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29th June 2010, 12:13 PM
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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29th June 2010, 12:29 PM
Iss shaayri ke liye hamari taraf se daad kabool karein aur yuN hi likhte raheiN...!
Apna khayaal rakhna, ok...?
Duaaon ke saath
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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29th June 2010, 01:02 PM
Aasaab Kavita ji aapka kalaam accha laga ehsaas bahut gehre rahe ese hi koshish jari rakhiye daad kubool kijiye
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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29th June 2010, 01:09 PM
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Iss shaayri ke liye hamari taraf se daad kabool karein aur yuN hi likhte raheiN...!
Apna khayaal rakhna, ok...?
Duaaon ke saath
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daad dil se qubool hai,,,,,,Koshish jaari rahegi,,,,,Ek baar fir dil se dhanyawad ji,,,
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29th June 2010, 01:12 PM
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Aasaab Kavita ji aapka kalaam accha laga ehsaas bahut gehre rahe ese hi koshish jari rakhiye daad kubool kijiye
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Shukriya Kashif ji,,,,
Mujhe padhne aur srahane ka dil se shukriya....
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29th June 2010, 01:21 PM
Tum bhi dukhi aatma ho????
Lagta nahi tha tumhe dekhkarr...
Neways.... achha likha hai... Parr fourth sher samajh nahi aaya
... Us par prakash jaruur daaliyega
Aur kuch hansi mazaak ka bhi likho kabhi aur agar likha ho to link de dEna ... coz your sense of humour is very good
Aapko chuhe aur billi ki kahani sunani hai...
Jisme chuhe ne yaad dilaayi,billi ko nani hai...
lekin chuha bhool gaya tha k wo sapna tha...
aakhir me shamat to chuhe ki he aani hai :D
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29th June 2010, 01:27 PM
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Tum bhi dukhi aatma ho????
" Ji nahi dukhi aatma nahi... acha acha likhte likhte dukhi ban jaata hai " kya karu??? Jayada hi mood me aa jati hu kabhi kabhi.....Shayri-e-ishq me likhna chahti hu... shayri-e-dard me post ho jaata hai...
Lagta nahi tha tumhe dekhkarr...
Neways.... achha likha hai... Parr fourth sher samajh nahi aaya
... Us par prakash jaruur daaliyega
" bs likh diya, parkash khud daal lijiye...., itni samjh hoti to acha acha nahi likh deti??? "
Aur kuch hansi mazaak ka bhi likho kabhi aur agar likha ho to link de dEna ... coz your sense of humour is very good
" Hansi mjaak ka likhenge ,,,,jarur likhungi.....!!!!
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Aur Shukriya ji mujhe padhne k liye........Aapke sujhav par gaur karungi,,,,
T
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30th June 2010, 01:11 AM
Kavita jee aadaaB!
Bahut achchi nazm likhi hai aapne....... sabhi warse achche rahe.....
Keep writting.....
Khuda Hafez....
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30th June 2010, 09:59 AM
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Kavita jee aadaaB!
Bahut achchi nazm likhi hai aapne....... sabhi warse achche rahe.....
Keep writting.....
Khuda Hafez....
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Dil se dhanyawaad aapka......
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1st July 2010, 01:17 PM
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Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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Bahut acha likha hai apne .....aise hi likhte rahe,, daad hazir hai...
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1st July 2010, 01:22 PM
kavita ji ek ahchi nazm pesh ki hai aapne, padh kar ahcha laga, umeed karta hun aap aage v yuNhi likhti raheNgi...!! bas ye ek line samajh nahin paya main, ispe zara roshani daliyegaa...
"Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne"
yuNhi likhti rahiye...!!
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1st July 2010, 03:01 PM
bhot khub kavita ji is naye parinde ka sallam kubul kijiye bhot umda shayari hai isme......
"aaj phir sharam se aankhen jhukhi hai "pawan"
aaj phir tera aaine se samna hua hain"
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1st July 2010, 03:05 PM
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Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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2nd July 2010, 07:56 AM
khoobsurat ehsaason se labrez Nazm ko dil se daad........Kavita Ji ! khush rahen... !
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
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2nd July 2010, 12:34 PM
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Bahut acha likha hai apne .....aise hi likhte rahe,, daad hazir hai...
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Shukriya ..........................
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kavita ji ek ahchi nazm pesh ki hai aapne, padh kar ahcha laga, umeed karta hun aap aage v yuNhi likhti raheNgi...!! bas ye ek line samajh nahin paya main, ispe zara roshani daliyegaa...
"Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne"
yuNhi likhti rahiye...!!
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Bahut bahut shukriya lucky ji,,,,
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne....
>> Zindagi jeene ke liye jo ek aas ya icha hoti hai wo khatam ho chuki hai....!!! talabgaar means kisi cheez ki bahut lalsa hona. Waise mai jayada achi trah smjha nahi paai.... aasha hai Aap smjh jaayenge....!!!!
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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2nd July 2010, 12:41 PM
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bhot khub kavita ji is naye parinde ka sallam kubul kijiye bhot umda shayari hai isme......
"aaj phir sharam se aankhen jhukhi hai "pawan"
aaj phir tera aaine se samna hua hain"
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Shukriya Pawan ji,,,,,,, Aapka salaam qubool hai.... and welcome to SDC Privaar...
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2nd July 2010, 12:42 PM
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kavita jee
radhe radhe
ahsaas bahut achhe hain is nazm ke likhti rahiye aise hi
duaon ke saath
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Radhe Radhe Ishq ji,
Dhanyawaad mujhe padhne k liye....!!!!
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2nd July 2010, 12:44 PM
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khoobsurat ehsaason se labrez Nazm ko dil se daad........Kavita Ji ! khush rahen... !
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
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Namaskaar Naresh ji,
Daad dil se qubool hai...... Mujhe padhne aur sarahaane ka shukriya....!!!
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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2nd July 2010, 01:33 PM
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Bahut bahut shukriya lucky ji,,,,
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne....
>> Zindagi jeene ke liye jo ek aas ya icha hoti hai wo khatam ho chuki hai....!!! talabgaar means kisi cheez ki bahut lalsa hona. Waise mai jayada achi trah smjha nahi paai.... aasha hai Aap smjh jaayenge....!!!!
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kavita ji bataane ka shukriya, par mere khayal se aas aur talabgaar dono kafi hadd tak el hi meaning rakhte haiN, aas ka matlab ikcha nahin balki umeed hoti hai, aur isiliye vo line thodi si atpati lagi thi mujhe.. maafi chahuNga pa pehle main aapka point of view jaan.na chaahta tha ki kahin main to galti nahIn kar raha padhne me, ho sake to wahaan aas ki jagah koi aur lafz rakh dijiye par ek hi line me dono ek saath line ko kharaab kar rahe haiN....!!
Ek aur baat aapki jo maiN line hai
"khushi to bahut thi, par muskuraya na gaya..."
isme halka sa dosh hai, ya to aap ise kaheN ki "khush to bahut thi" ya fir "khushi to bahut hui" khushi to bahut thi, thoda sa galat laga mujhe, waise mujhe kuch aata vata nahin hai, isiliye gar galtiyaN ho ajyeN to maa kijiyega...!!
waise gar meri kisi v baat se aap aahat ho ya aapko kisi v bat se thes pahuNche to maafi ka talabgaar rahuNga.....!!
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kavita ji bataane ka shukriya, par mere khayal se aas aur talabgaar dono kafi hadd tak el hi meaning rakhte haiN, aas ka matlab ikcha nahin balki umeed hoti hai, aur isiliye vo line thodi si atpati lagi thi mujhe.. maafi chahuNga pa pehle main aapka point of view jaan.na chaahta tha ki kahin main to galti nahIn kar raha padhne me, ho sake to wahaan aas ki jagah koi aur lafz rakh dijiye par ek hi line me dono ek saath line ko kharaab kar rahe haiN....!!
Ek aur baat aapki jo maiN line hai
"khushi to bahut thi, par muskuraya na gaya..."
isme halka sa dosh hai, ya to aap ise kaheN ki "khush to bahut thi" ya fir "khushi to bahut hui" khushi to bahut thi, thoda sa galat laga mujhe, waise mujhe kuch aata vata nahin hai, isiliye gar galtiyaN ho ajyeN to maa kijiyega...!!
waise gar meri kisi v baat se aap aahat ho ya aapko kisi v bat se thes pahuNche to maafi ka talabgaar rahuNga.....!!
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Lucky ji,,,
Mujhe itni knowledge nahi hai abhi,,, bas jo dil me aata hai likh deti hu. galat hu ya sahi wo to aap sab hi smjhayenge mujhe. isliye mujhe apki kisi baat ka koi bura nahi lga. balki mujhe galti sudharane ko moka mila yahi bahut hai mere liye.......maafi mangne ki koi jarurat nahi hai aur mai asha karungi ki bhavishya me bhi aap meri galti sudharne me meri help karenge.
so dil se shukriya aapke sujhaavo ka.......
koshish ki hai isme sudhaar laane ki........
Khush to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Jeene ki har koshish bekaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khush to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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2nd July 2010, 04:14 PM
are kavita ji humari kya bisaat ki kisi ko kuch sikha sakeN, hum to ab tak dhund rahe haiN ki koi sikhane wala hume mil jaaye, waise bas jo 2-3 cheezen dikhi thi mujhe vo aapko bata di,bas yunhi likhti rahiye aap aur hume v ahche khayaal padhne ka mauka milta rahega....!!
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20th August 2010, 04:56 PM
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Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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kya khoob likha hai kavita ji---wah
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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kya khoob likha hai kavita ji---wah
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
krishna
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Shukriya Krishna ji,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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30th August 2010, 02:06 PM
Very well written................
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Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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30th August 2010, 08:29 PM
kavita ji,
behad khoobsurat ehsaas aur utne hi khoobsurat alfaaz....
achha laga padh kar...
meri taraf se daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega....
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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31st August 2010, 10:27 AM
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Very well written................
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Shukriya Sajid Ji,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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9th September 2010, 10:10 PM
Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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10th September 2010, 12:33 PM
Hmm.... Ab mai kya kahu is comment par.... pehle to shukriya jo aapko ye nazam pasand aai... Aur kehna chaungi... jeevan me kuch pal bahut dukh dete hai... par hume un dukho ko bhul kar aage badhna chaiye.... Aur umeed karungi, aap bhi aisa hi karenge....!!! Kush raha kijiye....!!! Aur missing Tap Tap in this comment.... Tap Tap Taaliyaan kahan hai.....
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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10th September 2010, 03:37 PM
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Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Raah me mud-mud kar bahut baar dekha
Band aankho se dil me unka pyaar dekha
Bas unse hi hume mudkar bulwayaa na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Hum to aaye the Sang unke chalne ke liye
Tadpe the arma bhi hmare machlne ke liye
Par unse mere pyar ka sath nibhaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Do pal me zindagi bejaar kar di usne
Zindagi ke liye aas talabgaar kar di usne
Jinka pyar kabhi humse thukraaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Duniya ki nighaaho se bacha kar jisko
Dil me rakha tha hmesha sja kar jisko
Khud ki tijori se ussi ko churaaya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
Khushi to bahot thi, Bas muskuraya na gaya
Samne hi thi Manzil, Kadam badhaya na gaya
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Kavita ji aapki ye kavita bhi bahut khoobsurat hai dil se daad hazir hai kabool karen.....
Aapka Santosh..........
Bahut tanhaiya.N hai.N mere hisse mei.N churalo tum
Tumhara saath meri tanhaiyo.N se kuch to behtar hai...
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10th September 2010, 03:43 PM
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Kavita ji aapki ye kavita bhi bahut khoobsurat hai dil se daad hazir hai kabool karen.....
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Shukriya Santosh ji,
Aapki daad dil se qubool hai... Aise hi sath dete rahiye.
Khush rahiye....
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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10th September 2010, 05:05 PM
bahut khoob kavita ji...aise hi likhte rahain
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10th September 2010, 05:29 PM
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bahut khoob kavita ji...aise hi likhte rahain
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Shukriya Rashmi ji,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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10th September 2010, 07:19 PM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Hmm.... Ab mai kya kahu is comment par.... pehle to shukriya jo aapko ye nazam pasand aai... Aur kehna chaungi... jeevan me kuch pal bahut dukh dete hai... par hume un dukho ko bhul kar aage badhna chaiye.... Aur umeed karungi, aap bhi aisa hi karenge....!!! Kush raha kijiye....!!! Aur missing Tap Tap in this comment.... Tap Tap Taaliyaan kahan hai.....
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hmmmmmm kavi shayad tum theek kahti ho....hamme aage k bare mein sochna chahiye.....
us waqt jara sa pareshan tha is liye ...ab sun lo taliyaaN....tap...tap...tap..
Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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11th September 2010, 01:26 PM
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kavita ji,
behad khoobsurat ehsaas aur utne hi khoobsurat alfaaz....
achha laga padh kar...
meri taraf se daad haazir hai qubuul kijiyega....
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Aapko meri nazam pasand aai uske liye teh dil se shukargujaar hu
Aapki daad dil se qubool hai.....
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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11th September 2010, 01:27 PM
SA,
Aapki Tap Tap Taliyoo.n ke liye shukriya...........
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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11th September 2010, 06:29 PM
aaj phir se padha .....aaj phir se aankhein nam huiiii
Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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