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shaheed-e-watan - 24th November 2008, 07:38 PM
doston kuch mahino pehle hamaare mujeeb bhai ne mujhe subject diya tha
SHAHEED - E - WATAN jis par likhna mere liye bahot tough ho gaya tha

koshish ki hai pata nahi ehsaas kaise hain yaa is kalaam ko lekar mera nazariya kaisa hai


yaadon ki ek sunheri therir ban gayi
dil mein hamaare aapki tasveer ban gayi

chahat humein teri qurbaniyon se hai
ishq-e-watan ki yeh deewana kar gayi

apna ho yaa paraya tha humwatan tujhe
tanhai sarhadon ki aankhon mein bhar gayi

lehrata jata parcham aur girta jaata dushman
yeh zindagi teri qurbani mein kat gayi

jin se the tere rishte un ko bhi salaam
un ki naseeb to teri yaadon se bhar gayi

hai gam humein bhi itna tera eh shaheed
khushiyan bhi hamaari dard yeh seh gayi


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14th December 2008, 02:38 PM
bahut Khoob Zamir Ji....ek Acchi Koshish Per Hamari Aur Se Daad Qubool Kijiye.... Hame Hairat Hai Ke Itne Din Is Ghazal Per Kisi Nazar Kaise Nahi Padi.......

yuhi Likhte Rahiye

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15th December 2008, 06:41 PM
shukriya zainy ji aap ne hamare kalaam ko saraha yaani poore SDC ne ise pasand kiya hai
bahot accha laga aap ko pad kar

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15th December 2008, 07:30 PM
bahut accha kalam hain zamirji.......daad!

yunhi likhte rahe.....

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16th December 2008, 06:54 PM
thanks a lot mausam ji aap ne apna qeemti waqt diya
bahot bahot shukriya

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20th December 2008, 09:16 PM
Zamir bhai.........main jo bhi kahne ja rahi hoon...umeed hai bura nahi maaNege, kyuNki aap hi kahte ho ki diii aapka review bahut jaroori hai meri post par, esi liye review dena mere liye behad jaroori hai.....maine aapki es poetry ko aaj tak bahut baar pada hai, par samaj nahi aa raha tha ki kaya jawaab doon, kyuNki aapki es poetry ne mujhe niraash kiya hai, aap es se kahiN behtar likh sakte hai, yeh mujhe maloom hai....ahsaas acche haiN, par jo baat honi chahiye thi woh nazar nahi aaye.....umeed hai next shayri jab bhi aap likhNge es kami ko us mein bakhoobi poora kareNge.

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21st December 2008, 07:03 PM
salaam,

baaji bahot khushi hui aap ke reviews pad kar kyunki yahan koi to hai jo hai
mujhe yeh batata hai ki main kya hoon aur mujhe confident bhi deta hai
mujhe khud pata hai ki main ne kuch bhi aisa nahi likha hai
lekin koshish ki hai
pata nahi kyun aaj kal pehle jaisa likh nahi paa raha hoon
us tarah se mood nahi ban raha hai lekin phir ek baar koshish karke dekhta hoon
kyunki baaji aapki baatein meri bhalai ki taraf hain
lekin main zyaada tar romantic moods par sher likhta hoon isiliye yeh subject thoda tough tha lekin mujeeb ko bhi main ne kaha tha subject dene ke liye aur bas isiliye likh diya
lekin main ab se thoda aur accha try karoonga

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