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Bhool jana to ab nahi bas mai - 4th June 2010, 12:12 AM
Haazreen e mehfil ek choti si koshish laikar hazir hua hun umeed karta hun ki aap log apni qeemti aara se nawaazenge

zindagi bat gayi do khaano mai
aapki nazro.N ke paymaano mai

jab se deewaangi samjh aayi
hum bhi shamil huway dewaano mai

dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

tay parindo ko musafat karke
lot jana hai aashiyaano mai

haar se keh do door hat jaaye
ab hai aslam teri amaano mai


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Aslam Sahab As salam walekum

Bade lambe arse bad aapli koi kalaam nazar aayi hai......
Bhai itna lamba intezar na karwaya kijiye.... log bhool jate hia ke koi aisa shaks bhi hua karta tha......

Chaliye aapki gazal se ruberu ho jayen.....

[QUOTE=noor_noor;394393]Haazreen e mehfil ek choti si koshish laikar hazir hua hun umeed karta hun ki aap log apni qeemti aara se nawaazenge

zindagi bat gayi do khaano mai
aapki nazro.N ke paymaano mai

Kya shayrana andaaz mein bayan kiya hia sahab.... Bahut khoob Daad

jab se deewaangi samjh aayi
hum bhi shamil huway dewaano mai

Kya baat hia ishqiyaa hai achcha hai.....

dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

Bahut umda janab...... kya baat kahi hai waqt e nazakhat hakhekhat se ruberu karwa diya Masha Allah.....

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

Oye hoye.... behad gehra kaha hai janaab daad hi daad superb...

tay parindo ko musafat karke
lot jana hai aashiyaano mai

simple but effective....

haar se keh do door hat jaaye
ab hai aslam teri amaano mai

Kya baat hai....... Bahut khoob janab..... daad

Behad khoob rahi aapki yeh gazal janab......
Likhate rahiye.... Bazm mein aate rahiye......
Khush rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez.......
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4th June 2010, 08:35 AM
dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

Too Good..........Aslam Ji !

aur maqta bhi asardaar laga mujhe ....dil se daad hazir hai.........yunhi aur bhi behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen...khush rahen...

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....



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Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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4th June 2010, 12:56 PM
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Haazreen e mehfil ek choti si koshish laikar hazir hua hun umeed karta hun ki aap log apni qeemti aara se nawaazenge

zindagi bat gayi do khaano mai
aapki nazro.N ke paymaano mai

jab se deewaangi samjh aayi
hum bhi shamil huway dewaano mai

dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

tay parindo ko musafat karke
lot jana hai aashiyaano mai

haar se keh do door hat jaaye
ab hai aslam teri amaano mai


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ji very nice ....................


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Bahut aacha aslam sahab
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Bohat khoob mere bhai............bohat pyaari ghazal thi isme koi shak nahi.......par kuch to hai jiska mujhe intezaar hai tumhari shayri me jo ab tak nahi mila mujhe, mere intezaar ki jhalak matle me to thi phir pooori ghazal me ghayeb rahi.

Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil

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Haazreen e mehfil ek choti si koshish laikar hazir hua hun umeed karta hun ki aap log apni qeemti aara se nawaazenge

ab aapo kah rahe hai to aari chalate hai....ab qeemti to nahi hai
koi rais aaye tab tak ham se hi kaam chalaiye

zindagi bat gayi do khaano mai
aapki nazro.N ke paymaano mai


bilkul naya khayaal
maine kabhi nahi pada aisa qualification
dher saari daad

aur ek baat kahunga

apko beher ki asli pakad hai....in its true spirit


jab se deewaangi samjh aayi
hum bhi shamil huway dewaano mai

bahut zabardast
yaha apki aap asli ustaadi dikha gaye
bus aap zara galat mahfil me hai.....is sher ka mafhoom itna khubsurat hai ki dil bagh bagh hoi gaya
bilkul naya khayaal ye bhi



dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

dam aur marna.............
nice word play....chacha galib ke style me
very good
aur phir dam...marne aur uske baad nazar bhi aana
bahut class rabt kayam ki hai word play se
apka lafz baratne ka hunar khoob hai....
par bad luck ...ki total sher khila nahi....mafhoom common hone ki wajah se




bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

hmmm....accha laga

tay parindo ko musafat karke
lot jana hai aashiyaano mai

'mu' lamba padna hoga........
tarannum me aa jaye magar shayad tahat me naa aaye

haar se keh do door hat jaaye
ab hai aslam teri amaano mai

haye.hame bhi koi mil jaaye.......
ab to shadi ho gayi varna aisa bank balance wali ladki dhundte jisse full security ho jaati life ki
apk fikr acchi hai( mujhe malum hai apka andaaz alag hai magar aap baat samajh gaye honge aaisa bhi hota hai...isliye soch samajh kar bhai....dunya daari bhi nibahaani hai

wazn to kareeb kareeb sahi hai
bayaani bhi bahut acchi hai hai
apko ab koi nahi rok sakta
you are easily one ot he best here






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bahot khub aslam sahab
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[QUOTE=kwahish;394400]Aslam Sahab As salam walekum

Bade lambe arse bad aapli koi kalaam nazar aayi hai......
Bhai itna lamba intezar na karwaya kijiye.... log bhool jate hia ke koi aisa shaks bhi hua karta tha......

Chaliye aapki gazal se ruberu ho jayen.....

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Haazreen e mehfil ek choti si koshish laikar hazir hua hun umeed karta hun ki aap log apni qeemti aara se nawaazenge

zindagi bat gayi do khaano mai
aapki nazro.N ke paymaano mai

Kya shayrana andaaz mein bayan kiya hia sahab.... Bahut khoob Daad

jab se deewaangi samjh aayi
hum bhi shamil huway dewaano mai

Kya baat hia ishqiyaa hai achcha hai.....

dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

Bahut umda janab...... kya baat kahi hai waqt e nazakhat hakhekhat se ruberu karwa diya Masha Allah.....

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

Oye hoye.... behad gehra kaha hai janaab daad hi daad superb...

tay parindo ko musafat karke
lot jana hai aashiyaano mai

simple but effective....

haar se keh do door hat jaaye
ab hai aslam teri amaano mai

Kya baat hai....... Bahut khoob janab..... daad

Behad khoob rahi aapki yeh gazal janab......
Likhate rahiye.... Bazm mein aate rahiye......
Khush rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez.......

Sameer sahab aapka tahe dil se shukurguzar huN ke aapne itni tawajjo se meri ghazal ko na sirf pada balke apni mohabbat se bhi nawaaza is hosla afzaaii ka bhut bhut shukriya umeed karta huN ki aap yuN hi nawaazte rahenge



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dam jo bhrte they hum pe marne ka
aate hain ab nazar begaano mai

bhool jaana to ab nahi bas mai
teer e dil na raha kamaano mai

Too Good..........Aslam Ji !

aur maqta bhi asardaar laga mujhe ....dil se daad hazir hai.........yunhi aur bhi behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen...khush rahen...

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
Naresh jii bhut bhut shukriya is hosla afzaii ka, aap jaise log ghazal ki thodi bhi tareef kar deiN to isse ziyada hame kya chahiye yaani koshish safal, yuN hi apni qeemti raaye se nawaazte rahiye


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Bahut aacha aslam sahab
Bil kul hi Dil me uttar gaya. Bahut khoob

Bhut nawaazish sahab ghazal ki pasndagi ke liyN tahe dil se shukrguzaar huN


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Bohat khoob mere bhai............bohat pyaari ghazal thi isme koi shak nahi.......par kuch to hai jiska mujhe intezaar hai tumhari shayri me jo ab tak nahi mila mujhe, mere intezaar ki jhalak matle me to thi phir pooori ghazal me ghayeb rahi.

Sajid sahab bhut bhut shukriya ke aapni apni mohabbat se nawaaza, badi hi choti soch ka maalik huN sajid sahab meiN, ye aapka badakpan hai jo aap mujse isse bhi ziyada bhtar ki umeed rakhte haiN mere liyN bais e fakhr hai, koshish karunga ke aap ke mayaar ke mutabiq kuch keh sakuN, filhaal aapne jo kuch tooti phooti tehreer se kaam chala lia uske liyN aapka tahe dil se shukurguzzar huN aapni aara yuN hi nawaazte rahiye


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