mil gaye thi bahar humey…..
Uske saath gujarney ko thy do pal miley humey,
zindgi bhar reheyga phir do pallo ka intjaar humey…
Kuch na tha yaad uski bahho mai khokar humey,
ajj bichad unse ankhy kar rahi hai ashkbaar humey…
Woh kahty thy ki jaan se jayada chatey hai humey,
ab samaaj ke rasmo mai ulaj nahi karty pyar humey…
Bhoolney wale kabhi royega tu bhi yaad karke humey,
tumne diye hai mohabat mai gum be-shumaar humey…
Tumne be-waffeai karke kar diya hai badnaam hamey,
Nahi raha hai “Sunita” ab mohabat ka aitbaar humey….
appki dost
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HI sunita ji es nazam men pyar ke jo gehrai aapne bayan ki hay bahut khoob lagi.kamal kardiya hay apne to wakei lajawa hay yeh humare paas alfaz nahi hay tarif ke liye.esi hi aur nazmo se hume lutfandoz karti rehiye.
DHANEYEWAD
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"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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13th May 2007, 01:01 AM
namsakar didi,
kaise hain aap?
wow! great poem. all i can say that it was an "amazing read". bahut umda likha hai apne.
aise hi likte rahein
god bless u
manish
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13th May 2007, 11:57 AM
humne bhi pyar kiya tha..............
thoda nahi beshumaar kiya tha...........
badal gayi hamari zindgi.......jab unhone kaha......
aree pagal maine to majak kiya tha............
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14th May 2007, 06:34 PM
that's good sunita ji , keep it up , write again a poem like this
SUN FAKIRA KI KAHNEE
USKA DARD OR SHERO. KI JUBANI.....
KUCH NHI IS DUNIYA MAI " DOSTI KA SIVA
NHI KOI DOST IS DUNIYA MAI MAUT KA SIVA
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18th May 2007, 04:38 PM
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Pukhtaa nazm di...aacha laga is qadr bkhre hue kuch khayaalon ko ek dhuuN mein baareki si khuub piroyaa hai aapne
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namaskaar mast bhai, bahut accha lagga aapko aapni post par dekh kar....aapne humey padda aur saraha, tahe-dil se aapka shukriya adda karti hoon, yu hi aatey rahiyega.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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18th May 2007, 04:40 PM
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HI sunita ji es nazam men pyar ke jo gehrai aapne bayan ki hay bahut khoob lagi.kamal kardiya hay apne to wakei lajawa hay yeh humare paas alfaz nahi hay tarif ke liye.esi hi aur nazmo se hume lutfandoz karti rehiye.
DHANEYEWAD
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kashif ji aapne etne pyarey lafzo.n mein hamari rachna ki tareef ki....bahut bahut shukriya.....yu hi aatey rahiyega.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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18th May 2007, 04:41 PM
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namsakar didi,
kaise hain aap?
wow! great poem. all i can say that it was an "amazing read". bahut umda likha hai apne.
aise hi likte rahein
god bless u
manish
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manish......bahuuuttttttt bahut shukriya....aise hi aatey rahna...
aapki dii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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18th May 2007, 04:42 PM
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humne bhi pyar kiya tha..............
thoda nahi beshumaar kiya tha...........
badal gayi hamari zindgi.......jab unhone kaha......
aree pagal maine to majak kiya tha............
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ritesh ji shukriya aap hamari post par aaye, aapka sher bahut accha lagga.
thanks
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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18th May 2007, 04:44 PM
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that's good sunita ji , keep it up , write again a poem like this
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namaskaar Fakira ji, aapne humey padda ur saraha...hum koshish kare.nge ki es se bhi accha likh sake.n, tahe-dil se shukriya.
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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