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Mas00m Shayar
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Main Jaanti Hoon .. Main Akeli Nahin -
1st May 2007, 09:00 AM
Main jaanti hoon is duniya mein dard se bhari main akeli to nahin,
Gile-shiqwe karne wali is duniyaan mein main akeli to nahin.
Dekho agar zindagi ko meri nazaron se to "mukkammal" se bahot door hai,
Magar yeh gehra dard baant-ne ke liye mere sath koi saheli bhi to nahin.
Shukar-e-guzaar hoon main unki, jinho-ne mujhe yeh zindagi di hai,
Lekin is adhuri zindagi ka mai karoon to kya, yeh sach koi paheli nahin.
Socha na tha ki ab phir kabhi shiqayat nikalegi is masoom dil se,
Afsos ki kabhi jo hum sochte nahin wo ho jaata hai, yeh baat naveli nahin.
Koshish ki hai maine is sukhe gulshan mein aashiyaan banane ki,
Koshish ki hai maine is sukhe gulshan mein phool sajane ki,
Magar sach to yeh hai ki main "Rutu" hoon, koi phool chameli ka nahin.
Dhuan banake fiza mein uda diya mujhko.
Main jal raha tha .. kisi ne bujha diya mujhko ...
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Muntazir
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1st May 2007, 09:54 AM
hi Rutu ji...
Bahut accha likha hai aapne.
zindagi ki ek sacchayi... aisa lagta hai k kitne gam samoye huye ho aap apne dil mein...
....Lucky
Jab ummid nahi unse milne ki koi,
to kis aas se kahein, ki aarzu kya hai....
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1st May 2007, 09:34 PM
hI rutu
Wrote well and wrote from your heart... Looks like you have poured your own pain here.
Its more then poetry.... I can sense Your Real feelings in your words..
You may find some friends at shayri.com ... Living abroad is like living away from your
roots.... SO much lonliness and deep feeling of isolation. And then u loose someone..... Too tough.....
Regards
Sush
लब पे मुस्कान को लिए ऐ दोस्त, काँधों पे लाश अपनी ढोते हैं,
इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं!
lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein
is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein
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a broken shadow...
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2nd May 2007, 05:35 PM
hi rutu g,
bahut acha janab, kaffi dard baara aur gehra likha hai. aap apne ehsaason ko aise hi is mehfil mein pesh karte rahen. following sher was my fav:
Shukar-e-guzaar hoon main unki, jinho-ne mujhe yeh zindagi di hai,
Lekin is adhuri zindagi ka mai karoon to kya, yeh sach koi paheli nahin.
bahut khub, aapna kyaal rakieyga
tc
manish
Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little...
Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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Mas00m Shayar
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Thank you -
2nd May 2007, 10:11 PM
Hello to all that have replied back to me.
After a long time I've posted a thread on this site and I'm glad to see that people still appreciate each other's work and enjoy reading it.
Again, thank-you all and Sush I did get your e-mail, I will reply ASAP.
love,
Rutu
Dhuan banake fiza mein uda diya mujhko.
Main jal raha tha .. kisi ne bujha diya mujhko ...
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Darde Dil Ke Tukde
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2nd May 2007, 11:08 PM
really nice keep writing,,,,,,
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Dil Itna Naazuk Hota Hai Ke,
Isski Tootne Ki Awaaz Bilkul Nahi Aathi,
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MEIN TUJHKO BHOOL JAUN YE KISSS KITAAB MEIN LIKHA HAI.
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socha tha woh hame tut kar chahenge
par chaha bhi hami ne aur tute bhi hum
KISHOR R KARKERA
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PH:-09322764070
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Ankahi Kahaani
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Very Goodddd -
26th June 2010, 04:25 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Rutu
Main jaanti hoon is duniya mein dard se bhari main akeli to nahin,
Gile-shiqwe karne wali is duniyaan mein main akeli to nahin.
Dekho agar zindagi ko meri nazaron se to "mukkammal" se bahot door hai,
Magar yeh gehra dard baant-ne ke liye mere sath koi saheli bhi to nahin.
Shukar-e-guzaar hoon main unki, jinho-ne mujhe yeh zindagi di hai,
Lekin is adhuri zindagi ka mai karoon to kya, yeh sach koi paheli nahin.
Socha na tha ki ab phir kabhi shiqayat nikalegi is masoom dil se,
Afsos ki kabhi jo hum sochte nahin wo ho jaata hai, yeh baat naveli nahin.
Koshish ki hai maine is sukhe gulshan mein aashiyaan banane ki,
Koshish ki hai maine is sukhe gulshan mein phool sajane ki,
Magar sach to yeh hai ki main "Rutu" hoon, koi phool chameli ka nahin.
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Rutu Ji ...ek aur bahot achchhi rachanaa padhane mili aapki ... heart touching thoughts ....Kisi ek sher ko pasand nahi kar paa rahe hum ..Ji is rachanaa ke saare hi sher bahot pasand aaye
Jitana aapko padhate jaa rahe hai utana hi ye khayaal dil mai aa raha hai ki .. aapka likha naya kuchh kab padhane ko milega ... once again ..very well written.
Bhagwaan Ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe,
Aapki Dost: Gudia
Jay Ambe
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Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani......
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Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai,
Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai,
Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi,
Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi.
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~"REBELLIOUS IN LOVE"~
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26th June 2010, 05:55 AM
bahot khubsurat ehsaas
yuhi likhte rahiyen
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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