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Har kadam imtihaan rakhti hai...... -
22nd August 2015, 12:27 AM
Har kadam imtihaan rakhti hai zindagi kaisi shaan rakhti hai. Ek taraf do jahaaN ki daulat hai. Ek taraf khud ki aan rakhti hai. Rab ka hee dar dikhayi deta hai Jab ye mushkil me jaan rakhti hai jab lage ab kareeb hai manzil Fasle darmiyaan rakhti hai.. Laakh saugat de khushi ki par Gam mile ye bhi dhyaan rakhti hai Chot bhoole na aur na dard ho kam dil pe gahra nishan rakhti hai.. Kaise samjhoge zindgi ko tum Khud me kitne jahaan rakhti hai. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd August 2015, 04:02 AM
Ek acchi koshish ek acche khyaal ke sath.. Doosre sher ka kafiya wazn se bahar hai.. aur sher thode kacche se lagte hai halki bayaani ki wajah se.. baaki likhte rahiye nikharte rahiye.. kuch ghalat lage to mazrat khwah hun..
Sifar Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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22nd August 2015, 06:42 AM
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Aapne kuch ghalat nahi kaha..... Bayani to sabki alag alag hoti hai... main to bas abhi koshish hee kar rahi hoon ki kuch likh sakoon. Aage bhi apka sath milta rahe yahi dua hai... Khush rahein.... Aate rahiye...... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd August 2015, 09:06 AM
Madhu iss bar bhi bohut khubsoorat kalaam. dil ki halat bayaa karta hua.
Dusre sher mein jo baat aapne kahi woh dil ko Chu gayi. Sach mein do jahan ki daulat bhi swabhimaan ki keemat nahi laga sakti. Sarika |
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22nd August 2015, 09:14 AM
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Acha laga apko yaha dekhkar aur ye dekh kar Ki aap dusron ko improve karne Mein madad kar rahe hain. Jo Ki tareef se bhi zyada important hai. Meri request hai Ki iss Ghazal Ki bayangi ko kaise aur mazboot kiya ja sakta hai wo samjhaein jisse hum aur much nayaa seekhein. Agar Madhu ko bura na lage to... Sarika |
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22nd August 2015, 11:32 AM
Bhabhi ji main theek hun aap kaise ho.. badi yaad aati hai aapki aur bhaiya ki .. kitna waqt beet gaya .. par ab bhi kal ki baat lagti hai.. khair koi nahi .. main jaanta hun hun tab bhi kareeb the ab bhi kareeb hain..
Jahaan tak ghazal ki baat hai .. madhu ki ghazal padh ke ehsaas hota hai .. abhi sirf behr pe kaam naya naya shuru hua hai.. is liye khyaal ghise nahi jaa rahe .. darasal ye ek musalsal ghazal hai.. jo ek hi baat ki nishaan dehi karti hai.. mere hisaab se ye koi bura nahi hai .. par har sher aap main ek kahaani liye hota hai.. khyaal jitne sapaat honge shayri utni kamzor hogi.. aise main bayaani khyaal ko bacha leti hai.. par yahan aisa bhi nahi hua.. seedhe bhaasha main kaho to sher wo nahi jo ek matlab leke aaye .. sher wo hai jiske paas jaye uska ho jaye .. thodi pecheedgi thoda ghumaav hi shayri hai.. aisa mera maanna hai... Sifar Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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22nd August 2015, 01:24 PM
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main to khud hee janti hoon ki shayri ki duniya me abhi bahut kachchi hoon main...jo thoda bahut seekha hai sdc par hee seekha aur jana...kitni pecheeda aur ghumavdaar hai ye to nahi janti...haan ye zaroor janti hoon ki ek art hai ye jo lagatar koshish karne se hee nikharti hai.....isiliye aap jaise achche shayron ki rai ka hamesha intzaar rahta hai mujhe.... Aap sdc par yun hee ate rahein aur logon ko padhe apne mashware dein yahi kahna chahoongi...taki hamare ilm me izafa ho... Khush rahein... Aage bhi aapke sath ki umeed rakhti hoon....... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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25th August 2015, 09:17 AM
waahhh madhu saahiba kyaa kahun kis haseen kareegaree se aapne apnii is gahzal ko sajaaya hai aur bazm ko nawaazaa hai.....
bbahut khoob lagi hame aapki ye peshkash..... ahar sher bahut khoob hai.... daad bator len dher saaree...... likhti rahen khush rahen..... shaad... |
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25th August 2015, 12:11 PM
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Madhuji, behad khubsurat Gazal huii hai.... har ashaar ba-kamaal hai..... dheroN dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad...... ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता 
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25th August 2015, 10:18 PM
wah madhu jee behtreen khyaal pesh kiye hain aapne
likhti rahen duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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27th August 2015, 02:38 PM
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27th August 2015, 08:00 PM
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SheroN adaaygi our unmeiN ahsaas saada our khoob haiN .... GunijanoN ki baatoN par dhyaan doge to hunar ko tarashne meiN samay nahiN lagega....Merii jaanib se is behtareen peshkash par dhairoN daad !!! sabhaar.. |
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16th September 2015, 03:51 PM
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Ghazal ko pasand karne ka shukriya..... Aati rahiyega.... Khush rahein.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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16th September 2015, 05:27 PM
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Madhu, bahut khoobsurat khayal pesh kiye hai tumne, tumhare khayaloN se ru-b-ru hona accha lga, sabhi sher acche bane haiN, muje yeh aik sher bahut hi khaas lga. Rab ka hee dar dikhayi deta hai Jab ye mushkil me jaan rakhti hai  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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20th September 2015, 07:07 PM
Accha likha hai madhu jee....yun jee likhti rahiye.....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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19th October 2015, 05:51 PM
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Bas sath ki guzarish hai....koshish zari rahegi... Aate rahiye.... Khush rahiye... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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13th November 2015, 08:35 AM
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Takecare.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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30th November 2015, 10:22 PM
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Yahi dua hai... Bahut dhanywaad apka... Regards.. Madhu अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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21st December 2015, 01:42 PM
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aap jaise umda shayar se tareef mil jaye to bahut khushi milti hai dil ko... aage bhi aap yun hee hausla afzai karte rahenge aisi ummeed karti hun....bahut shukriya aapka. regards madhu अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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2nd January 2016, 10:35 PM
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Sher ko khaas tawajjo dene ka bhi shukriya.. Aise hee sath banaye rakhiyega... Regards Madhu अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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3rd January 2016, 01:02 PM
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Aapki ghazal padhi. Achche khayal aur unehein achche se pesh karne ki koshish. Aapke iss kalam par Kunaal ne kaafi kuchh keh hi diya hai. Haan main bas yahi add karna chahuuNga ke Ghazal ko aap iss nazariye se dkheN to aap samjheNgi ki Ghazal ki kya zaruurat hai. Khayal to sabse aham hai hi, ussko pesh karne ka andaaz aur bhi uss se zyada aham hai. Yaani seedhe alfaaz maiN aapki adaaygi meiN nayapan ho. Kuchh bhi expected ya predictable na ho. Har sher ko agar aap iss yardstick pe parkheNgi to aapko kaafi madad milegi. Bahr aur wazn ki aapko achchi samajh hai mere Khayal se. Aur waqt ke saath aur ravaaN ho jayeNgi aap. Khush raheiN khaksaar Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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sath dete rahiyega..... apna khayaal rakhein.. madhu. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd January 2016, 01:26 AM
Kaafi umda likhti hain aap madhu ji
Mein kab se reply karne ki koshish me id banaye baitha tha. Magar activation me bohot der lagi. Bohot dino se main aap ki shayri padh raha hun...ek se badh kar ek hain....lajawab.... |
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22nd January 2016, 01:33 AM
Meri aur se pesh hai
Humne apne aap ko jalaya hai kisi ke ghar ko roshan rakhne ke liye Ae zindegi tu aur imtehan naa le Tu bewafa nikla to kya, hum zinda rehne ki himmat rakte hain |
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Namaskaar praveen ji... Mujhe khushi huyi ki aapne na kewal ghazal ko padha balki...apna vaqt nikal kar aur behtar likhne ka tareeka bhi samjhaya vo bhi bahut seedhe shabdon me...koshish jari rahegi... aap aage bhi mujhe raah dikhate rahenge yahi ummmeed karti hun..... Dil se shukriya aapka.... Regards Madhu... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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Bas aise hee padhte rahiyega... Hausla afzai ka behad shukriya..... Aate rahiyega. .. Tkcr Madhu अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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