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27th August 2010, 12:04 PM
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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27th August 2010, 12:25 PM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
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kavita jee
radhe radhe'
bahut khoob.......sundar ehsaason ke liye dil se daad
likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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27th August 2010, 12:29 PM
pahle apko pada hi hoga magar shayad itna kabhi mutaasir nahi hua hu mai jo aaj hua...
is baar magar aapne kamaal kar diya...
aisa laga jaise shayri apne zabaan se kuch bol rahi ho.........
aapne metaphors bahut acche istemaal kiye hai
on the whole ek bahut hi acchi koshish....
format bhi apka kabile taareef hai is baar
is kalaam ke liye dher saari daad haazir hai
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27th August 2010, 01:26 PM
kavita ji bhot sunder peshkesh hai.N aapki
pawan(shayari)
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27th August 2010, 02:23 PM
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kavita jee
radhe radhe'
bahut khoob.......sundar ehsaason ke liye dil se daad
likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath
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27th August 2010, 03:02 PM
Khoobsurat peshkash Kavita jee.....
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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27th August 2010, 05:09 PM
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
good one kavita ji..
keep writin..
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27th August 2010, 05:46 PM
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Originally Posted by zidd
pahle apko pada hi hoga magar shayad itna kabhi mutaasir nahi hua hu mai jo aaj hua...
is baar magar aapne kamaal kar diya...
aisa laga jaise shayri apne zabaan se kuch bol rahi ho.........
aapne metaphors bahut acche istemaal kiye hai
on the whole ek bahut hi acchi koshish....
format bhi apka kabile taareef hai is baar
is kalaam ke liye dher saari daad haazir hai
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Aapko yahan dekh kar bahut khushi hui....!!! Dil se shukriya....
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27th August 2010, 11:19 PM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
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kavita ji,
bahut sundar likha hai aapne...ehsaas behad achhe lage mujhe...
aapke is qalaam pe daad haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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28th August 2010, 06:56 AM
Kavita Ji ... Ab tak ki sab se umdaa peshkash lagi mujhe ... bahut hi khoobsurati se aapne ehsaasoN ko prastut kiya hai...dil ko chhuune me kaamiyaab rahi ... aapki rachna .... bahut khoob .... Very Impressive Indeed... ! SuperB Creation...dil se daad hazir hai... yunhi likhi rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...
reps++++
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
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28th August 2010, 11:56 AM
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kavita ji bhot sunder peshkesh hai.N aapki
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28th August 2010, 05:47 PM
bhut khoob likha hai aapne ek acha andaaz e bayaaN jo ki muta'assir karta hai yuN hi likhti rahiye daad hazir hai qubool keejiye
aslam
you.n na samjhoge kinare pe khade rehkar tum
behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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30th August 2010, 01:00 PM
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Khoobsurat peshkash Kavita jee.....
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Dhanyawad Sajid ji.................
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30th August 2010, 01:01 PM
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Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
good one kavita ji..
keep writin..
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Thanx a lot Shipra ji...............
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30th August 2010, 01:03 PM
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kavita ji,
bahut sundar likha hai aapne...ehsaas behad achhe lage mujhe...
aapke is qalaam pe daad haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...
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Shukriya Vikram ji,
Daad dil se qubool hai Vikram ji,, Teh dil se shukriya......
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30th August 2010, 01:08 PM
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Kavita Ji ... Ab tak ki sab se umdaa peshkash lagi mujhe ... bahut hi khoobsurati se aapne ehsaasoN ko prastut kiya hai...dil ko chhuune me kaamiyaab rahi ... aapki rachna .... bahut khoob .... Very Impressive Indeed... ! SuperB Creation...dil se daad hazir hai... yunhi likhi rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...
reps++++
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Baht bahot dhanyawad meri koshish ko pasand karne ke liye....Teh dil se dhanyawaad ji....
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31st August 2010, 10:29 AM
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bhut khoob likha hai aapne ek acha andaaz e bayaaN jo ki muta'assir karta hai yuN hi likhti rahiye daad hazir hai qubool keejiye
aslam
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Aslam ji
Bahut bahut shukriya.. aapki daad dil se qubool hai Aslam ji..........
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2nd September 2010, 12:03 AM
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Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
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A very nice creation indeed...! My compliments, Kavita Ji...!
Reminds me of a song by late Rafi Ji :
Kaise kategi zindagi tere bagair tere bagair
PaaouNga har shay kami tere bagair tere bagair
Keep penning and take care, ok...?
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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2nd September 2010, 11:55 AM
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A very nice creation indeed...! My compliments, Kavita Ji...!
Reminds me of a song by late Rafi Ji :
Kaise kategi zindagi tere bagair tere bagair
PaaouNga har shay kami tere bagair tere bagair
Keep penning and take care, ok...?
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aise hi sath dete rahiyega......
Regards,
Kavita
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3rd September 2010, 08:23 AM
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Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
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Kavita....mere paas in shabd nahi hain kuch kahne ko shayad is liye kyun ki main bhi aaj kal kuch issi daur se guzar raha hoon....
Bahut accha likhti ho.......keep writing !!!
aapka.
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mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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3rd September 2010, 03:14 PM
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Kavita....mere paas in shabd nahi hain kuch kahne ko shayad is liye kyun ki main bhi aaj kal kuch issi daur se guzar raha hoon....
Bahut accha likhti ho.......keep writing !!!
aapka.
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Shukriya Secret ji,
Ishwar na karen...Aise daur se koi gujre....!!! Aur shabdo ki jarurat nahi.. aap yaha aaye yahi bahut hai.....!!! Aise hi sath dete rahiyega....!!!
Regards
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3rd September 2010, 03:23 PM
Kavitaa jii,
Bahut hii sundar ehsaas.. aur utana si sundar bayaan.. dil se daad qabool kare..
duwao ke sath..
Omi
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Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...
Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
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3rd September 2010, 06:40 PM
Kavita ji,
bahut khoob .... ehsaas bahut sunder hai aur unki bayani kaafi asardaar... dil se daad hazir hai... yuhi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye...
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4th September 2010, 11:01 AM
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Kavitaa jii,
Bahut hii sundar ehsaas.. aur utana si sundar bayaan.. dil se daad qabool kare..
duwao ke sath..
Omi
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Daad dil se qabool hai Omi JI,,,,,
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4th September 2010, 12:56 PM
dil me gahra suraakh kar gai aapki nazam . kiu.n likhte hai.n aap itna badhia +++raps
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4th September 2010, 04:03 PM
Ek sunder kavish aapki negi ji....bahoot hi achha likhte haiN aap isi tarah aage bhi likhterahiyega...
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Shukriya Parveen ji,,,
Dil me gehra suraakh kr gai meri nazam bhot bhot shukriya
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Ek sunder kavish aapki negi ji....bahoot hi achha likhte haiN aap isi tarah aage bhi likhterahiyega...
Harash
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Aapka teh dil se shukriya Harash Ji,
Aise hi sath dete rahiyega
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9th September 2010, 06:37 PM
Hey kavita mujhe ye apki koshish bht hi achi lagi.....apka har lafz aur har soch beshaq kabil e tareef hai....apka har ehsas bht hi pyara aur khubsurat hai.....ese hi likhte rahiye aur SDC ko sajate rahiye.....
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Hey kavita mujhe ye apki koshish bht hi achi lagi.....apka har lafz aur har soch beshaq kabil e tareef hai....apka har ehsas bht hi pyara aur khubsurat hai.....ese hi likhte rahiye aur SDC ko sajate rahiye.....
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Aasefa ji,
Mujhe padhne aur sarhaane k liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya.....Aise hi sath dete rahiyega.....
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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