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Laut aa ab in panahon mein....... -
21st December 2004, 10:23 PM
Hi friends...
Bahut dino baad kuch likha hai...shayad aapko pasand aa jaaye..
phir bhi koshish jaari rakhungi..
"Waqt ka dariya so naa jaaye
Tammanaon ka saahil kho na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Tufaan koi kashti duboo na jaaye
Shakhon se patte bikhar na jaaye
Phoolon se boondein chalak na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki.....
Saawan barasne se mukar na jaaye
Raat ye kaali sihar na jaaye
lau mein khud ki shama pighal na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki....
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
TC,
aapki,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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Hi Pari, -
21st December 2004, 10:35 PM
Hi Pari,
There is lots of depthness in ur shayri....
have very good meaning..
Over all very good shayri....
keep up writing good shayries....
Bye...take care...
~ Dosti Dil se ~
: : Dost har lamha saath tumhare hai hum : :
Listen to your mind...but follow your heart.
"Anyone who believes sunshine brings happiness has never danced in the rain."
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: : Yogesh : :
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22nd December 2004, 10:50 AM
Waqt ka dariya so naa jaaye
Tammanaon ka saahil kho na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Tufaan koi kashti duboo na jaaye
-- Wah Wah
Shakhon se patte bikhar na jaaye
Phoolon se boondein chalak na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki.....
Saawan barasne se mukar na jaaye
--Beautifulll!!
Raat ye kaali sihar na jaaye
lau mein khud ki shama pighal na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki....
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
-- Speechless!!
Pariiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!
Kaisi ho? Hopw u r doing very fine and taking due care of urself
Aaj itne dino baad tumhe padhkar dil khush ho gaya... Kitna sundar likhti ho tum ... Meri ddad to humesha tumhare saath hai.. fir bhi ek baar aur kubool karna
Apn Khayal Rakhana...Have a nice time Say hi to my niece
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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22nd December 2004, 04:03 PM
Hi Pari Ji,
Itne pyaare alfaazo mein kitni gehri baat ka izhaar kiya hai. Dil to bas Kho hi gaya aap ka kalaam parh ke. Sach alfaaz hi nahi mil rahe kaise tareef karo???
Sada khush raho.
Luvs,
Salim
If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul
Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you.
We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly
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22nd December 2004, 04:11 PM
Pari.....
dil ki gehraayi ka bayan har lafz kar raha hai.....
kis kis sher ki daad doon.....
aapke liye kuch likh paaya hoon....
dil ne chaha tha bahut.....
magar tum na aaye.....
khwahishoon ne pukara bhi bahut.....
magar tum na aaye.....
tham gaya toofaan bhi.....
kahsti ko dubooo kar......
tair kar pahooncha jo ^AMAN^.....
saahil pe,nazar tum na aaye.....
**(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)**
*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
**(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)**
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inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
AMAN RAHI
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Hi -
22nd December 2004, 07:05 PM
Hi yash ji,
thanx a lot for readind and appreciating my shayris...
well I will keep doing my work as long as your encouraging words r there for me..
Take care,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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HIi -
22nd December 2004, 07:07 PM
Hi pulkit ,
achha laga jaankar ki meri ye rachna tumhe pasand aayi..aur wo to aani hi thi na..afterall we both r..saggis.
well mein to apna khayal rakh hi rahi hu....tum sunao kya haal hai waha..
keep writing,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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hi -
22nd December 2004, 07:10 PM
dil ne chaha tha bahut.....
magar tum na aaye.....
khwahishoon ne pukara bhi bahut.....
magar tum na aaye.....
tham gaya toofaan bhi.....
kahsti ko dubooo kar......
tair kar pahooncha jo ^AMAN^.....
saahil pe,nazar tum na aaye.....
wahh aman ji..aisa lagta hai aapne mere sabhi sawaalon ka jawab de diya..sach bahut achhe alfajon mein baya kiya hai aapne..
meri daad bhi kabool kijiyega..
aur aise hi reply karte rahiyega,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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hi -
22nd December 2004, 07:12 PM
Salim ji,
aapka is post pe reply karna hi sabse badi taarif hai..uske liye alfaazon ki jaroorat hi nahi hai....
well thanx a lot for appreciation,
TC,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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hi -
24th January 2005, 12:13 PM
"Waqt ka dariya so naa jaaye
Tammanaon ka saahil kho na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Tufaan koi kashti duboo na jaaye
Rahengi tamannaye aabaad...
Shakhon se patte bikhar na jaaye
Phoolon se boondein chalak na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki.....
Saawan barasne se mukar na jaaye
na tutenge patte...shakhao se
rahegi manjil teri panaaho mein
aayegi khushbu havao se..
jab hasegi nanhi pari teri baaho mein
Raat ye kaali sihar na jaaye
lau mein khud ki shama pighal na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki....
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
aabad rahega tera thikana
khush hoga tujahse jamana
na ker etani aarju ki tapis
aayega teri hi baaho me tera dewana
shubhkamnao sahit,
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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Pari kuchh baat hai -
24th January 2005, 07:19 PM
Quote:
"Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
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Behtariin. Khoobsoorat.
Aapki nazr. Aapke alfaaz pe kuchh kaseede.
Tere aankhon ke kone mein ek mayqadaa hai
Mera maikash-e-nazar wahin thahar na jaaye
Hum to tere aseer huye hain mere sayyad
Jaan jaaye to jaaye, qaid magar na jaaye
Pari kuchh baat hai tere andaaz-e-bayaan mein
Ke beet jaayen baras aur asar na jaaye!
Kamakaze
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Urooj-e-aadam-e-khaqi se
Anjum sahme jaate hain...
kahin ye toota hua taara
mah-e-kaamil na ban jaaye
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new commer on shayri but an old shayar -
25th January 2005, 02:52 PM
you are a good shayar whether if you write after a long time but it doesn't mean that your thinking power weakens. you have written this one very well hope for you to write more like this one and other good ones too.
my real name is abhishek and you can mail me at :-
chrishchopra@hotmail.com
and
chrishchopra@yahoo.co.uk
or you can contact me at:- +919891430222.
keep on writing well
even i write but i never give it on shayri.com
bye for now.
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25th January 2005, 05:33 PM
Pari...
Wel.. thats true... Pasand mujhe aani thhi as we r both saggis and brn in the same week
Well... life is good... All's fine this side... Tum sunao....
I hope u r taking good care of urself.... Hey khabar yahan sabse pehle mujhe hi batana... I am waiting eagerly
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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25th January 2005, 10:12 PM
Hi!
I'm new at this forum or should I call it site. I was going through the site and suddenly I saw ur poem pari ji Parh kar bohat acha laga, I hope u will write more poems like this one. And good luck further on.
from,
udaas_muskaan
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26th January 2005, 01:12 AM
Hi pariji pahle maine aapko kabhi padha nahi par aaj padha to reply dene ko man kiya,
aur woh bhi aapki shayri mai kuch addition kar k,
Gustaakhi maaf karna.
"Waqt ka dariya so naa jaaye
Tammanaon ka saahil kho na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Tufaan koi kashti duboo na jaaye
Shakhon se patte bikhar na jaaye
Phoolon se boondein chalak na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki.....
Saawan barasne se mukar na jaaye
Raat ye kaali sihar na jaaye
lau mein khud ki shama pighal na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki....
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
Saans chalti hai meri teri khusbu se,
Hawaaye dekho kahi thahar na jaaye
Asqo ko chhupalo apni nigaaho mai
Moti ban k kahi ye bhi bikhar najaaye
Tu nahi to teri yaado ka ahsaas hi sahi,
Tere bin tanha koi safar na jaaye
Tanhaayio mai apni parchhayio se chaunk jata hu,
Ruh meri mere kadamo k nisha se kahi dar na jaaye
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Re: Laut aa ab in panahon mein....... -
26th January 2005, 01:34 PM
"Waqt ka dariya so naa jaaye
Tammanaon ka saahil kho na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki...
Tufaan koi kashti duboo na jaaye
Shakhon se patte bikhar na jaaye
Phoolon se boondein chalak na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki.....
Saawan barasne se mukar na jaaye
Raat ye kaali sihar na jaaye
lau mein khud ki shama pighal na jaaye
Laut aa ab in panahon mein ki....
Teri aarzoo mein ye zindgi gujar na jaaye"
PARI JI
mein soch mein pad gaya ki kis sher ki taref karun aur kise chodun....poori
gazal hi shaandaar aur purasar hai....viraah aur intezaar ka dard apne mein samete hai..apka apna ek khaas andaaz hai gazal kehne ka..jo sedha aur haqeqat ko bayan karta hai....isiliye nazrein sada aap ke kalaam ka intezaaar karti hai.
aapko ek arse baad padh raha hon....bahoot bahot khushi mili aap ko wapas yahan dekh kar,,shayri ki mehfil ki roshni badha di hai aapne aa kar. umeed karta hon aap ache se hongi.apna khayal rakhiye,sada khush rahiye....
take care
-MANOJ
apne usoolon par ham apne andaaz se chalte hai
karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein.
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Hii -
26th January 2005, 07:46 PM
Abhi shek ji,
thanx a lot for your appreciation..surely i will try to write more ..
to make u people BORE...(just kidding..).
u take care and keep writing,
pari..
Hey pulkit...I mean golumolu..
well everything is fine here ..till now...I m also eagerly waiting for the big day..and yes scared too...
and yes u will be the 1st person to know ..after me...ha ha ha..
Today its too cold..snow fall is going on outside..already its 2 foot.
If your niece comes this time I have to name her as SNOWWHITE..
u take care..
yours ,
pari..
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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26th January 2005, 07:50 PM
Udaas muskaan ji,
wel come to this site and this forum too...i love to make new friends..so very nice to get u here..
Thanx for reading and appreciating my shayris...
hope u keep writing me,
take care,
pari..
Hi acharya ji,
Saans chalti hai meri teri khusbu se,
Hawaaye dekho kahi thahar na jaaye
Asqo ko chhupalo apni nigaaho mai
Moti ban k kahi ye bhi bikhar najaaye
Tu nahi to teri yaado ka ahsaas hi sahi,
Tere bin tanha koi safar na jaaye
Tanhaayio mai apni parchhayio se chaunk jata hu,
Ruh meri mere kadamo k nisha se kahi dar na jaaye
well ..I must say .."too good"..thanx a lot for adding these precious lines..I really likes them and hope for the same responses next time,
take care,
pari..
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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Hi -
26th January 2005, 07:52 PM
Hi manoj ji,
kaise hai aap??
Aapka reply padh kar sach bahut achha laga..hamesha ki tarah...
Ji haa sahi kaha aapne bahut arse baad kuch likha hai...aajkal samay nahi mil paata..lekin aapko padhne jaroor aati hu...
Kyuki un kimati lafjo ko mein khona nahi chahti...isliye aap aise hi likhte rahiyega,
aapki dost,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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27th January 2005, 10:29 AM
Pariii... I mean Pari aunty!!
Tum dost ho ya dushman!! Khule me badnaam kar rahi ho...Kahan se golu molu dikta hoon main....
Well.. u name her Snowwhite or whatever... she'll my junior angel U take care... and nothing to worrry... Relax.... u ought to be strong as wer both saggis...birn in the same week
Do TC
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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