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Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam? -
3rd October 2009, 03:04 PM
Pyaare Dosto.N
Namaskaar / AAdab
Apni ek taza koshish aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hoon. Ummid karti hoon aap sab ki raa'ye zarur milegi
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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3rd October 2009, 03:38 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
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Purvi ji...Namashkar....
Kaisi hai aap....
Bahut khubsurat ehsaason ka guldasta banati lagi aapki yeh ghazal....har sher mai dil ko chhu jaane ki taasir bhi dikhti hai....jise maine khud mehsus bhi kiyaa....aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye.....nice creation....
maqta mujhe dil ke bahut kareeb laga....
dil se daad...kabul kare....
aap apna khayal rakhiye...
duaaon ke saath...
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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3rd October 2009, 06:36 PM
Dii .......................
Wah kya baat hai ek master stroke hai aapki yeh gazal bahut khoob sabhi sher achche behad achche lage....
Ab lag raha hai ke meri Gazal Dii ki gazal, Aab aap ki kalam mein Dhar lag gayi hai
aise hi likhate rahaiye.... Khush rahiye..
Mehfil ki ronak bane rakhiey.... Is gazla ke maqte ki tarha....
Yeh sher behad khoob laga mujhe...
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
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3rd October 2009, 07:23 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Pyaare Dosto.N
Namaskaar / AAdab
Apni ek taza koshish aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hoon. Ummid karti hoon aap sab ki raa'ye zarur milegi
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
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Hamein bhi to acchi lagi aap ki shaayri ( hameshaa ki tarah )
2nd sher ke pehle misre main kuch ulajh se gaye hum...! Samajhne main hum galti kar rahe honge ya likhne main aap ne ki hogi...!
Nahi hai ilm tumhein apne- paraaye ka
Aur haan, Purvi Ji...! Maqta kuch khaas lagaa...!
Kuch jyaada bol gaya to gustaaki maaf...!
Duaaon ke saath
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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3rd October 2009, 07:43 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Pyaare Dosto.N
Namaskaar / AAdab
Apni ek taza koshish aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hoon. Ummid karti hoon aap sab ki raa'ye zarur milegi
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
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wakai ek ghazal hai ye...............
bahut acche,,,,,,,,,,,
uu hi likhte rahiye
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4th October 2009, 02:43 AM
Dearest Purvi jii..
Kaise hain aap? aaj bahut dino baad aapko padhna naseeb hua ..
Ghazal behaat pasand aayiii...har sher Mah sha allah ....
aapki ghazal padh kar ek aziz dost ki baat yaad aagayii..
ek Jaanam ..ek Janam ka dukh dekar ****dkar chalejaate hain...
shayad tab samajh nahi paayi thi ab ..theek hain
agar aapko meri baat ka bura laga Im sorry
Aur ese likhtey rahey...
with lotz of love
Take a good care
aapki
Mandeep
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4th October 2009, 04:55 AM
Subhaan-allah
Mujhe is ghazal ne loot liya .. alfaazoN ke saath jaise yaari nibha dee ha aapne .. aur har sher ek doosre ko dekh ke jal raha hoga ki iski chamak jiyadah hai ya uski...
bohat khoob mujhe behad pasand aayi
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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~"REBELLIOUS IN LOVE"~
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4th October 2009, 06:31 AM
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
ishq mein aisa hi hota hai dost
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
kaash ki apne aur paraaye mein hum bhi farq samjhte toh aaj khush hote
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
sach kismat mein jo likha hai wahi milega par kya hum kismat ko badal nahi sakte??
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
uff....yeh majburi
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
jab pyar ne saath chhoda tab dard ne apnaya hai
bahot khub dost.................badi pyari ghazal hai tumhari tarah, dil ko chu gayi.
keep up
Warm Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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4th October 2009, 11:58 AM
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
ghazal ji behad acha likha hai aapne tamam ashaar ache hain bas ye uper wala sher samajh nahi aya ismai tumne hai ya tumhe behar haal baqi ashaar bohat ache lage likhti rahain..................
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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5th October 2009, 03:30 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Pyaare Dosto.N
Namaskaar / AAdab
Apni ek taza koshish aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hoon. Ummid karti hoon aap sab ki raa'ye zarur milegi
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
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bahot hi khub surat ghazal hai Di
har sher lajawab hai
tarif keliye alfaz kam pad rahe hain
apna khayal rakhiyega
aapki
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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~ Ek Ghazal ~
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11th October 2009, 02:06 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Purvi ji...Namashkar....
Kaisi hai aap....
Bahut khubsurat ehsaason ka guldasta banati lagi aapki yeh ghazal....har sher mai dil ko chhu jaane ki taasir bhi dikhti hai....jise maine khud mehsus bhi kiyaa....aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye.....nice creation....
maqta mujhe dil ke bahut kareeb laga....
dil se daad...kabul kare....
aap apna khayal rakhiye...
duaaon ke saath...
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Naresh jee...
saath dene ka aur housala afzaayee ka bahot bahot shukriya...
aap ki dost
purvi
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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11th October 2009, 02:19 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Pyaare Dosto.N
Namaskaar / AAdab
Apni ek taza koshish aap sab ke saath share kar rahi hoon. Ummid karti hoon aap sab ki raa'ye zarur milegi
Kya yahi hai Ishq ka dastur jaanam?
KyuN Dil tod ke jaate ho dur jaanam?
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
Bayan karke "Ghazal" dard-e-dastaN
Mahefil meiN ho gayi mashhur jaanam
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hello purvi hows u
nice to read u after long time ...............!!
very nice write dear
kee p it
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11th October 2009, 08:03 PM
Nahi hai ilm tumNe apne - paraaye ka
Kya ho abhi bhi nashe meiN chur jaanam?
Purvi Jii,,
Adaab!
Aik khobsoooorat kaawish rahi aap ki...
Oper quote kiya shair boht acha laga....
Aisay hi likhtay rahiye,,
Aur apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,
GOD BLESS YOU,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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~ Ek Ghazal ~
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12th October 2009, 10:01 AM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Dii .......................
Wah kya baat hai ek master stroke hai aapki yeh gazal bahut khoob sabhi sher achche behad achche lage....
Ab lag raha hai ke meri Gazal Dii ki gazal, Aab aap ki kalam mein Dhar lag gayi hai
aise hi likhate rahaiye.... Khush rahiye..
Mehfil ki ronak bane rakhiey.... Is gazla ke maqte ki tarha....
Yeh sher behad khoob laga mujhe...
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
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sameer....
agar aap sabhi dosto.N ka saath aise hee milta raha to, main bhi aise hee likha karungi...
kisi bhi shayar ke sirf likhna hee zaruri nahi hota na.... jab tak apno ka saath na ho kuch bhee cheez maaiine nahi rakhti
apna saath aise hee dete rahena
tumhari dii
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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12th October 2009, 10:10 AM
Purvi ji, bahut pyare khayal h
ye sher kuch khaas rahe
Paya hum ne jo kismat meiN tha likha
Milta nahi sabhi ko kohinur jaanam
Chahkar bhi bhool nahi pati hoon tujhe
Na hoga koi itna bhi majbur jaanam
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22nd October 2009, 03:04 PM
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Originally Posted by Mushkil
Hamein bhi to acchi lagi aap ki shaayri ( hameshaa ki tarah )
2nd sher ke pehle misre main kuch ulajh se gaye hum...! Samajhne main hum galti kar rahe honge ya likhne main aap ne ki hogi...!
Nahi hai ilm tumhein apne- paraaye ka
Aur haan, Purvi Ji...! Maqta kuch khaas lagaa...!
Kuch jyaada bol gaya to gustaaki maaf...!
Duaaon ke saath
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Danny Jee,
Kaise hai aap??
Ghazal padhne aur housla afzaayee ka bahot bahot shukriya...
haan mujhse 2nd sher ke pehle misre meiN ek galati ho gayii hai..... aap ki samajhne meiN koii galati nahi huwii hai....
ghazal ko guar se padhne ka shukriya
ummid karti hoon aap ka saath aise hee milta rahega
aap ki dost
purvi
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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22nd October 2009, 05:27 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
Danny Jee,
Kaise hai aap??
Ghazal padhne aur housla afzaayee ka bahot bahot shukriya...
haan mujhse 2nd sher ke pehle misre meiN ek galati ho gayii hai..... aap ki samajhne meiN koii galati nahi huwii hai....
ghazal ko guar se padhne ka shukriya
ummid karti hoon aap ka saath aise hee milta rahega
aap ki dost
purvi
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Thanks for taking my remark positively, Ghazal Ji...!
With blessings
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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~ Ek Ghazal ~
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25th October 2009, 10:01 AM
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wakai ek ghazal hai ye...............
bahut acche,,,,,,,,,,,
uu hi likhte rahiye
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Ziddi jee,
aap jaise umda shayro.N ki comment hee mere liye sab se baRi khushi ki baat hai...
housla afzaayee ka shukriya
aage bhi saath milta rahega isi ummid ke saath
aap ki dost
purvi
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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25th October 2009, 10:03 AM
Hello Mann,
kaisi ho???
Apno ki koii baat ka bura lag sakta hai bhala???.. sorry kahenewali kyaa baat ho gayii dear??
hamesha muskurati raho....
tumhari dost
purvi
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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