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Yeh dil iss qadar beqaraar rehta hai -
13th December 2014, 12:35 AM
Yeh dil iss qadar beqaraar rehta hai
Ke har lamha tera intezaar rehta hai Kahe tu jo qaafir mujhe hairat na hogi Ke bandagi mein bhi zikr-e-yaar rehta hai Nahi laazami ke barbaad karein dushman dostoN ka bhi kuchh kirdaar rehta hai Hai saya sa yeh kaun meri hasti ke saath Jo maujood lail-o-nihaar rehta hai Kuchh mashq aur kar looN phir khaane ki fareb Ke khauf-e-nakaami baar baar rehta hai Kya poochhte ho aaj 'Aashna' ka haal Jo sabki nazroN mein gunehgar rehta hai "lail-o-nihaar= shab-o-roz/night and day" SAGAR AASHNA **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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13th December 2014, 01:20 AM
Wah bhai kyaa baat hai bhut hii umdah khyaal...lafaz khud apna haal byaa.n karte huye..behadd sanjeeda gazal..daad kabool kijiyega...Raj..
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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13th December 2014, 07:28 AM
Bohot acche Sagar ji.
Bohot umda gazal..... Khush rahen.....likhte rahe Aapka apna Bhushan Bhushan Joshi |
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13th December 2014, 10:58 AM
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Satsriakaal Rajveer ji. bohot bohot shukriya hausla afzayi keliye. Aapko meri yeh koshish pasand aayi, mere liye masarrat ki baat hai. Aapka khair khwah SAGAR AASHNA **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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13th December 2014, 11:06 AM
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Bhushan ji, Namaskar ! Tah-e-dil se shukriya. DuaaoN ke saath, Aapka khair khwah SAGAR AASHNA **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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13th December 2014, 11:45 PM
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Har bar sochta hoon ki aapko padh kar kuch aur jaan paaya hoon aur har nayi ghazal/nazm ke saath aap mera yeh khayaal khwaabida kar dete hai.. aapki soch, aapki qalam aur aisi hi har ghazal ko salaam Yunhi zor e qalam barqaraar rakhiYee Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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14th December 2014, 12:17 AM
Mast saahab,
khaksaar ko Itne gaur se parhne ka tah-e-dil se shukriya.. abhi toh mujhe kuchh nahi aata, aap jaise azeem sho'ra se bohot kuchh seekhna hai, aur seekhne ko mil bhi bohot raha hai. waise main isko edit karwana chahta hooN. Aapse request hai k help karein. Haalanke mujhe beh'r ka ilm abhi nahi hai, par kuchh common sense se lagta hai k tarmeem ki zarurat hai. 3rd sheyr mein: Dosti' ki jagah 'dostoN' lafz likhna chahunga. maqte mein "kya poochhte ho aaj TUM Aashna ka haal" zyada rythm mein hoga. so "tum " add karna hai. DuaaoN mein yaad rakhna aur hausla afzayi karte rahiyega. regards Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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14th December 2014, 12:30 AM
Wah Sagar bhai Wah ..Dil se daad is ghazal pe aapko.
bahut hi dil ko.chu.gayee aapki.ye ghazal.. Sankay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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14th December 2014, 12:53 AM
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Nawazish keliye bohot bohot shukriya Sehgal saahab. Yunhi saath banaye rahiyega. aapka khair khwah Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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14th December 2014, 10:25 AM
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sagar sahab tak nacheez ka salaam pahoche..... ek baar fir aapne apne hunar ko saabit kar diyaa bahot khoob peshkash... Shaad.... |
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14th December 2014, 07:46 PM
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Shaad saahab, adaab ! Jenab aapki daad milti hai toh hausla baRhta hai, warna maiN khud ko iss qabil nahi samajhta. Kyunki abhi bohot saari technicalities hain jin par kaam karne ki zarurat hai. Aap jaise azeem sho'ra hazraat jab daad dete hain toh yaqeenan asar hota hai. Bohot bohot shukriya jenab. I'm humbled. Aur oopar maine ek request ki hai, edit karne keliye. Agar mods help karenge edit kar ke toh thoda better ho sakta hai.. Regards Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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21st December 2014, 01:38 PM
Sunita di, namaskar..
Bohot bohot shukriya edit karne keliye. Regards (Jagdish Singh) SAGAR AASHNA **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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30th December 2014, 03:37 PM
wah ek behtareen ghazal hui hai
Mubarak ho duaon ke saath. Mujeeb Parwaaz |
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6th January 2015, 09:37 AM
Mujeeb bhai, adaab !
meri koshish aapko pasand aayi, yeh meri khush naseebi hai. main aapka mamnoon hooN ke aapne apni besh qeemti raaye se mujhe nawaza. Yunhi hausla baRhate rahiyega. aapka khair khwah Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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6th January 2015, 10:32 AM
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saagar saahab..... behad maazrat chaahungaa jo aapke huqm ki nazarandaazii ho gayee mujhse.... darasal kaam ki maruufuiyat se saare khaton ka jawaab padh na sakaa main aur aapkee is iltijaa ko na dekh sakne ki bhool ho gayee mujhse... baharhaal abhi jo nazar gayee to wo kaam sunitaa dee ne mukammal kar diyaa hai... main behad shukrguzaar hoon unka...... aapne waaqaii bahot acchaa likhaa hai... aapki kalam me dhaar bahot hai.... bas ise chalaate rahen dhaar aur bhi paini hotii rahegiii... shukriyaa Shaad.... |
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6th January 2015, 11:10 AM
Nahi laazami ke barbaad karein dushman
dostoN ka bhi kuchh kirdaar rehta hai Bahut khoob ashna ji...... khush rahein.... likhte rahein.... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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10th January 2015, 04:06 AM
Shaad saahab,
ek baar phir se bohot bohot shukriya aapka. Aapki shaan mein zehen mein kuchh yuN aaya hai : 'Teri rehbari na hoti toh bhatak gaye hote, Humko toh sahil pe bhanwar nazar aate hain. ' Yunhi saath banaye rakhiyega, Du'aa goh Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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10th January 2015, 04:15 AM
Madhu ji,
Dil ki gehrayioN se shukriya. Yehi sheyr mujhe khud bhi pasand hai. Aapko meri koshish qaabil-e-daad lagi, uskeliye mashkoor hooN. Regards Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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10th January 2015, 04:24 AM
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ek special THANKS, uss namaloom qadardaan keliye jinhoN ne meri iss koshish keliye apna naam likhe bina reps add kiye hain. DuaoN ke saath, Sagar Aashna **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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20th January 2015, 10:08 PM
sagar jee....kya khoob ghazal hui hai.......bahut hee sundar ehsaas......very nice....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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Shukriya -
30th January 2015, 08:58 PM
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Aru saahab, namaste ! Nawazish, karam, shukriya, mehrbaani.. Aapko ehsaas pasand aaye yeh mere liye baais-e-masarrat hai. Hausla afzayi karte rahiyegaa. Khair andesh **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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