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Tanhaa Raahi
  
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' Iss Jahaan Main Apna Jahaannum Tumne Jee Liya Hai...! ' -
2nd October 2009, 03:10 AM
Zindagi mein bhi musaafir houn teri kashti kaa
Tu jahaan mujhse kahegi mein utar jaauuNgaa Moin Nazar Ji Kudrat ne mujhe jo bhi diya meine wahi liya hai Kismat ke haanthon gham mila issko bhi liya hai Naya koyi ghaav dena ho to woh bhi dete jaana Uss puraane zakhm ko kab ka meine see liya hai Hichki jab bhi aati hai yaad ussi ki saath laati hai Andaazah lagta naam usske labhon ne hi liya hai Zubaani usski ‘Jaanu' sun.ne ko kaan tarse bahut Bewafaa mujhe bulaakar naam ussne sahi liya hai Sataane main Khudaa sa maahir hai meri dilrubaa Maaf kijiyega Ya Rab misaal meine yunhi liya hai Bhaag se milta hai Aab e hayaat jo mujhe na mila Mere hisse main tha zehar jisse meine pee liya hai Fanaa hone par jannat zaruur paayegaa ‘Amanush’ Iss jahaan main apna jahaannum tumne jee liya hai Kudrat : Nature Andaazah lagaana : To guess Maahir : Expert Aab e hayaat : Nectar  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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2nd October 2009, 05:59 AM
Dany bhayee katl kar diya aapne to ..... kya andaze byaan ......... sada sada se lafz padhte jao par jab kafiye pe pahuncho to ek dam jaise hairaani ki wah .... gahzab . Katl........
ye dekhe ..... Naya koyi ghaav dena ho to woh bhi dete jaana Uss puraane zakhm ko kab ka meine see liya hai katl ........... hugssssss Sataane main Khudaa sa maahir hai meri dilrubaa Maaf kijiyega Ya Rab misaal meine yunhi liya hai kya baat hia tanz mara aur fir .... aisa rebuttal.. bhagwan se bhi chalaki woh bhi masoomiyat ke sath Bhaag se milta hai Aab e hayaat jo mujhe na mila Mere hisse main tha zehar jisse meine pee liya hai impressive yar Fanaa hone par jannat zaruur paayegaa ‘Amanush’ Iss jahaan main apna jahaannum tumne jee liya hai hmmm baat gaur karne layak hai maza aa gaya bhayee likhte raho reps added |
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2nd October 2009, 06:42 AM
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wow!!...superb!! ...superb!!...ek behad khoobsurat ghazal per dil se daad qubool kijiye danny ji..... her sher qabil-e tareef hai.....yaqeen maniye bohat accha likha hai aapne,...dil ko chu gaye saare ke saare sher.... kamaal likhte hain aap......andaaz-e bayaan bhi lajawaab hai.... yuhi mehfil ko sajaate rahiye.... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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2nd October 2009, 07:38 AM
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Honestly its a blast!!! My favourite lines are in red.,....lolz. Each and every line is just too good. Bahot khub chaachu jaan.............!! Warm regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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2nd October 2009, 09:39 AM
Danny ji....Namashkaar...kaise hai aap.....aapki tamaam ghazal bahut khubsurat bani hai...sabhi sher ache hai.....lekin "maqtaa" dil ke jiyada kareeb raha...aise hi likhte rahiye...khush rahiye...
dil se daad...kabul kare.... aur apna khayal rakhiye... duaaon ke saath....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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2nd October 2009, 04:03 PM
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Jii aapne to badi mushkil mein dal diya sahab ... itna achcha likhenge to hume sharmindgi mehsus hogi kyunki humare lafzon mein to sahab tarif bhi puri tarha nahi ho pati hai... Bahut gazab likha hai aapne sabhi sher dil mein utarte chale gaye kafi gehre hai... Likhate rahiye.. Khush rahiye... Khuda Hafez..... 
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Tanhaa Raahi
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3rd October 2009, 01:09 AM
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Aur kya kahuun, shukraguzaar hein hum jo aap ne iss kalaam ko pasand kiya hai...! Yun hi hauslaa dete rahein aur apna khayaal rakhein, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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Tanhaa Raahi
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3rd October 2009, 01:16 AM
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Ya kalaam aap ko accha lagaa so hum samjhe hamari koshish ko safalta prapt houi...! Tareef ke liye bahout shukriyaa...! Hamari duaaein aap ke saath saath hein...! Khush rahiye Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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3rd October 2009, 08:58 AM
Danny Bhaiya:
Pranaam! kyaa kahuuN kuch samjh meN nahiiN aa rahaa! aapki koShiSh ko bahot baar paRhaa... kuch Sher paRhte huye to aaNKheN wahiiN ki wahiiN Thehar ga'ii! Ghazal ka mat'laa jitnaa Shaandaar haii tou Ghazal ka maq'taa !! waah dil jeet liyaa! aik nafeez koShiSh aapne bazm meiN ataa ki haii.. ki har paRhne waala paRhtaa hi reh jaaYe! aapkaa aNdaaz hi kuch aisaa haii! mere dil se niklii hu'ii DheroN saarii daad qabUl keejiyeNgaa! KhuSh raheN...apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat Jai Shree kriShnaa.. aapka ~ Dhaval |
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4th October 2009, 02:52 AM
Dear Danny jii,
Kaise hain aap??? I have no words for expressing my feelings ....es ghazal ke baare mein jo bhi kahugii woh kum hi honga ... har sher aapne aap mein dard jhalak raha hain .. Yu hi likhtey rahye aur mehfil ko saajatey rahye take care mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
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Tanhaa Raahi
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5th October 2009, 05:35 PM
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Thanks for such nice comments...! Keep yourself well, ok...? Ashirvaad ke saath Chaachu Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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Tanhaa Raahi
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6th October 2009, 06:35 PM
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Kalaam ko pasand karne ke liye shukriyaa...! Maqtaa hamare bhi dil ke kareeb hai, issi se kalaam ka shuruaat houa tha...! Yunhi saath dete rahein aur apna khayaal bhi rakhiyegaa, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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Tanhaa Raahi
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10th October 2009, 10:47 AM
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Yunhi saath dete rahein aur apna khayaal rakhiyegaa, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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Tanhaa Raahi
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7th December 2009, 05:42 PM
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Kalaam ki itni tareef ke liye bahut shukriyaa...! Yunhi hauslaa dete rehna aur apna khayaal thik se rakhna, ok...? Aashirvaad ke saath Jai Shree KriShnaa...! Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th December 2009, 11:18 AM
Danny Jii,,,
Very nice creation boss................ Matla se le kar maqta tak boht hi umda likha hai,,, Regardz,,,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Tanhaa Raahi
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18th September 2010, 12:50 AM
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Thanks for appreciating this one too...! We miss you...! With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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MaiN Our Meri Tanhaayii
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18th September 2010, 03:26 PM
danny ji bahoot khoob.....bahoot hi sunder kalam ki karigiri apne ahsasaton ko dhang se pirone ke liye...........
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Tanhaa Raahi
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8th October 2010, 04:01 AM
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Apna khayaal rakheiN Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th October 2010, 03:04 PM
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kishore bhai radhe radhe bahut khoob......pasand aayee bilkul sahi likha hai aapne dil se daad kubul karen likhte rahen duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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Tanhaa Raahi
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21st December 2012, 04:15 PM
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YuNhi saath dete raheiN aur apna khayaal bhi rakhna, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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29th December 2012, 09:31 PM
Sisaktaa hai jigar mera Nazar fariyaad karti hai....
Kahin bhi ho chale aao mohabbat yaad karti hai... |
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30th December 2012, 10:15 AM
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waaaah waaah waaahhhhhh chacha jaan.... kya baaat hai.... nihaayti khoobsurat tareeqe se aapne dil ki baat keh daali hai.... Zubaani usski ‘Jaanu' sun.ne ko kaan tarse bahut Bewafaa mujhe bulaakar naam ussne sahi liya hai Sataane main Khudaa sa maahir hai meri dilrubaa Maaf kijiyega Ya Rab misaal meine yunhi liya hai ye sher mere khaas pasandeeda rahaa.... likhte rahen... Shaad.... |
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4th January 2013, 12:47 AM
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6th January 2013, 01:10 AM
namskaar
kaaphi arse baad apko pada hai achha laga apki ghazal ko padhkar. शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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