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Hone Ko Hai!!!!!!! -
4th August 2004, 08:08 PM
"Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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5th August 2004, 02:54 AM
Pyari Pari,
Aapki nazm bahut achi lagi... lekin yun maut ki inayat kyun??
Jaanti hun, hum sab kabhi na kabhi zindagi se haar maan jaate hain.. aur maut ka daaman thaamna chaahte hain.. par aisa sochna bhi galat hai..
Zindagi humein ek hi baar milti hai.. Dukh aate hain.. to kya hua, itna mazboot banaao khud ko ki dukh humara kuch bhi na bigaad paaye, aur khud hi laut jaaye..
I'm not just saying this for the sake of sayin.. i really mean it.. i've done this... and i hope my frnds will face everything with a strong heart!
All the best!
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
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5th August 2004, 01:36 PM
Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
ulfat na ho kabhi badnaam..eswer kere pura ho aapka kaam.
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
hasarat bani rahegi..aur thoker phir na lagegi
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kerm se kismat bhi badal jaati hai..ummra bher sath ro bana rahega
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
jab nafrat hogi to vaha sachcha pyar hoga hi...
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
Man is mortal.. esse bhaga nahi jata..per humesha positive sochana chahiye.
Akant...
*********
आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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5th August 2004, 03:49 PM
Pari ji.,..
Bahut hi pyara kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne..bahut hi acha laga…daad kabool kijiyega.
Take care
Main zakhm zakhm hoon phir bhi tujhe dikhayi na doon
tadap uthoon bhi toh zalim teri duhayi na doon
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5th August 2004, 03:50 PM
Akant ji…
Aapne bhi khoob kaha…lekin iss par ye kahoongi ki kabhi kabhi..kuch toofan uth jaye…kuch sailab aa jaye…usmein barbad ho kar hi sukoon milta hai…
Lekin ye bhi sahi ki postive thinking hi apnani chahyie insaan ko.
Main zakhm zakhm hoon phir bhi tujhe dikhayi na doon
tadap uthoon bhi toh zalim teri duhayi na doon
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hi -
5th August 2004, 06:42 PM
Priya ji,
Aapke baatein bahut achhi lagi aur bahut had tak sacchi bhi hai...
magar kabhi sach mein dil itna maayoos ho jaata hai ki dil rone ko karta hai..aur yahi aansoo in lafjo ke jariye kaagaz pe utar aate hai...ye sirf ek lamha hota hai..ek kamjor lamha..lekin phir kuch der baad aapne aap hi man mein ek aasha janam leti hai...aur bas phir se hum apne aap pe hasne lagte hai...
aur sach mein aise kamjor lamho mein aap jaise dost hi sahara ban ke wo asha jagate hai...isliye..bas isi tarah saath dete rahiye.
hum bhi sab dard seh jaayenge..
take care,
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Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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hi -
5th August 2004, 06:47 PM
Akant ji,
aapne bilkul sahi likha hai...sach bahut saara dhanyawad aapko..
aapki aisi baatein hamesha ek support deti hai..aage badhne ki prerna deti hai..shayad yahi dosti hoti hai...aapki ye baatein hamesha mere jehan mein rahegi...
apna khayal rakhiyega..
aapki dost,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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5th August 2004, 06:51 PM
Hi roops,
kaisi ho??Thanx ki aapko ye kalam pasand aaya...aur sach kaha tumne ki kabhi kabhi aise bhi dard milte hai jinmein khud hi doob jaane ko man karta hai..magar kya kare yaha humare dost aise hai jo humein doobne hi nahi dete ..phir se bahar nikal laate hai.
well take care,
with luv,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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5th August 2004, 08:02 PM
Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
Pari Ji,
Jeewan maiN aashaa kaa sanchaar rakhnaa chaahiye. Jo log samay ke aage haar maan lete haiN unhe yahi kahungaa kii:
Jinaa hai chaar din to kyoN naa jiye jinda diloN ke saath
Is jahaaN mei hai mushkile to har ik aadmi ke saath
is liye ghazal maiN bhi logoN maiN umiid jagaani chaahiye her ik shayar ko. Jindgi saral ho jaati hai. Phir bhi achhaa likhaa hai. all the best and take care.
Nutkhut
jahaa.n bhi ho.nge apne liye jagah bana le.nge
Humko aata hai huner dil mei.n utar jaane kaa
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5th August 2004, 08:11 PM
pari
aaka yek kalaam is tarah ka hai jaisa ke hamari tehzeeb o sakhawat aur shayr o adab ka raha hai.
techniki lehaaz se is mein behtari ki gunjaayesh hai magar mujhe jo baat achchi lagi voh aap ka lab-o-lehja hai, yehi hamari shaiyri ki riwayet hai.
isi tarah likhti rahen, God bless you.
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hi -
5th August 2004, 09:33 PM
Jinaa hai chaar din to kyoN naa jiye jinda diloN ke saath
Is jahaaN mei hai mushkile to har ik aadmi ke saath
bahut sahi kaha hai aapne nutkhut ji...waqui jeevan mein aasha ka sanchar rakhna chahiye...magar phir bhi kabhi kuch kamjor lamhe har insaan ki zindgi mein aate hai jab wo hatash mehsoos karta hai....lekin agle hi pal khud ko sambhal leta hai....maine bhi ye sab aise hi lamho mein likh diya..bina ye soche ki is se doosron pe kya asar hoga..bas apne jajbaat sabke saath baant kar us dukh ko kam karna chaha maine...sabki alag soch aur alag fitrat hoti....aap apni shayris ke jariye sabhi ke man mein aasha jagana chahte hai..ye to apne aap mein bahut badi baat hai...bas mein bhi aage se aisi hi kosish karungi...
take care,
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Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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5th August 2004, 09:42 PM
MUsaraffhussain ji,
Aapki nazro-inayat jab mere kalaam per padti hai to khud b khud mukammal ho jaati hai...aapko mera lab-o-lehja pasand aaya ye to zarra nawaji hai aapki..aage behtar likhne koshish jaari rakhungi....
hamesha aapki duao ki talabgaar..
aapki..pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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6th August 2004, 12:15 PM
Roopali ji
aapne likha hai ek word "sukoon".. shayad hi koi aisa vyakti ho jise sukoon ki talash na ho.. per hume sukuoon ki talash postive way mein hi sochate huye kerni chahiye..na ki khud ko gava ker.. jaha tak mera apan view hai love per ..hum jise bhi pyar kerte hain ya pyaar paate hain. ek dusere ki khushi chahte hain.. aapne meri baato ko saraha aur mere way ko samjha uske liye main aapka abhari hoon.
*****
Pari ji,
ab main kya kahu.... achchha to aapko dhanyvaad
with best wishes,
Akant...
*********
आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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6th August 2004, 02:50 PM
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
bhut khub kaha hai apne pari ji
dil ko choo gaye ye sher.dard hai kaphi
sakhi ki daad kubul akro
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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6th August 2004, 03:19 PM
hi pari jee
bhut khoob, apki nazam bhut hi achi hai dil ko cho gayi bhoot aarse baad aaj kuch aisa pada hai jisne dil ko cho liya hai. it is a beautiful poem keep on writin aur aik baat umeed ka daman kabhi nahi choorte. yeh sach hai ke kabhi kabhi apni chahat hi ghair ho jaati hai magar phir bi aap yeh bi to keh sakte hai ke who eva it was wasnt worth ur love beacuse if that person couldnt apprciate ur love and care for ur feelings he iant worth all those tears is well.
well keep on writing and take care of ur self
bye
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Re: Hone Ko Hai!!!!!!! -
6th August 2004, 06:59 PM
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
pari ji
kaisi hai aap??? sach kahun to aapne aaj "dard" par "wah" kehne ka gunaah karwa diya hamse.....aap ke alfazon mein aaj kal bahoot dard aur gehrai paata hoon mein....yeh gazal bhi behad purasar likhi hai aapne..hamari dil se nikli daad kubool kijiye...isi khubsurati se likhte rahiye..khush rahiye...take care
-Manoj
apne usoolon par ham apne andaaz se chalte hai
karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein.
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6th August 2004, 09:27 PM
Pari ji
Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
bohut khoob likha hai,gham ki gehraiyan saaf dikh rahi hai.
Zindagi to naam isi ka hai jab tak koi cheez kho na jaayegi uski keemat nahi maloom hogi.
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7th August 2004, 03:19 AM
Bahut khoob pari ji bahut khoob andaz se dil ki baat bayaan ki hai...aage likhne ki gusthaki kar raha hoon
"Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
mere baad tum na rona mere jaane se
ke tumko phir mujhse mohabbat hone ko hai
phir na aaunga mein saahil ki bauchaar mein
meri kashti yahi par dubone ko hai
-Mast
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7th August 2004, 04:57 AM
Dear Pari jee...
Tumko paane kee chahat thee hamein
Tumko paakar bhuul yeh jayeinge malum na thaa
Bus Apka kalaam padh kar mujhe apna kaha kuch yaad aa gaya...gehra hai, sacha hai, dil ke tuutne ka asar hai yeh...lekin mayoos mat rahiye...pyaar aur dard bus upar neeche hote rehte hain...kabhi pyaar ka paldaa bhari tau kabhi dard ka...
Daad kabuul kijiey...khush rahieye
paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
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7th August 2004, 10:18 AM
"Dil ki tamannayein rukhsat hone ko hai
ke badnaam aaj meri ulfat hone ko hai
teri har thokar pe kiya sajdaa humne
ke qatl aaj meri har hasrat hone ko hai
chaha tha umar bhar tera saath mile
ke alwidaa aaj meri kismat hone ko hai
kiye the muhabbat ke waade jinse
ke unhi se aaj humein nafrat hone ko hai
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
Yeh kab hua pari?... Zaroor tumhare ram tumhe tumhare shila-prastar roop me pehchan nahi paye honge... Kasht Uthan chahiye, right ?
Ne what ways... the shayri is once again a classic... Do keep writing such wonderful sfuff.... Tc
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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7th August 2004, 03:20 PM
ab koi shikwaa nahi is jamane se
ke maut ki aaj humein inayat hone ko hai....."
Pari ji…
Kya baat kahi hai! Itna nirash kis liye…??? Mout ki out sab ko inaayat ek na en din honi hi hai.. Tou kyuN na ham yah baat uparwale ke upar hi chhorH deN.. Achchha likha hai pari ji.. Yun hi dil ke ehsaasoN ko yahaaaN zahiir karte rahiye..
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7th August 2004, 07:31 PM
Hi sakhi,
kaisi ho????aur tumhari daad to kabool hi nahi sir aankhon pe hai
bas isi tarah likhti rehna..
apna khayal rakhna,
pari
Romana ji,
achha laga ye jaankar ki meri rachna aapke dil ke kisi kone ko chuu gai hai...bas meri koshish kaamyaab hui....aur bilkul sacchi baatein likhi hai aapne....uske liye aapki shukragujaar hu....
bas aise hi pyar bhare reply dete rahiyega..
aapki,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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7th August 2004, 07:48 PM
Manoj ji,
kaise hai aap??tarif ke liye bahut shukriya.....bas aap hi se prerna
le kar likhne shuru kiya tha,....aaj bhi usi koshish mein hu...
bas aap ki daad isi tarah milti rahe to mere kalam bhi poore ho jaaye..
take care..
aapki nayi rachna ke intzaar mein,
pari
Nawabzaveed ji,
sach kaha hai aapne..ki kisi cheez ki kimat uske kho jaane ke baad hi pata chalti hai....lekin tab tak bahut der ho jaati hai..
khair aapka reply paakar sach bahut khushi hui....bas aise hi apne jajbaat jaahir karte rahiyega..
take care,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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7th August 2004, 07:54 PM
mere baad tum na rona mere jaane se
ke tumko phir mujhse mohabbat hone ko hai
phir na aaunga mein saahil ki bauchaar mein
meri kashti yahi par dubone ko hai
ye lines jod kar mast ji aapne mera kalaam poora kar diya hai..
bahut dhanyawad aapka...bas aise hi jab koi dil se mera likha padhta hai aur uspe apne jajbaat jahir karta hai to sach kahu bahut sakoon milta hai...
aage bhi aapse aise hi reply ki aasha karti hu..
pari
Parataar ji,
Tumko paane kee chahat thee hamein
Tumko paakar bhuul yeh jayeinge malum na thaa
bahut khoob sher kaha hai aapne...aap khud ek bahut hi umdaa aur ucche darje ki shayra hai..aur jab aapki daad milti hai to lagta hai jaise bahut kuch paa liye hai....aapki daad sir aankhon pe hai..
bas aise hi likhte rahiyega..
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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7th August 2004, 07:59 PM
Pulkit ji,
Humare Raam to humein har roop mein pehchaan jaate hai...tum apni kaho...amrita to tum shila ki jagah pahaad bhi ban jaaoge to nahi dekhegi
well tarif ke liye shukriya....mein to isi laayak hu na...
take care,
pari
Mayank ji ,
bas aapki dua saath rahi to har mushkil raah ki aasan ho hi jaayegi....aur bahut shukriya tarif ke liye..
apna khayal rakhiyega,
pari
Chadha hai aaj bhi uska Rang, jisne kabhi Ranga hi nahi :-)
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