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1st September 2010, 07:12 PM
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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1st September 2010, 07:43 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
kya baat hai.......dusra misra bahut dil fareb hai...
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
well said
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
again well said
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
kya kah diya aapne...bahut khoob
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
is sher ka jawaab nahi....ye sher kisi daad ka mohtaaz nahi
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ek behad umda ghazal kahne par daad kabool kijiye..........
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1st September 2010, 07:50 PM
rumaani andaz koi tumse seekhe......
bahut khoob
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1st September 2010, 07:53 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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kya baat hai lamha, its really very nice, shabdon kee kami mehsoos kar raha hoon pehli baar, ek ek shabd jasbaaton se bhara hai, aur itna simple bhi hai kee dil ko choo kar chala gaya hai yaar .Keep it up.
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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1st September 2010, 08:21 PM
WAH Lamha Har sher.. La Jawaab Hai ..
Har Sher Kuch Khaas Sa Lagaa
Har Ehsaas... Jaise Kabhi Chu Kar Gaya Ho...
Har Shabd Kuch Apna Sa Laga
WAah waah
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1st September 2010, 08:55 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Very Very Impressive ..... Lamha Ji ! Very Romantic ... Very Touching .... Awesome ... !!!
Very Nice Creation .... !
Reps ++++++++++ Rachana ! Bhole ShabdoN MeN Hai Wafaa Ki Khushboo ... !
Tahe dil se daad hazir hai.... Qubuul FaramaayeN ....
khush rahen...
Duaaon ke saath.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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2nd September 2010, 12:16 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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my dear lamha ! jo aapne pees dia hai use chhanne ki jaroorat nahi.n
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ACHHA LIKHENGE,KOI BURA KAHEGA TO KHUD KO TATOLENGE }
Wohi rizq deta jahaan ko , wohi zaat sab se azeem hai
Meri muflisi pe na hans ke wo , tera taaj sar se giraa na de
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2nd September 2010, 12:19 AM
+++ raps to chhoti baat hai agar mai is gazal pe apni jaan ki daad bhi de doon to kam hogi
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{ BURA NA SUNENGE BURA NA DEKHENGE BURA NA BOLENGE
ACHHA LIKHENGE,KOI BURA KAHEGA TO KHUD KO TATOLENGE }
Wohi rizq deta jahaan ko , wohi zaat sab se azeem hai
Meri muflisi pe na hans ke wo , tera taaj sar se giraa na de
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2nd September 2010, 11:49 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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ji very sweet & simple.........................nice creation.............
Radhika
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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2nd September 2010, 11:52 AM
Lamha ji,,,,
Well written..... Aise hi likhte rahiye... Dil se daad.....
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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2nd September 2010, 02:33 PM
Kyaa Baat... Kyaa baat...Kyaa baat
Suban allah.. bada hii dilkash likha hai yaar... alfaaz kam pad jaaye par daad kam na pade.. dil khus kar ditta tussi soniyee.. dil khus kar dittaa..
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Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
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2nd September 2010, 05:21 PM
Hello Lamha ji!
It's so very romantic..... Congratulations!
Keep writing!
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2nd September 2010, 06:07 PM
Waise mujhe to kalam se zyda comments padhne me zyda maza aaya.......khair sabki apni apni pasand hai.
Aapki peshkash itni impressive to nahi lagi ke dil se Wah kya baat hai nikal jaye.......lekin wordplay khoob raha.
Keep writing.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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2nd September 2010, 06:09 PM
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ek behad umda ghazal kahne par daad kabool kijiye..........
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Originally Posted by zidd
rumaani andaz koi tumse seekhe......
bahut khoob
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Zidd ji,
izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya... aapka kisi bhi thread pe jana, us thread ki izzat badhata hai... aapne beshaq meri aur mere is thread ki izzat badhayi hai... tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... rep+ ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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2nd September 2010, 11:29 PM
Dear Lamha........bahut khoobsurat likha hai tumne, pyar se bharpoor en ahsaasoN par dil se daad hazir hai, khush raho.
duaoN ke saath
diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd September 2010, 12:45 AM
lamha,
kya kamaal likha hai...ise padhne ke baad to maiN kafi der ye sochta raha ki kya maine ye asal meiN padha hai....waqai behad khoob likha hai aapne....maiN zidd saheb ki baat se harf-ba-harf ittefaaq rakhta hooN ki "rumaani andaz koi tumse seekhe......"
maza aa gaya padh kar...
bahut sari daad....qubuul kijiyega...
aapka dost...
vikram "masttt..."
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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3rd September 2010, 01:03 AM
bahut khoob lamha ji,
yeh andaaz aapka sach main dil fareb raha....kuch ya kisi ko pa lene ke baad jo sampoornta ka ehsaas hota hain aapki kavita ne kuch aisa hi sama bandha....
kuch kehte nahi ban pad raha......aapne jannat dikha di....
reps+++
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Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me
Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me
Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo
Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me
(When i received You in my heart everything changed for me)
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3rd September 2010, 06:18 PM
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Originally Posted by aru
kya baat hai lamha, its really very nice, shabdon kee kami mehsoos kar raha hoon pehli baar, ek ek shabd jasbaaton se bhara hai, aur itna simple bhi hai kee dil ko choo kar chala gaya hai yaar .Keep it up.
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Arvind ,
aap ka bahut bahut shukriya itni gehrayi se is kalaam ko padhne ka... bas yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye...muskurate rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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3rd September 2010, 07:01 PM
वाह क्या बात है क्या खूब ग़ज़ल लिखी है आपने सीधे दिल मैं उतर गई ! पढ़ने के बाद ऐसा लगने लगा की काश उपरवाला हमारे नसीब मैं भी ऐसे चंद लम्हे डाल देता जिनके एक पल मैं हीं हम सदीयाँ गुज़ार लेते
Quote:
Originally Posted by lamha
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Aapka Santosh..........
Bahut tanhaiya.N hai.N mere hisse mei.N churalo tum
Tumhara saath meri tanhaiyo.N se kuch to behtar hai...
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4th September 2010, 01:43 AM
Kya baat hai bahenaa......... Dear now Im sure yeh tumne hi likha hai...
Bahut achcha likha and realy sabhi sher bahut achche rahe..... Mindblowing...... And touchi thought's ... Kafi achcha likhane lagi ho ab keep writting ....... daad daad .....
Aise hi likhati raho khush raho.......
Khuda hafez........
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5th September 2010, 01:47 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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kya baat hai lamha..
this is really sweet..
kis sher ki jyada tareef karu samsjh nahi aa raha...
fantastic thoughts..
keep writin..
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5th September 2010, 02:07 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Ek Dost Ka Salam Kabool Farmaie ga Lamha Ji...
Aap Ki Har Gazal Me Ek Ajab Si Kasis Hoti Ha,Jab Bhi Mujhe waqt Milta Hai Me Aap Ki Gazale jaroor Padhata Hoo,Har Gajal Me Ek Naya Andaz Rahata Hai Aap Ka Lekin Hume Aap Ka Dil Ki Har Baat Kalam Se Khoobsurati Se Baya.n Karne ka Andaz Pasand Hai................
Hamari Taraf Se 2 Line Aap Ke Liye.......
Kisi Se Milne Ki Chahat Me Gun-Gunane Lagi Hai,
Apne Har Gum Ko Bhul Kar "Lamha" Ab Muskurne Lagi Hai....
So Keep Smiling Always..........
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5th September 2010, 02:47 PM
baar baar padhna achha lagta hai;;;;
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Wohi rizq deta jahaan ko , wohi zaat sab se azeem hai
Meri muflisi pe na hans ke wo , tera taaj sar se giraa na de
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6th September 2010, 07:12 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Lamha jii aapki dilkash aur romaani takhleeq bhut achi lagi, kaafi achay andaaz mai baat ko kaha hai aapne, aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai quool keejiye likhti rahiye
aslam
you.n na samjhoge kinare pe khade rehkar tum
behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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6th September 2010, 11:31 PM
Lamha:
namaste!
koShiSh bahot Khoob rahii.n.. aage bhee liKhate rahe.n! bazm ki Shaan baRhaate rahe.n.. daad!
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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8th September 2010, 06:10 PM
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Originally Posted by Aashique
WAH Lamha Har sher.. La Jawaab Hai ..
Har Sher Kuch Khaas Sa Lagaa
Har Ehsaas... Jaise Kabhi Chu Kar Gaya Ho...
Har Shabd Kuch Apna Sa Laga
WAah waah
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Aadi,
is kalaam me aapne apnapan mehsoos kiya, ye mere liye bahut badi baat hai... izzat-afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya ... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhna.... khush raho...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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8th September 2010, 06:14 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Very Very Impressive ..... Lamha Ji ! Very Romantic ... Very Touching .... Awesome ... !!!
Very Nice Creation .... !
Reps ++++++++++ Rachana ! Bhole ShabdoN MeN Hai Wafaa Ki Khushboo ... !
Tahe dil se daad hazir hai.... Qubuul FaramaayeN ....
khush rahen...
Duaaon ke saath.....
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Naresh ji,
tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu ke aapne apna kimati waqt mere is kalaam ko diya... rep+ ka bhi bahut bahut shukriya... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par....yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye..... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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8th September 2010, 06:17 PM
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Originally Posted by parveen komal
my dear lamha ! jo aapne pees dia hai use chhanne ki jaroorat nahi.n
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Originally Posted by parveen komal
+++ raps to chhoti baat hai agar mai is gazal pe apni jaan ki daad bhi de doon to kam hogi
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Parveen ji,
bahut bahut shukriya ke aapne apna kimati waqt nikaal kar mere is adnaa se kalaam pe nazar-e-karam kiya... aapne bahut badi baat kahi hai janab... shukriya... bahut bahut shukriya... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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9th September 2010, 08:09 PM
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ji very sweet & simple.........................nice creation.............
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aap ka bahut bahut shukriya Radhika ji.......................khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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9th September 2010, 08:10 PM
Kavita ji,
aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... aapka bahut bahut shukriya....yuhi saath dete rahiye... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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9th September 2010, 09:05 PM
Subhanallah!!! subhanallah!!! subhanallah!!! Kiya baat hai Lamha.....very nyc i cnt help readin agen n agen....har soch bht khubsurat hai....i love da way u hav played bout with da words.....ese hi likhte rahiye......
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10th September 2010, 07:11 PM
Omi,
shukriya............... shukriya.................. shukriya............
thank u sooooooo much buddy... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... mere in lafzon ne tumhara dil khush kar diya, is se badi baat aur kya ho sakti hai... bas yuhi apna saath banaye rakhna... khush raho... muskurate raho.....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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10th September 2010, 07:12 PM
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Hello Lamha ji!
It's so very romantic..... Congratulations!
Keep writing!
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Mann,
thank u soooooooooo much for ur support... keep supporting dear... khush rahiye.....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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16th September 2010, 06:23 PM
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Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel
Waise mujhe to kalam se zyda comments padhne me zyda maza aaya.......khair sabki apni apni pasand hai.
Aapki peshkash itni impressive to nahi lagi ke dil se Wah kya baat hai nikal jaye.......lekin wordplay khoob raha.
Keep writing.
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Sajid,
maafi chahti hu janab ke aapko mera ye kalaam impressive nahi laga... agli baar koshish karungi ke aapki umeedon pe khari utar saku... yaha aane ka bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi saath dete rahiye...khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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16th September 2010, 06:25 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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16th September 2010, 06:29 PM
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lamha,
kya kamaal likha hai...ise padhne ke baad to maiN kafi der ye sochta raha ki kya maine ye asal meiN padha hai....waqai behad khoob likha hai aapne....maiN zidd saheb ki baat se harf-ba-harf ittefaaq rakhta hooN ki "rumaani andaz koi tumse seekhe......"
maza aa gaya padh kar...
bahut sari daad....qubuul kijiyega...
aapka dost...
vikram "masttt..."
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Vikram,
bahut bahut bahut shukriya dost.... aapne yaha aakar muje izzat bakshi hai... aap jaise umdaa shayar agar mere kalaam ki tarif kare to ye mere liye bahut badi baat hai... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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17th September 2010, 05:25 PM
FaNtastic creatioN......................
Pawan(shayari)
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17th September 2010, 06:08 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
kal ek shakhs se mulaqaat ho gai
Kal ek Shakhs se Mulaqaat Ho gai
pal pal joda or din bhar baat ho gai
subah ka dilkash manzar cheda
kab na jaane haseen raat ho gai
Khuda bhi the shayad meherbaan humpe
chaha tha bheegna or barsaat ho gai
baaton baaton me jab muskuraye woh
yu laga hawaa bhi apne saath ho gai
tab se ud rahi hoon hawao mai "Lamha"
jaise mujh nacheez ki koi auqaat ho gai
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Lamha ji ek nihaayat hi khoobsoorat takhleeq pesh kee hai aapne.....ahsaason ko chhed diya aapne.... iske liye tah-e-dil se daad qabool farmaaiyega...
Harash
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18th September 2010, 07:27 PM
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bahut khoob lamha ji,
yeh andaaz aapka sach main dil fareb raha....kuch ya kisi ko pa lene ke baad jo sampoornta ka ehsaas hota hain aapki kavita ne kuch aisa hi sama bandha....
kuch kehte nahi ban pad raha......aapne jannat dikha di....
reps+++
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Amit,
aap ka bahut bahut shukriya ke aapne mere is kalaam ko pasand kiya... mere kuch alfaaz agar aapko jannat dikhane me safal hue hai to ye mere liye bahut badi baat hai... shukriya...
rep+ ka bhi tahe dil se shukriya.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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18th September 2010, 07:32 PM
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वाह क्या बात है क्या खूब ग़ज़ल लिखी है आपने सीधे दिल मैं उतर गई ! पढ़ने के बाद ऐसा लगने लगा की काश उपरवाला हमारे नसीब मैं भी ऐसे चंद लम्हे डाल देता जिनके एक पल मैं हीं हम सदीयाँ गुज़ार लेते
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Santosh ji,
izzat-afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya... hum aapke liye Dua karenge ke uparwala zaroor aapke naseeb me aise beshumaar lamhe daale aur aap ko har pal dhero khushiyan nasib ho... aameen...
yuhi saath dete rahiye....khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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