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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai! - 14th June 2007, 09:44 AM

Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
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14th June 2007, 10:06 AM

Dheer bhaiyaa namskaaR:

aapka andaaz to har baar ki t^arH bahot baDhiyaa rahaa..chhoTii beHr meiN liKHii huii aapkii yeH Ghazal baRii khoob rahii..guzaariSh haii kii yuuNhii aap bazm ko sajaate raheN haMeShaa..

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yeH sher mujH~e bahot pasaNd aaYa..

daad qabool farmaaYeN..

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nice - 14th June 2007, 10:19 AM

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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
dheer ji bhut khub kyaa andaaz-e-byaa hai dil ko chhu gyaa aapka kalaam......yun hi likhte rahiyega.........raj.........


un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
Adab dheer ji,
kaise hain aap?

wah dheer ji,
bohot hi khubsurat,aur dil ko chhu janae wali nazm likhi hai aapne.

wese bhi aapki har nazm apne aap me kafi mukammal,aur daad ke kabil hoti hain,
bas aise hi achhi _ achhi nazmon se yahan ki mehfil sajate rahiyega,

hamesha khush rahiyega.
apna khayal rakhiye.

ALLAH HAFIZ

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14th June 2007, 01:09 PM

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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
Bahoot khub
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Dheer bhaiyaa namskaaR:

aapka andaaz to har baar ki t^arH bahot baDhiyaa rahaa..chhoTii beHr meiN liKHii huii aapkii yeH Ghazal baRii khoob rahii..guzaariSh haii kii yuuNhii aap bazm ko sajaate raheN haMeShaa..



yeH sher mujH~e bahot pasaNd aaYa..

daad qabool farmaaYeN..

khuSh raheN..apnaa khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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pyare dheer bhai kaise hain aap aaj aapka likha kalaam padha yoon laga rooh mukammal ho gai..behad haseen ehsaas hain..likhte rahen..


mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
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16th June 2007, 01:30 PM

dear dheer
aapki nazam bahut acchi laggi....bahut badiya tareekey se aapne aapni baat kahi hai...aapka yeh andaz-e-bayaan dil ko bhaya....yu hi likhtey rahiye, kush rahiye

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Adab dheer ji,
kaise hain aap?

wah dheer ji,
bohot hi khubsurat,aur dil ko chhu janae wali nazm likhi hai aapne.

wese bhi aapki har nazm apne aap me kafi mukammal,aur daad ke kabil hoti hain,
bas aise hi achhi _ achhi nazmon se yahan ki mehfil sajate rahiyega,

hamesha khush rahiyega.
apna khayal rakhiye.

ALLAH HAFIZ

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18th June 2007, 04:29 PM

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

Wah! bahot achha sher likha hai. Bahot dino.n baad apko padhaa hai, aur bahot khoob kalaam se roobaroo hue hai.n aaj. Daad kabool kijiyega.

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pyare dheer bhai kaise hain aap aaj aapka likha kalaam padha yoon laga rooh mukammal ho gai..behad haseen ehsaas hain..likhte rahen..


mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

bahot khoob janab...
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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
dheer babu

kamal hai janab aaj aapko is roop main dekh kar accha laga
bhaii aaj to aapne gazal badi tahreer main pesh kii hai ,,, or gazal main naseehat bhii bhai waah kya baad hai

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

shandar gazal per merii daad hazir hai kabool farmaiyega
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ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

helo dheer yaha b khoob mehek rahe hai aap...bahut achha likha apne...
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aapki nazam bahut acchi laggi....bahut badiya tareekey se aapne aapni baat kahi hai...aapka yeh andaz-e-bayaan dil ko bhaya....yu hi likhtey rahiye, kush rahiye

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hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

Wah! bahot achha sher likha hai. Bahot dino.n baad apko padhaa hai, aur bahot khoob kalaam se roobaroo hue hai.n aaj. Daad kabool kijiyega.

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kamal hai janab aaj aapko is roop main dekh kar accha laga
bhaii aaj to aapne gazal badi tahreer main pesh kii hai ,,, or gazal main naseehat bhii bhai waah kya baad hai

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

shandar gazal per merii daad hazir hai kabool farmaiyega
shukriyaa

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helo dheer yaha b khoob mehek rahe hai aap...bahut achha likha apne...
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aapki ye ghazal bahut hi dilkash hai... alfaaz bahut hi seedhe haiN... ye ghazal mujhe bahut pasand aaii, khaas kar yeH sher....

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

waah! waah! bohat khuub, kyaa khoob likhaa hai aapne. ek khoobsoorat aur dilkash koShiSh par meri taraf se bahut mubaarakbaad.

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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
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miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
namaste dheer saahab


maiN to yuuN hi ek sarsarii nazar daal'ne aaya tha lekin aapki Ghazal padhne ke baad youN mehsuus hua ke kuch kahe bina chala gaya to yeh ek may'aari qalaam ki tau'heen hogi so bhai meri mubarakbaad qabuul farmaa'iye, Ghazal mujhe behadd pasaNd aayi hai

aapki soch aur wazan ke ilm ka asar zaahir ta'ur pe nazar aa raha hai aur waqt ke saath saath ismeiN aur bhi nikhaar aayega, mashq jaari rakhiye


rab raakha
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

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aapki ye ghazal bahut hi dilkash hai... alfaaz bahut hi seedhe haiN... ye ghazal mujhe bahut pasand aaii, khaas kar yeH sher....

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii hai!

waah! waah! bohat khuub, kyaa khoob likhaa hai aapne. ek khoobsoorat aur dilkash koShiSh par meri taraf se bahut mubaarakbaad.

Mayank
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Aadaab!! kaise hai aap!!
Aap jaise umdaa gazal-kaar ke nek dil se chand alfaaz agar kalaam ke baare me.n sun'ne ko mil jaaye, to kyaa kahne! phir taariif-o-honslaa afzaayi to subhaan allah! Aisaa mehsoos hotaa hai ki kuch kamyaabii haansil huii hai!!
aapne naachiiz ki gazal par nigaah-e-karam faramaayaa! bahut bahut shukriyaa!! aapkii daad-o-tahsin sir aankho.n par!!
aise hi kalaamoN ko apnii maujudagii se aabaad karte rahiyegaa, aur apne beshkimtii raa'i-mashware se unke husn me.n izaafaa kijiyegaa!
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Aadaab sabhii ko!!
Ek aur kalaam mehfil ke naam!! chhoTii beh'r me.n koshish kii hai!!
mulaayezaa farmaayiye!!
================================================== =
miTTii se likhaa miT'naa hii hai!
miTTii me.n ise mil'naa hii hai!

ik rut hai mukarrar har gul kii!
har gul ko kabhii khil'naa hii hai!

mehfil me.n puraane yaaro.n kii!
charchaa to tiraa chhi.D'naa hii hai!

ye raaz-e-mohabbat aam na ho!
hoTho.N ko tujhe sil'naa hii hai!

gar shaam-o-sahar khanke pyaale.N!
a'iyyaashii me.n bik'naa hii ha
hu.n fitrat se chaahe banjaaraa!
ik din to kahii Tik'naa hii hai!

kuchh chhi.nTe ka.nwal pe girte hai!
sa.ngat kaa asar dikh'naa hii hai!
DHEER sahab bahut khoob likha hai aapne unhi likhte rahiye..............aapka dost


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namaste dheer saahab


maiN to yuuN hi ek sarsarii nazar daal'ne aaya tha lekin aapki Ghazal padhne ke baad youN mehsuus hua ke kuch kahe bina chala gaya to yeh ek may'aari qalaam ki tau'heen hogi so bhai meri mubarakbaad qabuul farmaa'iye, Ghazal mujhe behadd pasaNd aayi hai

aapki soch aur wazan ke ilm ka asar zaahir ta'ur pe nazar aa raha hai aur waqt ke saath saath ismeiN aur bhi nikhaar aayega, mashq jaari rakhiye


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kaise mizaaz hai aapke! ummiid karta hu.n ab aapkii sehat me.n sudhaar ho rahaa hogaa?
mai.ne to ek dafaa pehle bhii aapse kahaa thaa, ki kalaam ko kamyaabii ke aayine me.n gar dekhaa jaye to Maikash saheb kii daad naz'r aanaa bahut hi achaa nishaan hai! aaj phir kai roz-o-shab ke baad mere kisi kalaam pe aapke dastakhat naz'r aaye!! kyaa kahne!!
aapkii sirf ek nazar hi shai'rii ke motii chun letii hai ... phir mere kalaam se agar aap ek sher hii chun ke pasand karte to bhii maiN khush ho jaataa... yaha to aapko puraa kalaam hi pasand aa gayaa!!
aapkii mubaarakbaad sir aa.nkho.n pe!! apne beshkimtii tabsire se mere ilm aur kalaam ke husn , dono me.n izaafaa karte rahiyegaa!aisii guzaarish hai!!

Shukriyaa!!

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DHEER sahab bahut khoob likha hai aapne unhi likhte rahiye..............aapka dost
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