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khaamoshii nahi... - 9th March 2010, 12:48 AM
hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


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zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
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parul jee, ghazal bahut badhiya rahi...saare hi sheyr qabil-e-sataish haiN, lekin quoted shyer bahut badhiya lage....apne se ehsaas lage....
daad qubuul kijiyega....

'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
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mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

Bahut umdaa khayal raha yeh aapka Parul ji....!
tahe dil se daad hazir........kabuul ki jiyega....

yunhi likhte rahen....
khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath.....



YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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9th March 2010, 08:26 AM
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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


Parul

Very beautifully written Parul. These ones were excellent (i guess almost all of them were )

umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi


zehen mein gunjatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi

ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
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9th March 2010, 09:37 AM
Hello Parul jii.......good to see u back on sdc...bohat khushi ho rahi hai aapko yahaaN naye kalaam ke saath dekh ker................

Aapki ghazal behad umdaa hai,..... saare ashaar behad pasand aaye mujhe.......yuhi likhti rahiye......



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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


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I m amazed .. surprised happy sad ..........

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mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
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zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi

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hello parul ji

ji aapke saare hi ashar bhaut khubsoorat hai aur unke peeche chupe eshsaas unse bhi khubsoorat hai........................... its too good...........


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parul jee, ghazal bahut badhiya rahi...saare hi sheyr qabil-e-sataish haiN, lekin quoted shyer bahut badhiya lage....apne se ehsaas lage....
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thank you so much for reading and appreciating. jan kar achha laga ke aap ko ye ehsaas pasand aaye...
   
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mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
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woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
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Bahut umdaa khayal raha yeh aapka Parul ji....!
tahe dil se daad hazir........kabuul ki jiyega....

yunhi likhte rahen....
khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath.....

hello naresh ji,
parhne ke liye bahot bahot shurkirya, yu hi saath dete rehna aur aap khush rehna.....
   
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Parul jee:

namaste!

aik arse baad aapko paRhaa aaj.. bahot hi KhuShii hu'ii..! ehsaas bahot hi beHteriN lageN.. aise hi liKhate raheN... bazm ki Shaan baRhaate raheN aage bhee... daad..!

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Very beautifully written Parul. These ones were excellent (i guess almost all of them were )
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aap ne mujhe parha yehi bahot badi baat hai main aap ke jaisa likh to nahi sakti, lolz. thanks so much. tc
   
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10th March 2010, 12:46 AM
Dearest Parul,

its very beautiful ............har sher .. dil ke kareeb raha... ek arse baad wahii jadoo cha gaya hein ......

please sweetest parul ek request aur order bhi hain ...ab routine mein aati aur likhtii rehna.... !!!!

aur yu hi mehfil saajatii raho ...

khush aur bahut khush raho
take good care of urself

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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


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bahut khoob keep it up

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Hello Parul jii.......good to see u back on sdc...bohat khushi ho rahi hai aapko yahaaN naye kalaam ke saath dekh ker................

Aapki ghazal behad umdaa hai,..... saare ashaar behad pasand aaye mujhe.......yuhi likhti rahiye......
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hello parul ji

ji aapke saare hi ashar bhaut khubsoorat hai aur unke peeche chupe eshsaas unse bhi khubsoorat hai........................... its too good...........
radhika ji,
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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


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namskaar!!!!!!!!

bahut accha laga aapka yun laout ke aana aur itni shandar nazm se mahfil ko sajana

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

is sher per merii vishesh taur per daad

shukriyaa

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Parul ji adaaab...aaj ek arse baad mouka mila hai ke aapko parh sakeiN. Aap yahaaN lout ker aaye bahoot achha laga.........aapki Ghazal usi tarah hamaare saath rubaroo ho rahi hai jis tarah kabhi pehle hua kerti thi....
umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi.

Ye sher matla bana hai aapki Ghazal ka.jo apne meiN khud hi byaan ker raha hai..ke shaks chot khaya hua hai....kya khoobsi se aapne shabdoN ka chayan kiya hai..waah bahoot khoob.
mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi.

Bewafayii har jagah saans le rahi hai parul ji is liye ye chot ab aam si Dard ban ke saans lene lagii hai
woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi.

Berukhi ko bhi ek abhaas se jaga ke rakhna hi insaan ki ek khoobi hai usi se aap bhi prabhavit haiN...bahoot khoob bayanaat haiN dost.
zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi.

Chuban our besaakht tees pyaar ki ek atoot den hai jo khalish ban ke goonja kerti hai...yahi do diloN ko ahsaas kerata hai
abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi

haaN ye sher saari Ghazal ko Poori kerta hai waah Parul ji waah

keep the things and flow going on


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Matla bohat pasand aaya Parul jee.........achchi peshkash.

Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil

Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...

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Parul Jee Aadab!

paheli martaba padha hia aapko......... aur behad achchi kalam lagi aapki......
Matla bahut jyda umdaa lage.... bakisabhi sher bhi tari e kabil hai....

Ek achchi koshish per daad kabool kijiye.....

Likhati rhaiye,
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khuda Hafez........
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Wah Parul ji
Bahot Khub Likha he..... Yakin Maniye aap ki ye nazam kabile tarif he..... lagta he jaise seene dil nikal kar kagaz per rakh diya ho kisine... hum is kabhil to nahi ki aap ki tarif kar sake..... bus itna kahena he aap ke hur el alfaz me pakizgi aur dard chhupa huva he.... ye padhkar lagta he dil ke zakham aaj bhi hare he

sukriya mohtarma
istraha aap ke nayab tohfe pesh karte rahiye

koi gushtakhi hui hoto maaf kijiyega

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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


Parul

Na Jane Kyun Tumhare Naam se Itni Mohabbat Hai
Kisi ka Naam Leta Hoon to Tumhara Naam Aata Hai

Jab khayalon me Nindeye palak hoti Hai
Dil me Mehsoos Teri Yaadon ki Mahak hoti Hai


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bahut khoob parul ji, poori gazal beintheha khoobsurat hai
daad kabool keejiye.....
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namaste!

aik arse baad aapko paRhaa aaj.. bahot hi KhuShii hu'ii..! ehsaas bahot hi beHteriN lageN.. aise hi liKhate raheN... bazm ki Shaan baRhaate raheN aage bhee... daad..!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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Dearest Parul,

its very beautiful ............har sher .. dil ke kareeb raha... ek arse baad wahii jadoo cha gaya hein ......

please sweetest parul ek request aur order bhi hain ...ab routine mein aati aur likhtii rehna.... !!!!

aur yu hi mehfil saajatii raho ...

khush aur bahut khush raho
take good care of urself

with love,

aapki aapnii

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hi mandy di,
you must be fine... thank you so so much for reading and appreciating.. aap ki request bhi maanni padegi aur order bhi... aap bhi apna khayal rakhiyega aur hamensha khush rahiyega.

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bahut khoob keep it up
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namskaar!!!!!!!!

bahut accha laga aapka yun laout ke aana aur itni shandar nazm se mahfil ko sajana

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

is sher per merii vishesh taur per daad

shukriyaa

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hi friends,
kaafi samay se waqt ki kami ke wajah se shayri se door hi ho gayi hun aur finally kuchh thoughts kaagaz par utaar payi hun jinhe aap sab ki nazar kar rahi hun, technically it may not be perfect so your suggestions are welcome.


umr-e-rawaan mein koi gham koi khushi nahi
badaa hi sukoon hai jab koi hum-nashii nahi

mohabbat zindaa hai aaj bhi dil mein mere
magar is mein woh pehle si dil-kashii nahi

woh merii khushi ki duaa karte rehte hai
jab ke sahi jati mujhse un ki udaasii nahi

zehen mein guujatii hai sadaa-e-khalish
kahii par bhi zaraa sii khaamoshii nahi

abhi apni majbuuriiyon ka zikr na karo
main hairaan hun mujhko bekasii nahi


umr-e-rawaan= passing life
sadaa-e-khalish = voice of pain


Parul

Waaaaaaaah.....bohat khoob parul saheba.....

Aaj ek baar phir aapka kalaam padhker accha lagaa

Aapki or se nayi peshkash ka intezar rahega.....



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PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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